All Comments on 'Jamey Visits Uncle Ron Ch. 01'
by LanaBehave
- 17 Comments
Love this but please tell me this doesn't signal the end for Lana and Ray's story.
You've really captured the uncomfortable zone that resides at the crossroads of shame and desire. Please continue.
Missy, Rachel, Justy, Anonymice, thank you. It may take a while, but your encouragement will help motivate another chapter! I haven't started yet, but I think things might develop at an...increased pace in CH. 02.
Lana
I haven’t read your other series but sure will now. It should keep me busy while we all wait for more of Jamie and Uncle Ron. I really enjoyed your pacing. I think it’s your delicious handling of shame and desire (as anon puts it) and the prolonged tease. It would prolly flop if your writing wasn’t so good. Yes please continue this one.
Excellent, I love the slow build. So sexy and intense. I really hope there's a part two.
It reads even better the second time. I’m all for the slow build. I could read a second part that moved at he same pace. Hope it does. I like those long sentences especially when you follow one with a shorter sentence. I think you have a dbl negative in there somewhere. ‘… it was nothing that I never had.’
But who cares. What am I, a grammarian? More of a geranium.
A very stimulating rendition of two who need each other to complete their intended destiny.
Thoroughly enjoyed it! Perfect description of the interplay between pansy nephew and uncle. I could feel how he felt.
Wow, I was captivated. Your words are very descriptive, writing about Jamey's feelings of reluctance, shame and humiliation by his authoritative "uncle." I would have very similar thoughts and feelings being exposed to such a situation. It's also the beginning of a very hot story!