All Comments on 'Danny Ray'
by Casey5940
- 18 Comments
A nice story. It was great that both sets of parents supported their sons in their choice of being gay. It was a pleasant story.
I must say this story had its ups and downs, but was written awesomely well. So glad to see a happy ending in a story of this caliber. Thank you for sharing such a great story. It feels to me that this story came from personal experience instead of out of your imagination. A well done story from a very good author. Please keep writing, for you have a knack for it.
ACLASSYLADY
That was one of the most beautiful stories I've ever read. Glad it had a HEA. Thank you so much for sharing your talent.
Lucinda
I come to this site for hot sex stories and this didn't have it. But what a great story it was. Really loved it, especially the love and support from the parents . Your writing shows lots of talent. Hope you continue.
Really great stuff, if a little rushed along. This could've easily been a novella if giving room for the characters to breath. Keep writing.
Thanks for this story. Danny Ray and "Jackson" fit so well together. If Danny Ray has curly black hair, and hairy forearms, I wonder what's covering his sculpted chest and pecs? Maybe more black hair adorns his masculine muscular chest? Maybe Ethan is super turned-on by the hairy chest? I imagine hairy abs, a hairy chest, hairy thighs -- a real man! Please write more, and include descriptions!
I always love such stories. Well written and realistic. I Love it...😆
I assumed it was a stroke story, I didn't see it progress into a love story...
Well done...
Really fall in love with their love! Good writing!
I enjoyed reading this love story! It was so sweet and romantic. One more thing, woman go to Obstetricians when they're pregnant. Pediatricians are for children.
Like many other readers, I come here for EROTICA, and this story isn't that. However, like many other readers, I'm so taken with the general quality of the writing that I'll almost happily overlook its "deficiencies" (if you can really call them that) in the "trashy smut" department.
But, to my mind, that kicks the criteria for judgment to a higher level, and from that standpoint, this story is literally happier than a Disney princess story. The Prince Charming plays everything perfectly and does not possess a single character flaw. In fact, the only characters with any real flaws are (arguably) Lane and his poor widowed wife, who is the only one in the story not really delighted by lovingly supportive of the gay characters. (Danny's sister even gets her life together, miraculously.)
Don't get me wrong, this story is sweet, and I think it's intended to be, and in that regard it's a lovely little fairy tale. But there's really not any conflict in it at all. The only "issue" that comes up is the flirting incident, which reads as completely overblown (can you say "drama queen?") - If you threw in other incidents with Danny flirting hard with other women, it would make more sense, but just the one incident doesn't seem to justify the reaction. So, basically, it's a VERY sweet little romance story, but it's sooooo sweet that it may border on nauseating.
I agree with another commenter who said it could make for a nice little novella. More length would allow you to build up that "flirting" conflict and maybe delve into the baggage that Danny almost certainly has behind that perfect facade (you don't mistakenly kiss your dead boyfriend in a foxhole in Afghanistan while pinned down by enemy fire for an entire night without SOME kind of emotional trauma - PTSD, rage, depression . . . SOMETHING). The Marines may have helped Danny work through his brother's death, but that Afghanistan wound is still pretty fresh.
But seriously, the "bones" of this story are great, and I'm only nit-picking because the story is good enough to warrant LEGIT critiquing. You've written a wonderfully sweet story here . . . it just needs a bit more "bitter" to even it out a little, and to make the resolution you eventually arrive at seem that much more powerful by contrast.
Really good work.
A very good story. I've read it at least twice, maybe three times.
Right from the start it is realistic. Maybe a slight bit too upbeat. What that means is that the story has 'reality' blended into it, but most lives have more stress and turmoil than this story's version of reality or regular life shares with the reader.
There is no question that this story could have a sequel or second section from maybe 5 or 6 years later, adding in the raising of Austin maybe?
The writing style is wonderful, and continuing the story would be wonderful.
DV19
Loved this story overall even though it was a bit too sweet and literally had almost no sex at all. Because it’s so good I too feel the need to offer a bit of picky critique that seemed strange to me. First, Danny was such an alpha which was a point made over and over. But Ethan was a masculine jock too, yet he was presented quite literally “as the girl” in the story. I would have expected two studly guys would not confirm to traditional gender roles in the way they did. Yet then it seemed odd that Danny took Ethan’s last name and Austin therefore did not have the Suarez surname. Also the flirting incidence was just strained. Given the betrayal Danny later shared, and the fact that he deeply cared for Ethan, why in the world would he even remotely flirt with a cute waitress (he even held her hand)?! Who does that right in the face of their partner? And then he seemed clueless that Ethan was upset. Sure Ethan may have over-reacted but he surely had every right to object to that and be angry. It didn’t fit the otherwise devoted picture the story painted of Danny. Lastly, their quick I love you’s seem to come out of the blue - they had been together for like a month, had only been in like 4-5 dates, had not been very physical yet, and had just had a very emotional conflict. Ok, whatever. But the story really was great - a solid “5”! Would love to see another chapter on these guys.