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Click hereWhen we got back to her place she immediately kissed me and dragged me to her bedroom. She was as horny as she had declared.
Even though we were both still all dolled up for going out, Denise pulled me onto her bed and began kissing me.
After a bit we both began to unbutton each other's blouses but she kept pressing her lips to mine and her tongue kept playing with mine. Somehow we both got out of our tops, barely missing a kiss.
"I need you so badly," Denise whispered erotically.
Her chest heaved lightly as I was unsnapping her lacy dark blue bra and we slipped it off of her.
"My 'girls' need your lips," my hot looking brunette panted between our last few kisses.
I homed in on the rising and falling fleshy mounds before me. Her nipples were already sticking out nicely from her puffy areolae. Her normally flawless white skin was flush with excitement.
She pulled my head in to feast on her left breast. The red nailed fingers of her right hand began to tweak her other nipple.
Denise gasped and moaned as I worked over her amazing tits.
I glanced up at her face to see her eyes shut as she lightly bit her lower lip.
"Don't stop," the highly aroused, half naked brunette demanded.
I continued mauling her ample sized breasts.
I kept licking and sucking on her engorged nipples.
With my other hand I reached for her womanhood. I easily hiked her skirt up a bit.
Her panties were soaked.
She moaned in response to my touch as I rubbed her wet mound through the lacy material.
Shortly her moans and breathing were picking up.
It was time.
I moved to go down on her. But she stopped me.
"I need a cock in me," my lover said huskily.
My penis strained in it's cage.
I needed to put it in her.
But she knew that mine was all locked up.
Puzzled I looked up to see her pulling the monster dildo out from under the other pillow on her bed. The one that Naughty had sent to her. The more-than-coke-can thick one that she had to work hard to be able to almost fully take.
She wanted me to use that one on her.
I felt a wince of pain knowing that she did not seem to hesitate to go to it. That she did not even mention that she wished to be able to take my penis inside of her to satisfy her need.
My penis did not exist to her.
Not anymore it seemed.
My member strained even more in its polycarbonate prison.
Maybe it's just that she did not want to make me feel even worse about things.
That must be it.
"I need to feel this thick cock inside me," she declared as she held the realistic looking dildo out to me.
With her other hand she was trying to slide her wet panties off.
We managed to do it and I took the monster cock from her.
It felt so heavy in my hand.
It was so big.
It was so much bigger than my penis.
This was what my Denise wanted.
Not any of her other dildos.
Not the ones closer to my size.
She wanted this much bigger one.
"I need it now!" the horny brunette cried out breaking the train of thought that I had paused into.
I placed it at the entrance to her sopping wet snatch.
She moaned loudly at the contact.
"Give it to me now!" She growled like an animal.
I pressed it into her.
Her vagina easily took the head and several inches more.
I found myself gasping lightly.
I pulled it back and thrust it in again.
It went a little deeper that time.
"Yes, like that," my girlfriend moaned gutturally in response.
I pulled it back and thrust it in again and again.
Each time it went a little further until it bottomed out.
The beast had stretched her but even as lubed as she was, her pussy clung to and was partly pulled with the cock as I drew it back.
She panted and seemed to moan continuously now.
"Fuck me hard with that cock! Fuck me hard!" she demanded.
I pumped it into her faster and harder.
"Fuck does that feel good!" the brunette cried out.
Denise was grasping the blankets beside her with one hand and squeezing her nipples with the other.
She was loving every minute of this.
Denise truly was a woman in fervent heat.
Her breathing picked up even more and she abandoned her nipples to grasp the bed sheets with both of her red nailed hands.
Her body began to writhe in pleasure.
"I need your tongue on my clit! Do it now!" Denise commanded.
I quickly began to lap at her nubbin even as I was thrusting the monster of a cock into her.
Inadvertently my tongue also lapped the cock that was pleasuring her so greatly.
"Uhhhhhnnnn!"
"Uhhhhhnnnn!" Denise moaned out as she shook powerfully in orgasmic bliss.
Eventually, when she began to be still she placed her hands on my head to stop me.
As I raised my head from her mound I could feel her pussy still convulsing on the cock.
"No, leave it in there," Denise said calmly before I could pull it back out one last time.
"Come here babe," she said lovingly as she tugged on me a little.
I got up and nestled in beside her sweaty body.
Her chest still heaved with her heavy breaths.
She kissed me warmly on my lips. Both our lipsticks were smeared.
But it did not matter.
Her kiss was warmer and wetter than ever.
She looked me lovingly in the eyes.
"That was intense. I needed that dear,"
"I-"
"Shhhh, just hold me now. I need your caring embrace," Denise said soothingly.
Mixed emotions swirled within me as I cuddled with my spent girlfriend.
I kissed her on the cheek and soon she drifted off to sleep in my arms.
