by SilverAcquiescence
Why the f**k—did it have to end?!! Oh my God I was so emotionally invested that the end of the chapter honestly shocked me. Please keep writing as this is so good!!!
God forbid that I, a complete and total stranger, should demand anything of your craft.
But, um. Well.
More, please. :)
I really liked the beginnings of this story. You’ve set up an interesting storyline. I have a lot of questions. Who is Pavoc? Who is Terrav to her? Does the shot not work anymore now that he had her taste? Curious to see where this goes. Please continue
Who is Terrac??? What will the punisher do to her now that he knows???? I neeed to knoooow
It’s hard to find well written stories here that also have a decent plot. Nice job so far. I wonder if this story may have been better suited for the sci fi / fantasy category (I believe I picked up references to an alternate future / dystopian society) but I get why it’s here. Either way the story did it’s job
This is excellent! Can't wait for the next chapter! (please let there be more!)
please don’t take this the wrong way but Im curious about something? if she is taking something to hide her scent then how did he know something was off? not on the train but before when they were in the office he could tell something was wrong….how did he know?? still a grat story I love the world building so far ;))
Wow, thank you all so much! I was not really expecting this much of a response. I’m not really sure how to respond to individual messages but I will say I am finishing up chapter 2 and will submit for review soon :)
Not at all! Thank for pointing that out. I thought I had adequately shown that Kaz has uniquely keen senses, outside of being an Alpha. That’s my fault for not really conveying that clearly, so I’m sorry. I just didn’t want to do too much exposition.
But that’s why he could smell ‘something.’ Most people would otherwise not notice the smell of anyone who masks.
I'm already hooked on it. Thanks for sharing and I'm very much looking forward to read more from you! :))
You put some really good effort into this intro that eludes to further plot lines. I would love to know where to read more even if you decided to publish elsewhere for sale. I can't imagine that such a great start that garnered such positive feedback would be so easily abandoned. Not that I haven't seen it countless times but I'll never comprehend it. Hope you are well and don't give up n such a promising talent.