All Comments on 'Rebirth'
by Inkhorn
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"I have to assume you're mentally challenged here, no other explanation as to why this incoherent drivel seemed to resonate with the brain dead masses."
of course posted anonymously......
Ignore- I loved it
Congrats, you nailed every tired, cliché in LW. This became painfully boring after a few pages, I found myself wishing I had a root canal appointment to get to.
This story was ok. Nothing I'd read twice. It irritated the fuck out of me. Why was he crying and acting like a little bitch? Still til the end. he's still talking about loving gwen. How?. The person he met, fell in love with and married, was just an illusion. It wasn't real. She's been banging joe since before jack and her even met. She continued sleeping with joe through out their entire relationship/marriage. She had no intention of stopping, actually wanted him to be ok with it. She actually thought about getting pregnant by joe and letting jack raise their love child. I don't see how any man with any self respect can still sit there saying they love this type of whore. Jack should've felt nothing but anger, disgust and betrayed. The minute I found out just how deep her treachery went, the love would be replace with a blinding hate. There wouldn't be any pity party. I feel jack was wimp. ...
I'd suggest that this story be re-named "The Necklace," but that title for a short story was definitively claimed in 1884. But I love the device of an object, imbued with love, that links story elements separated by time, place and cast of characters... like the photo in The Terminator.
This story succeeds on every level. The craftsmanship is second to none. Better yet, it taps deep wells of feeling. It made me cry, despite my male training against it.
If Maupassant has an heir on Literotica, it may well be Inkhorn.
If you have never lost it all or are so wrapped up in yourself and can't feel any real emotions or attachments, comments like what Anon wrote are truly tragic. The story started a little rough but I grew to feel sympathy for the character, where you made a outstanding decision was bringing in the Cotton character, very unique. Thanks.
Enjoyable read! Something with a bit more imagination for a change. BTW, This is really too good a piece to let go without some careful editing and a good proof read, Bravo! 5 stars ;)
I dont think its possible to make Jack any bigger of a *ussy. He has more vagina than all of the women together. Sad.......real sad.
Depression. Ah the life killer. And that's what this author wrote. Plain and simple. If that happened to me I would be Jack. Maybe not as bad but depression would envelope me. So to everyone who thinks it's simple...you are not in the right frame of mind. He did what he could. My mother was depressed, causing me to grow up in Foster HOMES. That's right homes, and depression was my only friend. So as bad as you think this story portrayed him it's close to reality.
Decent story,but it should have had some sort of payback/revenge for Joe and Qwen
I love a bit of revenge, but lets face it most of the stories are like shit from Chine ... far fetched. Nice story but would have loved Gwen and lover to have suffered some. Thanks, and please write more.
Very well written. Yes, it is very truthful. I know because I lived it, not to the extent that Jack did, but I live with the depression from being cast away like a candy wrapper out of the window of a moving car. The one regret that I have is that she smoked herself to death 2 years after she left. I never got to tell her how much she hurt me.
Shitty of the author to let the cheaters off the hook. Should be Gwen and Joe are now completely cut out of Charity's life. Joe commits suicide and blames Gwen so she is committed. No-one goes to see her and she goes catatonic.
I would like for him to meet the 2 cheaters and to find them constantly sniping and arguing with each other. He discovers that after a short honeymoon period they realised they were never meant to be in a full time relationship. In addition after he left she finally realised that it was him she really loved and her time with Joe was an illusion. She had made her bed and lived with it after finding out she was pregnant but she lived a miserable life.
Really good story. I can't quite reconcile how abhorrent Gwen and Joe's actions were with how glib they were about it when finally caught. Even Jack's response is pretty mild, all things considered. Happy ending's all well and good, but considering he hit rock bottom and nearly died as an after-effect of their actions, hearing about them living a normal life and being fuckup parents is a bit grating.
Great story. Wish there could be some revenge and a happier ending for hubby.
Well written, though you let the cheaters off light. I was glad that you didn't have him sit there and listen to them or give it a go. Joe deserved a pounding as did any friend who thought that their actions were okay.
It's been a while since I read this, just read Page 1 again and will not be reading any more. By the end of Page 1, he finds out that she has been fucking Joe since before they were married, couldn't/wouldn't stop fucking him after she married Jack, is STILL fucking Joe, and shows ZERO inclination to stop fucking Joe - why are there eight more fucking pages? All that is left to say is D-I-V-O-R-C-E!