Suddenly I realized I was sitting beside Denise's bed, still all dolled up as Shauna while a large, muscular man pounded a massive cock into my Denise.
She still had her blue skirt from the night out on.
Her black stocking covered legs wrapped around his lower back.
Both were grunting like animals.
Neither seemed to notice that I was there.
"I love your big, thick, manly cock!" Denise cried out.
The man grunted and fucked my girlfriend even harder.
"Fuck that feels so good!" her lover barked out.
They grunted and groaned some more.
Their bodies seemed to move in unison.
My penis hurt so badly as it was desperately trying to get out of its cage.
I realized that I was sitting on a dildo that was attached to the chair.
It was thick.
It was buried deep inside my ass.
It filled me up completely.
I began to bounce up and down on it.
It felt good.
"I'm ovulating! I need your seed!" Denise cried out suddenly.
I tried to scream no but no words came out of my mouth.
I tried to get off the chair but I kept riding the thick dildo.
The man began to pump harder and —
I awoke with a start.
I was in Denise's room.
She was curled up in my arms.
it was 11:48 on her alarm clock..
I recalled what had happened. I had not wanted to move for fear of waking her. I must have fallen asleep too.
I had been dreaming.
No, it was a nightmare, not a dream.
I did need to get up though. I did need to get home before my wife Emma did. She never said that but I somehow knew that I needed to. Or felt it anyways.
I slowly extricated myself from my girlfriend Denise.
I had expected to find the "cock" still wedged in her. But couldn't tell.
It felt odd to have been pleasuring her not with my penis but with this more manly, fake cock.
Was that why I had that nightmare?
I loved this woman.
I should not have had any doubts earlier. I could not allow any to enter my mind now.
Even though it would wake her, I decided to pull her skirt off and get her under the covers. I could not leave her like this.
To my surprise, the 'cock' was still inside her. At least partly. Her flesh still kind of clung to it but not like before. In moving her, more of it came out. I relented and gently and slowly withdrew it from her womanhood. I stood it on her night stand as I finished taking care of her.
She half woke but slipped back into sleep once the deed was done and with some soothing whispers from me.
I looked over at the cock that had so pleasured my girlfriend. It glistened in the light as it still was wet with her juices.
I took it with me to the bathroom to clean it for her.
It felt so heavy in my hands again.
It looked so realistic.
Realistic for a dildo that is.
The end was shaped like a bulbous head of a cock. The shaft was veiny. Just like a real, manly cock. It was even kind of flesh coloured.
It was strong with her smell. I brought it up to my nose to inhale the scent of Denise's womanhood.
I loved that smell.
And the taste.
Images of her pussy filled my head. Those images were replaced by full fledged memories of eating her beautiful snatch out. I could almost taste it in my —
Suddenly my tongue reached out and licked some of her juices from the dildo.
My breathing picked up.
It felt odd to do that.
I felt the urge to taste her more.
I lapped at the fake cock with my salivating tongue again.
And again.
Soon I found myself licking more and more of more of her juices, wet or semi-dry, off of the cock.
I could not stop myself.
For some reason part of me wanted to know what it would be like to suck on a cock this big. I strained my lips as I opened my mouth wide and took the head of it in. Even though it was not real I knew that I should not get my teeth on it.
Instinctively I licked the underside an sucked on it lightly as it filled my mouth.
I looked into the mirror.
I saw a hot but kind of frazzled looking brunette staring back at me.
A brunette who was sucking on a cock.
I pulled it out of my mouth.
What had gotten into me.
I quickly did my best to rinse the big dildo in her sink and stood it on the counter. I then stared at the girl in the mirror for what seemed like a long time. Odd emotions seemed to swirl inside me. Finally I removed what remained of my makeup and quietly slipped into Denise's room. After changing back into my man clothes I left her place, locking the door behind me.
I must really have been lost in thought as I did not recall the ride home. I was suddenly pulling into my driveway.
Emma was not home.
Not yet.
As per usual on Monday night.
Yoga. Then 'drinks with the girls' and sex with her yoga instructor and lover Jacques.
I applied more oil to the ring of my chastity device and brushed my teeth. I took my butt plug out and cleaned it too.
Just not with my mouth.
I got into my feminine sleepwear — namely a white, feminine slip and camisole set and then I slipped beneath the covers of my bed.
Our marital bed.
The irony hit me.
Both Emma and I had been out.
Both Emma and I had sex in other people's beds.
Well I sorta had sex.
And soon we would sleep with each other.
Rather beside each other.
Thoughts of Michelle and her situation tried to slip into my mind.
I began to drift sort of into dreamland when I heard Emma arrive home.
I pretended again to be asleep on my side.
I listened to Emma as she got undressed, did her toiletries and made her way over to our bed.
This was when she would wake me up.
This was when she would tell me that she needed my tongue.
This was when —
She quietly slipped under the covers.
My wife snuggled up behind me.
She spooned me.
