All Comments on 'Prison Life Pt. 01: The Arrival'

hope the future chapters include some lesbian anal with ass-to-mouth

It is only the begining and it seems a hot story. I wish you will start uploading the rest of chapters. Come on! Don't delay them, please.

Seems like a hot story thus far. Please keep it going!

A couple of SpaG issues in need of editing - missing apostrophes, women instead of woman etc.

Also, ' Despite being only 29, she had the body of a mature older woman' - what does this mean? At 29, all women have fully developed bodies. Are you saying that she is sagging? Starting to get wrinkles?

And: 'Charlotte's fair skin matched her red hair.' - this implies that her skin is also red -if you're using it to describe her blushing, commit to to it a bit more and make that clear. If you're using to describe a typical willowy Irish-style complexion, then 'complimented' might be a more appropriate verb here.

However, those aside, the plot is engaging and well-paced, the dialogue appropriate and with fair verisimilitude and the explicit content isn't overworked, which allows for your readers to better apply their imagination to it.

Good first effort!

Thanks for the feedback! I definitely want to get better at writing so your comments help. In response to the whole "being 29 with a mature body thing"; yeah I'm not really sure what I meant by that either. I guess I wanted to describe her body as being curvier and fuller than it would be on a 29 year old body, which doesn't really make sense because plenty of 29 year old women have a body like that. Maybe I should've made her a little bit younger for the statement to make sense.

I'll definitely keep your comment in mind as I carry on writing!

It’s definitely a good start and interesting.

Great and interesting start....waiting for next part.

Great start. Please keep writing :)

I wanna see the rest!

Love it keep it going