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Click here"I'm fine," I assured her. "You just gave me an idea on how I might turn the fiasco of today into a positive."
"I did?" She asked.
"You did, gorgeous," I told her.
"Careful, Kenny. Someone might start thinking that you like me," She warned.
"I do like you, Michelle," I confirmed.
"I know you do. You can't help it. I'm blonde after all," She joked.
I shook my head and sighed.
"Hey, Kenny? I kind of like you too." She confessed.
"Only kind of?" I teased.
"All right, not just kind of but don't get cocky on me or anything," She told me.
"I wouldn't dream of it, Michelle," I smiled.
- COMMENTS
What the hell, Ken forgets to tell the Dick's/Security all five thugs had knives the medal detector did not detect? i.e. professional level
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The Park has PTZ cameras but lost ALL five thugs in the crowd? They never get the silver cars license number, make, model? [Gimmy a break]
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An ex-SEAL cannot give detailed descriptions of the five thugs; particulars/race/tat's/etc? He recognizes one thug and it's not PRIORITY?
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An ex-SEAL does not catch the cues the thug leader gave him; like 'Grayson" by name - how would he know that? Thug-Leader made reference of reading Grayson's file - how did he get it, from whom? Should lead all to recognize insider-info on security and movements.
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What I'm reading is fumbling keystone-cops disgracing Operator-level SEALS.
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2.8*** hooyah 10yrs-USN CPO
Great story up till the end of page 3. They don’t use their phones to call for help. Page 4, Then when they’re in security office at aquarium they still don’t call for help. I’m sorry but getting to stupid to continue reading. I was really enjoying the story until then. LM
need to get moving agree with other remarks just a bit too many words but good story.........................
It’s a good story however way, way too verbose. Why only use five words when you can stretch it out to fifteen. It does need serious editing. And I speak as an editor.
I thoroughly enjoyed this series, however we need an ending to the story... What's going on at the Voss empire, who is the guilty or dirty party within, etc etc etc.
Ok, one thing, Sergeant as in police sergeant is not spelled sargent. Your writing is much more fluid and makes for an excellent read on all 4 of these stories, IDK if you can edit one word in a story, but in the first few paragraphs of the first story in this series you say the sun glinted off the hull of the airplane. I believe the word you were searching for is "fuselage", sorry I'm an aircraft nerd. Other than those two very minor errors you could probably get published! Thanks for writing the stories you do. They are well written and put together. You are very good at leaving the reader in suspense at the end of the story, so we keep coming back for more. I particularly like the way you hint at the sex part but don't go into clinical detail like so many writers on this site. I am looking forward to your next installments. I hope you some day tie up the loose ends in "New girl In Town". I'm waiting on that one too! What can I say, I'm a fan! Really good reading on your stories.
Your stories are incredible... I can’t wait for the next instalment in this series and to see what happens with Michelle and Grayson... Awesome work.. 👍
A very enjoyable read. I enjoy the banter as it feels real because I've experienced guys like this. The comedy and endearing put downs are stess relief for a team that has gone through so much together. Thank you.