She pressed her big, naked bosom into my back.
One arm slid below me, the other over my side.
After a few moments she took several sniffs of my neck.
My wife likely smelled the girly perfume that Denise had me put on tonight.
Emma then lightly kissed me on the neck and snuggled in even closer to me.
"I love you so much," my wife faintly whispered as I was drifting back into sleep.
- COMMENTS
I just submitted Ch 33 (FTDS). You can find it in non-consent or my Lit page - MichaelFitzgerald.
In rebooting, I wanted to fill in background that readers asked for. And more will be supplied as we go. I have the story mapped out for the next 4 chapters. Please comment. Anonymous rants get deleted. Constructive criticism helps me see what readers want. Give me a follow if you like the restart so I can see whether you like it. The trolls like to one star and kill a rating. It throws the author off from seeing what the audience reaction is.
Thank you for your patience. MF
I wish Naughtyone88 would continue the story. There are so many paths that are open. If not her then someone else.
I keep finding backstory that needs to be included in this and/or the next chapter. Definitely in July.
Excited to see the continuation and completion of this story. Would be fun to see someone close to the story be naughty
msdanie, I agree. I hope we are looking to the same parts. Fair warning, things are going to get darker.
Michael Fitzgerald
Not to 8nterupt your writing but just saying that there are parts of chapter 28 that should be incorporated in the on-going Shauna story.
Happy this is getting continued. It was one of my favorites back in the day.
In progress. I'm busy making sure my continuation doesn't follow the prior plot. There a ton of characters and plot lines. I had to make a spreadsheet to keep up. So give it a week or two and it will be ready.
I post on Lit. I’ll post a note here when a chapter goes up. Or give follow and get notified directly. Hope you like it
To: Michael Fitzgerald
Please post on here where we can find the continuation stories.
Thank You.
Msdanie
Lit sponsors invitationals all the time, but I don't think it would sponsor one for a single story. So, here goes. An open invitation to continue this story, anyone can submit their version of Chapter 33. Rules: (1) All versions must post by 5/28/23 (45 days); (2) your plot line has to be consistent with Chapters 1 - 23 and extend from the end of Ch. 32.; (3) there's no limit on what you do with the existing characters and which way you want to take the story. Of course, all of us are free to keep submitting our own version but readers are urged to vote and comment as a guide to what the readers want to see. Hope to see something from many of you. BTW, I plan to post something. Lotsa ideas.
If some one picks up this story, please eliminate some of the branches and reveal a few more clues. Mostly for why is naughty putting Shaun/Shauna through this.
I made suggestions about a year ago.
I suggested the story needed to add more context. Shaun is (1) a cuck/femmed husband, (2) father of two, (3) who is cheating on his wife en femme with a black married man, (4) is being forced into a cheating relationship en femme with his office subordinate, (5) is submissive in an office subordinate with his former secretary, (6) is working as a surface male, (7) participates in orgies, and (8) services his faithless, hotwife after the fact and (9) has to deal politely with her lovers. All great but there is no through-line.
Time to throw the reader a lifeline.
I made suggestions about a year ago.
I suggested the story needed to add more context. Shaun is (1) a cuck/femmed husband, (2) father of two, (3) who is cheating on his wife en femme with a black married man, (4) is being forced into a cheating relationship en femme with his office subordinate, (5) is submissive in an office subordinate with his former secretary, (6) is working as a surface male, (7) participates in orgies, and (8) services his faithless, hotwife after the fact and (9) has to deal politely with her lovers. All great but there is no through-line.
Time to throw the reader a lifeline.
I would love for this story to continue. If you pick it up, please don’t rush an ending. I feel there can be a lot more. Maybe more feminization, more sexual cravings for anal, reluctant acceptance, etc.
Sad to say but we are 30 days from the FTDS date. Is there interest in an invitational to write the next chapter? Due May 28th. Readers can signal what they like. This story needs an excellent ending, which is going to take several chapters.
Actually Naughtyone88 is/was a good writer, however he/she created too many avenues forward and he got lost in the direction to go forward. Every chapter created a new branch. Plus I don't think he had an ending in mind, or if he did the original ending got lost in the many branches. So many possible Nauhtyones. Emma, her boss, Mike Brown, the president of Shaun/Shauna's company, the female board member, and Emma's yoga teacher. The story definitely got off track.
I think that the last chapter was not written by the author. The writing style itself has changed, has become more straightforward and vulgar.
The FTDS 2-year waiting period expires on 4/13/23. Here's a request to NaughtyOne88 to allow someone else to take over.
Methinks someone else has to take over this story. Think covid got naughtyone88. If someone does take over leave a note here where to find you.
It seems the OP has either lost interest in finishing this or sadly expired? Maybe the story could be continued by one or more authors in individual paths, in their own styles as they would continue it if they had started it? So many plot lines have been started with no obvious conclusions so far. Lots of possible avenues going forward. Seems like it dhould be continued in some fashion.