Rated 5* .... I want to rate multiple times...
The great story with realistic approach......
No one dies a saint....
But everyone tastes their own fruits
(no one dies a saint.... Is the title of a loving wife adultery no btb.... Written by Krish_999 an english erotic writer from India)
This is my fifth read of this and I still can’t help but love this story. What makes it great is that this story shows clearly how hard you worked on this. And believe me is paid off big style this was truly written from the heart. And it was fantastic it also opens up the story to write a part 2 of this . You have really opened up a world of opportunity to write stories from this great story. It’s now down to you on how you proceed but you have got a big opportunity to create more from this story . So well done and thank you for sharing your stories with me and others who appreciate great stories like this. And this story clearly shows what a talented writer you are.
As far as comments go, I agree wholeheartedly with Medic975 and MarkT63.
Almost didn’t go past page four, what a waste of a person. The way he acted and handled everything. Yes, he should have died and leaving his sister was a good. What a burden it would have been to have to raise another child. From page four on it was predictable but enjoyable.
People who have no desire to stand up for themselves and blame themselves for others actions. Won’t get any sympathy from me. If you act like you want to be abused and don’t stand up for yourself then don’t be surprised when it happens.
The only productive thing he did in the first part was leave and quit burdening others with his morose ass.
He was a little better in the second half but not much, it still took a strong person to take him along for the ride.
Why take the time to help someone that really doesn’t want to succeed in life. What a waste of time and effort.
4.5 for the story overall......less than 2 for the main character....it’s all he deserves.
The plot/story/character development was top shelf but the presentation detracted from the art. The unnecessary, repetitive and misplaced exclamation marks eventually made me think I was reading a text message from a teenager and spoiled the emotional flow.
Couldn't get past the point of the cuck going back to get answers and buying her bagels as well as giving her the choker. Some people are too dumb to be allowed to live. Some are destined for death by idiocy because they never grew up.
I, for one, enjoyed the story! I guess I'm not a very critical reader. I let the characters live their lives as the writer wants them to and just go along for the ride. Jack feels real in the ways he reacted. I'm glad he ended up getting a life and I'd like to know more about his daughter, but he is your creation and his life is yours, so I don't get to tell you what to do with him. I thank you for your effort and my enjoyment. Mike
I thought this story was very well written .. Even if the husband seemed like a Cluck at times
Very good story, the characters very well explained. The wife's completely irrational demand to keep her boyfriend along with the husband she said she loved and would do anything for except......... In my own life experiences I can understand his depression and withdrawing from life. We all think were well adjusted (at least I did) and some emotional entanglements drive us slightly crazy. Good story good writing, enjoyed with a great ending. Cheaters are liars and liars are cheaters.
If I could, I'd give this 4.5 stars, I would. It was very well done with one minor exception; I realize that a good novelist should be very descriptive...should take the reader by the hand, so to speak, and show them every possible nook and cranny of the surroundings, and more importantly of the characters psyches, especially the protagonist. Generally, I find this is usually over done to some degree with most to the stories I read on Literotica. This story was as well, yet a good deal less so.
The plot was, for the most part, unusual. Yet, some parts (not many) quite predictable. I've been married three times. My first, my high school and college sweetheart; the mother of my children, loved each other until the day she died. In fact, I was in her hospital room when she took her last breaths. My children even said..."she waited until you came to die." She and I were touch and go for quite some time. In fact, after a few years, we re-married, which of course was a mistake. I still have a vivid memory of the evening, the time and place, and the actions we took with each other where we knew that, finally, this was the end of our attachment. That last meeting, when in the story Jack and Gwen had their final sexual encounter, while knowing that it was really the end, was heart breaking for me and had me in floods of tears (as I am yet again, even while just writing this). Over the years, we still saw each other on occasion, as we had children together, and through circumstances in their lives, were drawn together at times for those occurrences. We still always loved each other.
