by wuthering_heights
I loved it, it was an amazing erotic story . Only thing was maybe you could make her pregnancy last a little more then just a day, it would be a bit more believable even if it's a nonhuman story. Thanks for sharing .
First off I want to say you are a very talented writer. It was short but well paced, lacked any grammer mistakes that at least I could find, and most importantly, was very, very HOT! You painted Selena very well without dropping her entire character profile on us in the first couple of sentence's. Small things like her (soon to no longer be) flat belly. But to get to my point I believe you could have "milked" her pregnancy for more. Instead of just a few relative hours maybe more along a few days, weeks, or even months. While I'm not a fan of the blakc breeding fetish, "Ashley's Dark Awakening" makes very good use of impregnation and the resulting pregnancy and if you haven't read it yet I would suggest you give it a once over to see what I mean. What I'm trying to say is the character dealing with being pregnant is the potatoes to our steak. While it may not be the main meal on our plate it is a deciding factor between a story that gets our rocks off and a story that gets our rocks off so hard it makes our nuts hurt for the rest of the day. If you ever decide to do it I would love to see this story rewritten and extended as there very few /good/ pregnant with puppies like storys around and to leave this story as is to be frank a waste of your talents. Hope to see more from you in the future.
would love to read more please. How about another chapter to this story please.
I loved this story. There's always something so wonderful about getting bred by wolves.
I agree with the other long commenter. I wish you had added more detail to her pregnancy. But still amazing! Please write more.
"...her arousal had been peaked by the sight of that huge, inhuman cock..." It's piqing, not peaking.
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(piːk ) verb. If something piques your interest or curiosity, it makes you interested or curious.
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