Well it's been 20 months since chapter 32. If covid didn't get you could you please give us a sign of life?
I hope that you are ok and not a victim of COVID. I hope to read the conclusion of the story but most importantly you're doing well.
It is a pity that you stopped writing this wonderful interesting story, which has many interesting plots and shows the psychological, sexual side of man. I really regret not finishing what happened to Shauna, Denise, Emma, Naughty, and who is Naughty?
Please, finish my video chat error.
Greetings from Warsaw, SissyBoy
Szkoda że przerwałeś pisanie tej wspaniałej interesującej opowieści, dającej wiele ciekawych wątków i ukazujących psychiczną, seksualną stroną człowieka. Bardzo żałuję że nie dokończyłeś co stało się Shauną, Denise, Emmą, Niegrzeczną, i kim jest Niegrzeczna?
Bardzo proszę abyś dokończył Mój błąd wideoczatu.
Pozdrawiam z Warszawy SissyBoy
Well, it's been what, 14 months since the last chapter. But the author did go for 15 or so months between chapters before once. So maybe there's still life in the story.
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I've been looking at this, up to now, as something revolving around Shawn. But I wonder if he's just a side act to the whole thing. Maybe it's Emma, his wife. (I hope I got the name right, it's been a long time since I read this.) What if she's the one that this thing revolves around. Say she was blackmailed first. Slowed down the sex with Shawn on instructions from Naughty. In the early chapter(s) Shawn says that work and kids etc kept their sex down to one, or was it two, times a month.
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Then also there's evidence that Shawn has or had a low libido. His whole problem started because, in spite of not making love to Emma for some time, he had to accesss porn to get worked up for it. But by his admission she is a sexy and beautiful woman. You'd think that any hit of a sex night would be enough.
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We also had hints that Emma wasn't into much more than the basics. No anal. Not sure if she would allow oral either, been a long time since I read any chapters.
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So Emma gets blackmailed. Forced sex, OR is seduced, and learns to LOVE sex. Yet possibly still loves Shawn. So she's enjoying sex at work. Then 'has' to get a boyfriend much as Shawn 'had' to get a boyfriend. The blackmailers/Naughty want Shawn on board, after all things would be easier to access Emma if hubby was on board.
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Remember Emmas Secretary - in the Party Shawn performed in, the Secretary's hubby made use of Shawn, mentioned that his wife was fucking all the guys that Emma was, or at least lots of other big decked guys. And yet the husband wasn't in the Big Dick club. So he got on board with the thing, was given some perks - using the fem-boys at the party, and possibly other perks, while his wife did the big guys.
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This could have been what 'they' wanted for Shawn. But remember that Shawn had already tried on Emma's panties, he was drawn to feminine underwear before all this happened to him. Maybe he left stains, or stretched them out, or didn't put them back properly. Or the house was already bugged to keep Emma in line.
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Or Emma figured it out and mentioned it to 'them'. So they set Shawn up. If she was only getting minimal sex from Shawn, and loving the wild gang bangs and other sex with boyfriend and co-workers, she might have felt resentment toward Shawn. Or Nick did. And Emma is involved with Jaques' wife, maybe she thought it would be ideal to have Shawn as a woman at home for romance and love etc, and 'real men' for fucking at work. Or the idea was sold to her. And she's learning about domination both with Jaques' wife, and with Shawn. It suits her.
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Anyway, that's. my take. Look to Emma to figure out what's going on.
Naughty, sorry about my rant a year ago.
I have come to see Shaun actually likes some of the dirty things he is forced to do.
You have stretched this out for at least 32 chapters over 8 years. Please finish it.
I yearn for (your next chapter) tragically. A. T. Tappman, Chaplain, U.S. Army
I am sure it is Rachel. I won't tell why because once you see it you can't unsee it.
But please update the story.
I'm getting even more restless than Shauna in her chastity waiting for the next chapter to drop.
Please, please, please! Continue with this totally hot story. If you leave it here, you are being naughtier than Naughty!!
Loving this story. I have a theory about Emma's role in all this, and Nick's, and who Naughty is.
Would love to see how it pans out though, whether I'm right or not. And the stories are great. Hope the next chapter comes around soon.
this is one of the hottest stories I have ever read and I really hope you add to it
Naughtyone88
You are being Naughty by not letting us know what is going on - Please!!!!!! An update Pleasssssssssssssse!!
It's been 6 months since he released any thing and he said ( last communication) that 33 just needed editing. Think someone else needs to finish the story. Suberik do you or Johsu want to it take over?
God sake, this is my favourite story on literotica but it gets written at a snails pace.
Each chapter takes so long you forget what’s happening each time.
Come on, I don’t want it to end soon but I want to be able to read it!!