My second wife, "the love of my life," and I were together for 21 years. For 19.5 of them, it was a deep love affair that endured until her father passed away. She had a tempestuous relationship with him, especially when he and her mother divorced when she was a young teen. I won't go into all the psychological details, but will just say, that this precipitated a mid life crisis in her that affected our relationship decidedly in a pernicious manner, leading to our divorce. We also remained in touch to some extent, and both of us knew we still loved each other. Some years later, after her mother passed away, she expressed a desire to meet, and to possibly "try again." My knee jerk reaction was to say yes. However, after deep thought, I told her I didn't think it was a good idea. I felt that should we get back together and it went sour once more, in reality, I might not survive a second break up with her. Five months later, she committed suicide jumping 15 floors from the balcony of her apartment. I'm remarried again, and it's a much more sedate marriage.
Again, there were many aspects of this well done story which evoked many emotions in me, some bittersweet. I'm sure I will be drawn into reading again, most likely I think more than once. I guess if asked, I would have to say I enjoyed it. I do wish that the author would add more chapters to it.
More realistic than most, lots of cheated on husbands end up in the gutter
Not
jtwheels
Reading again. Page 3, I was thinking why the hell did he marry this weird bitch. Now I'm thinking what a total pussy this guy is.
No, meeting with Gwen is VERY stupid. Especially considering what a pathetic pussy he is.
Page 4, Oh HELL no it wasn't a cheap shot. That was perfect. One of those things you think of later and wish you had said but HE had it ready when he needed it. Nice!
Oh fuck no. Just beat hell out the prick.
Page 6, Oh yeah, I'd forgotten how weird this story gets. Apparently he's a weird chick magnet.
In retrospect? lol How about obviously?
Page8, poor bastard has all the luck. Now his only child seems likely to be a biological dead end.
page 9, still loves her? WTF??? Is this a country and western song? "He stopped loving her today....".
Heavy chain? Still an emotional pussy. Helluva yarn though.
End. Don't remember what I thought last time but this time I really think it was a helluva yarn. I felt like going Patton on him and slapping him but yeah, it was a helluva yarn.
Strange group of characters and a rather bizarre story. At least he didn't get off watching his wife having sex with other men!
Gwen is insane....what she did to him was despicable and then trying to have her cake and eat it too? Sigh...
Every divorce I know about, the wife cheated.
Also everyone, the guy when to pieces, mental, alcohol, even drugs.
This was more real to life with what I have seen.
They really really need to make infidelity a crime, maybe then we wont have so many children living in poverty and 1 parent homes.
I would have thought the story more accurate if Jack had asked Gwen, "Please give me more than two reasons why I shouldn't beat the crap out of him, and the reasons can't apply to me, either. So, you don't get to use love or the law. And since you never intended to forsake all others, why did you marry me?"
Then, since a divorce needed to happen, the only question would be whether Joe was beat up or not, depending on how well she gave her answers.
So after my second read through more than a year later I still loved it. I get that Gwen is defective but still a good person which is where can empathize throughout the story.
Probable one of the best stories I have read in a very long time. My one complaint is every time I find a good story teller it seems they are no longer submitting stories. It may be selfish on my part but there are very few writers that can think outside the box a create really interesting new story lines that has the complexity that makes, and shows, how complex human emotions really are.
Long but good story. But there are a few things to mention:
In the beginning Gwen said, that she went on dates with Joe on the saturdays whiel her husband played. Why did nobody mention it to Jack? He obviously didn't know it. There had to be other friends who would have mentioned it sometimes.
If she can't live without Joe, why didn't she marry Joe and have Jack as lover? What did Joe bring into the relationship? He got free pussy and a date each week, but did he do anything for the relationship? Who would have taken care if Gwen was ill? Joe or Jack?
What did Joe do when he wasn't together with Gwen? Did he have other girlfriends for release? What about STDs from them?
I understand, that Jack doesn't know anything about Gwen and Joe, Me and surely other readers would like to know what happened to them. Are there other children?
A Well Told Story
I thought he carried on whining for was too long, but I can sympathize, I've been there. In my case there was a period of time where instead of whining there was darkness and two people should be very glad I came back into the light in time.
However, the part where I just cannot, will not except is his conversations about anything but someone's eminent death with Joe. If that had been somehow forced on me at the time one of us would have been maimed for life and I had Rage on my side. Since I stayed on good terms with my in-laws, I was invited to family functions that they weren't, I heard numerous times about that little fucker fighting with my ex talking about how she was loose, as big as a house and she'd wiggle her little finger at him. Talk about class. Seems Gwen was either wrong or lied about something else, she could live without Jack but apparently not happily. Seems like someone should make the effort to let Joe know he ain't daddy. I don't know that I could be there with a stripper/cam girl, I just don't know, but she was straight up honest with Jack from the beginning unlike Gwen, was fiercely loyal and that tilts me in her direction. There was a lot of very sad reality in this story. Signed: BTW
Long not a LOT of sex in it but a very good story, nice characters with a well thought out plot.