For executives in their respective companies, neither Shaun(a) nor Emma (if she is in fact being blackmailed) seem to think at all critically.
Suberik, Johnson
We can speculate where this stories is going, who Naughty is, where people stand in Naughty's organization, and what Naughty's ultimate goals are. We KNOW what is going on. Shaun(a) is being blackmailed, Emma is cuckolding her husband with his knowledge, that Emma has had sex with numerous mail colleagues, that she is, or is becoming a dommatrix, Shaun is 40 years old, Emma is the same or near same age, that they have school age children, that they are both college graduates. That they met in college. We can speculate that they have been married 16 to 18 years( college graduation 22 to 24 years old.) If we speculate that they had children before they were 30, their children are 11 to 14 years old. (Although I get the impression that the children are 8 to ten years old.) We know that there is some type of drug in the breakfast smoothes that Shaun(a) and Emma are drinking. Kayla suspects that the drug makes Michelle hornyier. We can speculate that it has the same effect on Shaun(a) and Emma, and or it will make Emma more fertile. Incongruity, Emma has had numerous unprotected sexual encounters with presumably numerous fertile men with out becoming pregnant. Dave her boss knows this. So why does he think that he will father a child with her and the others won't? Is he really that ignorant? If Shauna really wants to communicate with Emma, why doesn't he write notes to her? They can read the notes in places that Naughty doesn't have eyes.
Hi Msdanie, I like the post you just made about Emma enjoying "the humiliation, embarrassment, and power exchange," that goes with pegging her hubby - Shaun(a). I guess there's two sides to everything, because when I read that part I got the impression that, Yes, she was looking forward to the 'new married sex' but for different reasons than you propose. I took it to mean that she was happy and excited to be intimate with her husband after a long dry spell, and - she thinks - in a way he will enjoy better.
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Although where he was obviously surprised to see her with a strap on, and reluctant, confused, etc, she did sort of egg him on, telling him she wanted to hear him tell her to go faster, earlier she commented that "someone's excited" as he tried to get hard in his chastity tube. To me she was telling the truth when she said she wanted to reward him, that she thought he looked to good all femmes up etc. She seems to think that he's into the crossdressing and having sex as a woman. No telling what she's been led to believe. I think that there's the possibility that she is turned on by hurting and humiliating him, as you posit. But there's just as good a chance that she loves him, been led to believe he's into it, and into her having lovers, and is trying to help by encouraging him. But just as likely that she's also being blackmailed, and like Shaun is playing at being eager to keep from being punished more. So, three possibilities, I like the possibility that she loves him and either thinks he's either into and excited about everything, or knows better but has to act like she believes it to keep from more punishment to her or to both of them.
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Either way, it's a damn convoluted plot and I keep reading to find out how it's resolved. It's a mystery wrapped in another mystery wrapped in another.
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Damn, just read what I wrote and it doesn't make as much sense as I thought. I hope I don't confuse y'all as much as I did myself. But I have to get going and start supper to keep 'She Who Must be Obeyed' happy.
In chapter 24 when Emma Is getting ready to take Shauna analy Shauna observes a twinkle in her eye. To me this means that she enjoys the humiliation, embarrassment, and power exchange this means. Those emotions are not love. At no time does Emma Show Shaun love. Even before Shaun was being blackmailed she dictated the sexual frequency, and method of sex. The fact that she now apparently enjoys all the things that she denied Shaun, shows that she was two faced the entire marriage. Suberik you obviously live in lala land yourself. I have to agree with Sergaydom that Emma Has a vested interest in keeping Shaun(a) under her thumb, and broken. An important point glossed over is Emma's yoga lessons. How long has she been taking them? how long has she been fucking Jon? (22years old, been baby sitting since before the kids were in grade school.) How long has Nick been fucking her? How long has she been rationing Shaun(a)'s sex? Let's get a time line on Dave's party's. Seems like this next party is a Spring, or Summer one. If spring and the party that Dave either fucked or blackmailed her was a picnic one it was a summer or spring the previous year.
Look at us pouring over all these chapters trying to read something into them, like some conspiracy person checking every line that Nostrodomus every wrote LOL.
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So another thought, Dave - in Chapter 17 (thanks msdanie) Shaun recalls how he is always around Emma at parties, how he has told Shaun that if he wasn't in the picture he'd go after her. How he says how good her figure is and how hot she is. Could he be Naughty and the thing that Shaun did to deserve all his blackmail is that he's married to Emma? Emma who is now working longer hours but hasn't gotten the promotion? (or did she in a later chapter?)
I just did a quick re-read of chapter 20, where Shaun is shown that Emma now has Jon as a lover in the marriage bed while he stays downstairs, then has to clean her out.