As with most of the stuff on here not to everyone’s taste but I liked it a lot
Yes, this is more "real", but it doesn't fill the need that a full-bore BTB accomplishes. Still recommended though...
This story is wonderfully written. It contains authentic emotions and plausible dialogue. Inkhorn is more than a good writer; he’s a true storyteller! Five big stars ⭐️ for this one!
What a whiney, weak, spineless and frankly pathetic MC you created.
Asked my misses to read and by page 4 she said, and I quote " What a disgusting man this Jack is. The wife and friend are horrible, as they have to be but he has no self respect for himself. An absolute loser. The author says he tried to keep it realistic? What a load of tosh. There is nothing realistic about this man."
I tend to agree as we don't know or have heard of any man being like this. 1*
Five stars - and, yes, it was very different and certainly wasn't a BTB one. Living with depression is more than challenging and the people you deal with every day know there is something "awkward" about you. Withdrawal is a normal behavior for many and "fight" or "flight" instincts almost always result in flight. Sometimes I skim read stories knowing that there is content that really doesn't add to the story. I doubt that I skipped a word in this one. It tore at me - in a good way - realizing that he was finally at peace - not full peace but his best version of that comfortable place he was in life!
Very good story, especially because its free and well written. This my second reading, but it was still excellent. Almost makes you wonder though with what he went thru after leaving Gwen he might have been better off staying with her, but then again there is the lying and the trust issue. As with a lot of us we punish ourselves more than anyone else could. With others the ability to rationalize anything is as true in real life as it is in these stories. Been there done that seen that.
Great story kudos for the author, his editors and support staff.
not a bad story but i wish he lived a better life instead of wallowing in misery over his whore of a wife for that long.
Nine pages and you still didn't "FINISH THE DAMN STORY"...Jack may not want to hear about Gwen and Joe....BUY WE DID!!....Fucked up ending to a pretty good story!
Good story for what it is, but it lacks real closure.
It could use an actual ending.
Probably one of the best Living Wives story I have read here. As you say, not everyone comes out smelling of roses in real life, and you made a fair go of letting us see Jack's inner struggles.
Granted there are gaps, like no explanation why would Cindy fall for a near corpse. Then again, this is not Cindy's story. Similarly, this is not Gwen's either, so this one ended rightly where it did. We do not need to know what happened to Gwen and Joe and all the rest, because this is Jack's struggle, captured nicely.
Thank you for writing.
Ally.
IDK, always conflicted about this story. Read it about half a dozen times and I still don't understand why he punished himself. The best revenge is living well . tTere has not been. Woman born worth the pain he put himself through
Captured the decent into the depths of despair that a revelation of this type of betrayal can lead to. Not all who fall pray to deceit can find there inner hero waiting to save them. Enjoyed the journey, thank you for your creativity
Gwen is the queen bitch of the universe, and she essentially does whatever she wants, with impunity. As much as I like the writing, the plot is unbearable.
Your story is unique as far as loving wives - a great read. I look forward to more! 5 stars
somewhere east of Omaha
Enjoyed the Cindy character. Wasn’t crazy about the protagonist but appreciate that you tried to write real life. I enjoyed the read and skipped exactly 0 pages,
Really enjoyed the story lots of pathos and then happiness. Would have liked to know more about Gwen and Joe's situation but only if they suffered. Jack's character was very much one of life's victims in all this and didn't deserve what he was put through.
Well written and a good read.
"Who knew that you could still love someone that much who brought you so much pain"
That happens only to desperate women and to wimps. People with very low self-esteem. Anybody else would move above that much humiliation of the first 4 page, only a complete wimp would "talk" that much with his ex. Strong self-esteem is the way a person with a character stays above depression. But if you are a worthless piece of shit in your eyes than anything can be done to you. The author does not know how to portray the "main hero" because he vacillates between reasonable male and a sorry wimp. This keeps story tension but it also makes the character unrealistic. You could easily add some vampires and werewolves to it.