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What I was looking for was the bit about the boxes that were delivered. Yes, there were three boxes, but only two for Shaun, the third was for Emma. We never found out what was in the third box. Just that Shaun though it was heavy. What was in it - perhaps the strap on Emma uses, but surely that wouldn't be that heavy, so there's other things for Emma. Computer/laptop and wifi stuff to download and send off the recordings of the hidden cameras that were set up? Or more toys to torment Shaun(a) with or for Emma to use?
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I hope we find out about that third box or is it just a red herring thrown out to confuse us, or something that the Author changed his mind about later on.
Hi Johsun (and others),
some reflections on your post reasoning from my theorie of what is going on... So, most likely it is all completely false.
To me it is clear that Emma loves Shaun(a). I think there are numerous clues in the story to back this up (to many to put here as quotes). Furthermore, Emma is also being blackmailed and is also an important part of the plot. And yes
ch 17: At the last one {company picnic}, she {Emma} had disappeared for a while. Just before I found her again he {Dave} passed by me. He stopped and told me what a fine wife I had. With a shitfaced grin that I attributed to too much alcohol. When I found her, She did not seem herself. She said she was mulling something over. When I pressed her for details, she said that her boss had mentioned that she might be able to land a promotion
This was about one or two month before Shaun(a)’s blackmail started. At that time Emma’s blackmail had already started. I am not sure whether or not the encounter with Dave was set up by Naughty or not (compare this to Rachael’s and Shaun(a)’s deal). And no, she is not hatefull to Shaun(a) at all. At least not anymore (think of what I wrote about the role of Rachael being Shaun’s secretary). And yes, Emma is being manipulated by Naughty by showing video’s of Shaun(a)’s sexual encouters. So, she truly believes that this is what Shaun(a) really likes. So, out of love (and also because she became hooked on sex with real men herself) she supports Shaun(a).
Emma has been punished by Naughty. I think it was the gang bang Dave mentioned at the party. The video recordings of this are probably used to blackmail Emma. Anyhow, like Denise she fears another gang bang. So, she is very cautious to not upset Naughty again. This is why she does not communicate with Shaun(a) about their situation in any way.
You refer to the anonymous poster that Mrs Harding may be Naughty etc. The problem I have with this is the question what Shaun(a) did to her to deserve a thourough and harsh punishment. How did s/he hurt her? I think there are other options that appear in the story so far.
Well to end this comment I give you something to chew on about Naughty and money (did not yet fully solve it myself).
Ch 1:"I don't want your money. You will have to do exactly as I say or the chat ends and I begin forwarding emails, got it?"
Ch 6: "Now be especially careful with those controllers. They cost me a lot," typed Naughty. "They work up to a distance of 25 yards."
Ch 20: There were three nice sized boxes {with lingerie} in our entrance hallway. All had the markings of a local courier.
Naughty’s parties are expensive to attend. So, Naughty makes a lot of money? But how expensive can those remote controllers be? Didn’t Naughty pay for Shaun(a)’s first lingerie sets and female clothes? Naughty does not want money from Shaun(a). And what about all dildo’s molded after real men’s cock’s. Add to this that Naughty does not have to pay for the location of her parties...
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Johsun
Another comment, Shauna is becoming something of a size queen herself.
One of the things I find inconceivable is Shaun being a senior executive. He is to much of a beta male. Senior executives are by nature alpha males. A necessary attribute for the position. There is the fighting, spying, and backstabbing necessary to achieve those positions, and hold them from ambitious underlings. Shaun is a milktoast from the beginning, a hide his head in the sand person.
I enjoy reading the comments, but not as much as reading new chapters LOL. To msdanie and Suberlick and other posters, thanks for the comments and insight. Makes me think about this and gives me new ideas as well.
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I think I'm obsessing about this story nearly as much as my dad did about 'his soaps' that he got into once he retired! One of the points that I really obsess about in this story is the relationship between Shaun and Emma. Does Emma love him. Is Emma being blackmailed or is she part of the plot?
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In an earlier chapter Shaun(a) recalled a party where Emma reappeared after an absence and I seem to remember something about her hair or dress not being neat and in place - perhaps in my mind or in the chapter there was something about her boss reappearing at the same time. Made me think that Emma and her boss (Dave?) went off and fucked. Was there a promotion or raise announced then for Emma? Or has my addled memory made things up?
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That bit made me think that's when Emma started on her extra-curricular activities in the office. Blackmail or did Dave remind her of the pleasure of large cock? - remember that she was with Nick before she took up with Shaun.
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And then Emma gets to see video of Shaun dressed up as Shauna and supposedly enjoying being ... used. She certainly didn't act much alarmed or shocked or that surprised to see Shauna being taken doggy style at the party. So the idea posted below that she thinks Shaun enjoys his role is valid. But also valid is that she is conscious of the bugs in the house (and elsewhere?) and plays up to them. Only whispering her love to Shaun as she snuggles. But doesn't explain why neither of them said anything when outside the house when Nick et al left.
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Nor does it explain why neither Shaun or Emma - both highly paid supposedly successful business execs - didn't think to write a note on a napkin during their conversation in the coffee shop/restaurant way back early on after the party - Naughty was listening and texting Shaun, and Emma kept sending texts. Makes us wonder if Emma was the one sending texts? Or was she reporting what was going on to Naughty or someone else. A note or two would have cleared much up. But I can see why an author wouldn't put that in since it keeps the suspense active.
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One last thought, for the moment, The companies, Shaun's and Emmas and Harding, Big business - will we find that it is all about money and contracts? I think the below comment posed by Anonymous about Harding's wife being behind things might be valid. Money is the root of all evil. I hope that Shaun is being so submissive and non aggressive because he wants to find out as much as he can about the situation. I do believe that perhaps he has found that he is truly bi, and perhaps what's happening to hm isn't that terrible. And he has fallen in love with Denise. All along he is trying to find more and more information about what's going on.
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And yes I ramble. I'm afraid to go back and re-read what I wrote, I'll probably find I'm making no sense at all. I blame the Lipitor.
Emma told Shaun that, HER AND NICK DID NOT HAVE SEX WHILE THEY WERE DATING. Doesn't forclude after marriage. I wonder how much Emma's kids look like Nicks kids.
Just had a thought. Ted, the husband of Emma's secretary is a computer programmer, and has reason to feel hurt and angry towards both Emma and Shaun. Could him and his wife be plotting to bring down Emma's and Shaun's companies? With Mr and Mrs Harding's help?
Hurray!
I missed you! Welcome back. Hope RL will improve and stay good now for you.
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Hey Guys!
Sorry for the absence! RL has been hectic and kind of troublesome lately. Finally able to get back to writing. Have a fair bit of each of the next couple of chapters in first draft.
Chapter 33 has been proving to be a hard one to write right. Several tough scenes for me that I need to get just right. There will be lots for those who like reading between the lines, but as usual, not everything will be as it seems!
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Will comment on some of the interesting comments posted here soon!
Hi all,
Ch 1: I {Shaun} accepted that because she {Emma} was a very hot blonde and we had a lot in common.
Ch 10: We {Shaun(a) & Denise} both found out so much about the other and discovered that we had more in common than we realized before.
Ch 20: In doing so we {Shaun(a) & Denise} had great conversation and continued to discover that we had so much in common.
Ch 21: She truly is everything a man could want. Hot looking. Nice person. Lots in common with me. If I had met her instead of Emma-
If Shaun(a) and Emma have a lot in common, and Shaun(a) and Denise too, then do Emma and Denise also have a lot in common? Does this mean anything for the realtion between Emma and Denise?
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One of the things that really bothers me, is that Emma and Shaun do not communicate. They didn't before the blackmail started, and they don't now. Emma communicates more with Jon than she did with Shaun. Now all she says is clean the house, do the laundry, eat my pussy, no love on her part, and none on his. Why would he even think she might love him? Jason communicates with him, Denise communicates with him, and he puts up a plastic front with both.
With apologies to Sr. Longo's ill-conceived "ending," in addition to tracking more than one other story on plotting, it's predictable and therefore boring.
NO88, your plotting tends to the subtle and therefore remains hard to foresee. I've shared with you in more detail than here what I think is the plot. Shortly said, Harding's wife runs Harding and his business. She wants to take Fred (and Shaun's) company over., the first of many. She created the sex club (and its extension the sex slave ring) as a way to get into Fred's company under the radar. The changes the characters are being put through makes them useful to her organization, now and later. Acting thru proxies, she is almost impossible to trace, making retaliation impossible. Because she is ruthless and advertises the fact, it makes escape seem an almost certain death sentence.
Framed that way, Shaun's willingness to endure terrible things becomes believable. Because Shaun cooperates, Emma, Denise and others get license to go along because if Shaun is going along, how bad can it really be? Plus the sex - Emma, Denise and others think the sex really good, and hard to give up. Shaun's ex-secretary has been bought off, and really hasn't Emma been bought off as well. Perhaps Denise has been too but those details have yet to emerge.
Only a plot broad enough to allow all these simultaneous developments can work. And I have little doubt that whatever the details turn out to be, the overall scope will be as broad as I suggest. The thing I like most about your story is your willingness to let it breathe. So take your time. And be in no rush to wrap up. This story is as good as it gets.
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Michael Fitzgerald.
I agree that until more information comes forth we'll disagree about Emma. I think the bedroom isn't bugged. Nick is the person that does the bugging and I'll wager that he avoids being videotaped.
Hi Msdanie,
I think we will not agree on the issue of Emma loving Shaun(a) or not up until Naughyone88 will let us know. We had this discussion several times in the past. Emma loving Shaun(a) is an important issue in my theory, but that theory can be completely wrong of course. Where you see Emma act to hurt Shaun(a), I see mixed emotions. Firstly, Emma really thinks that cuckolding and being a good husband makes Shaun(a) tick, but s/he needs more training. So, that's part of what she does, also because Naughty told her to do it. Secondly, she is hooked on the sex (proteine shake, like Denise needs cock and sperm every now and then, well very often). With Nick there is also anger, she does not like it that it hurts her sister (they often sat together until contact broke), and also not the arrogance of Nick towards Shaun(a). But she knows that Nick fucking her is part of an agreement between Nick and Naughty. Thirdly, the house is bugged and Emma fears another punishment from Naughty. Like Denise she was gangbanged (at the office, according to Dave). So, telling Shaun(a) she is controled by Naughty is a no go.
No offence taken in you not agreeing with me, hope you feel the same (think so :-)).
Wonder if others are also reading our posts and what their opinion is...
Really hope that Naughtyone88 will return soon...
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Suberik
I think you are glossing over Emma's emotional relationship with Jon and Jacques. There is emotional relationships with both. She doesn't have a emotional relation ship with Tina and it shows. The expressions of love she uses with Shaun(a) are a control device. When she had a cance to tell Shaun after Nick and Natilie left she didn't even give him anything. She could have just said she was being blackmailed. Of course Shaun could have said. "I'm being blackmailed, and he didn't use that opportunity. Emma's actions showed me that she wants to keep Shaun in the dark about what is going on.
Suberik
I agree Denise is playing a hidden game on Shaun(a). Not sure if love of Shaun is real or act. Also unsure if Emma's supposed love of Shaun(a) is real or act. I tend to think Emma's love is an act. Her sexuality is real, and hiding it from Shaun by limiting him to missionary sex once a month while she has been having affairs for some time(?) shows her disrespect and loathing of him. Emma is definitely a size queen, and probably always has been. Shaun should definitely do a DNA test on his children. How long she has had him on a monthly schedual is important information that Shaun(a) or Naughtyone88 is not giving us.
I have a nasty feeling we will never know the ending. I just hope the author is ok.
Hi Msdanie,
Aahh, Rachael..she plays an important role in my theory :-).
Ch 1: Rachael, my secretary of 10 years (who had been hitting on me enough that my wife knew).
Ch 17: I {Shaun(a)} remembered the wretched look on her {Rachael} face the day I fired her. I remembered her tears and how awful it had made me feel. Here she was expecting me to finally succumb to her charms and instead I fired her. She was not expecting that. How humiliated she seemed as she cleaned out her desk in front of the other office staff that Monday morning. They looked at her as if they knew why she was being let go. She took it so hard.
Ch 31: I like sexually submissive men. I like fucking their asses. And more. That brings me deep sexual satisfaction. I get off on it." Rachael declared. ... {Naughty} "Rachael is good at breaking husbands. She can help with your training, in fact she will be the next part of your training." Naughty typed. "Submit to Rachael when you are with her. Miranda will talk with her. Chat later."
Let X be Naughty’s true identity. Rachael knows X and Naughty, but I do not think she knows that X is Naughty. I think only Miranda knows that Naughty is X. Apart from that, a lot of people know X.
Rachael wanted to step up the ladder in the company (ch 31: she is more than a pretty face). When X learned this she set up Rachael to start an affair with Shaun, maybe done through Miranda. It is possible that Rachael also knew Miranda as she herself is a domme. Why else would Rachael try to start an affair, after 10 years...
The affair would give X/Naughty a reason to punish Shaun (make the affair known to Emma, and then proceed as with Mitch/Leslie), which has been a long lasting incentive of X. However, Shaun did not respond as anticipated, although there were rumours. X told Emma about the rumours which sifficed. Neither X not Rachael anticipated that Emma would become furious and made Shaun to have Rachael fired. This was a great shock for Rachael. X (or Miranda) told Rachael that there was this person Naughty that would take care of things. So, in exchange of breaking John Harding she was offered a good position in the Harding Company by Mrs. Harding. The fact that Rachael wants Shaun(a) to submit to her is not directed by Naughty. It is an unanticipated gift, as Denise can not train Shaun(a) to submit to dominant women (Denise loves Shaun(a)). So, Naughty jumps to the opportunity.
Regarding your question on Emma telling Shaun(a) she lover him/her and walk away with Jon... She puts on an act for Naughty (the house is bugged), or just thinks she really helps Shaun(a) with this. Emma is made to believe by Naughty, that Shaun(a) is into men, feminization, cuckolding, etc.and is most likely also shown proof of this (video recordings). Furthermore, Emma is told that Shaun(a) needs to be trained, and that Emma should train him to be a good husband. So, she has to confront Shaun(a) with her having sex with her lovers. Apart from that, she lets Shaun(a) know she does not disapprove his life style but still loves him. Apart from that... she is also on the protein shake.
Btw, I think Denise is also on the protein shake...
Well, this is what I think of it.
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