If your wife tells you to share her and you don't want just divorce her and if you cannot find anything else propose to her to keep fucking her. Just without marriage license, see how that goes. If she gets married with her lover even better, see how he will like that.
Somewhat similar to my life but there was gunfire from the guy she was "sleeping" with. My Ex left and married him but came back after he imprisoned for 2 years over the shooting.
We (or at least I) haven't heard from him since but I'm glad he only managed to shoot the tv.
U knw wht Ive read all the stories u mntd in author's note and actly it feels gud to read he's mvng on sucss blah blah blah it does. After redng u r stry it hit me hard that this is reality and u cvrd it clean it's harsh relty in most of the cases, but I can't deny that I still love to read the man got sucss storyand also there are other stories like getting togthr again(like 'let go' or seprte vacation story these strs not about having affair read it u will get it)
Last thing I read tons of stories but I never rated any of them five star max I did was 4 star but this I m givng 5 str.(I knw it's nt rely gng matr of rtng thing but still)
There were a few spots that I thought were rough. But overall this was a spectacular effort. Besides those few spots it was much closer to reality that most stories on here. So many stories in this genre feel very formulaic as you indicated. But I have never fallen in love so hard I could still be in love with someone that wanted to do what she did and did to him. In fact that mentality that she wanted to cuck him with Joe's child and had planned it was literally stomach turning. I could feel my guts squirming as she described it and Joe defended it. I cannot comprehend feeling so much love for someone that I could hear that and still have a speck of love left in my soul for them. She was a straight up psycho as no one could possibly believe that another person would accept what she wanted and had planned for him.
You did evoke very strong emotion in me with your writing and that is the hall mark of a great writer. But him still having feelings for her even after the "discussion" with the two of them was incomprehensible to me. I think I would have gone to jail for killing them both on the spot but I MIGHT have been willing to just kill him and leave her to suffer without both of us.
Even with the perceived flaws I gave this my only 7th ever 5 stars. It was different enough and real enough for me to appreciate it as a great story.
Just...OUTSTANDING. I love this story, though, to be honest, after the 1st time I read it, I usually read the 1st two pages and then jump to where his life turns to shit and he wanders, lost in the darkness, until fortune smiles on him and he gets shot. Yeah, I know getting shot can't really be fortunate, UNLESS, it gives you the light to follow out of the darkness and into...love with the person who has been waiting for you, because they are your predestined soul mate.
A good story to tell, a lot of work was put into it, the building of the charatcers, the pacing, motivations, well done.
I’ve been down a few of those roads and lived some of the pains. Those that don’t believe just don’t understand. Thank you for your work I really appreciate it! 5*
I always liked this story.
The guy's best friend was willing to share his wife with him, not the best friend's wife, but his own wife and then she takes the best friend to counseling with her to try and convince him to stay married to her.
I can't figure out if she was either evil or stupid although it was probably a little of both.
Good writing and a good story. This more true to life than most would think. A man marries a woman not really having any understanding about love or what it really is. He takes care of her, adopts her child and she has another girl child. The man now discovers he has a family to care for he had never had before. He settles in and takes care of that family for years because that is what decent men are supposed to do. Then one day wife says she's not happy and leaves to find herself. The she comes back and says I want go out there and see what there is, in other words see other men, Then she says if it doesn't work out can I come back to you? What do you think that does to man who's family has just been ripped away from him? Emotionally it is devastating bcause the man has never had a real family before. His whole life is invested in this woman who was his wife and gave him two children. She has now ripped that apart and taken it away from him. Do you think it hurt him? It did, it almost destroyed him, just like the man in this story and it’s all true. But the man who had his family destroyed did find another woman with for children. The woman truly loved him and taught the children to love him and 40 years lady the children still love and the wife has passed. The ex has done well poisoning the two children he had with her against him but that’s ok. The man has solace in that he knows his children of the last forty years love him.
Decent
Decent story,though a bit on the long side for what it was. Yes I have to admit it was.is quite a 'long-toothed' tale. You did a fair job on it and therefore a 5*, you get from me. Thanks.
As much as I could gather from story, I must say this, that most divorces are not all sunshine and roses and do not have the big volumes of cash as most people think. They do however are very hurtful and down degrading and humiliating as they are. If there are kids involved, it can be devastating to them because they think they are the cause. Too many men and women get married for the wrong reasons, men because their dicks do the thinking and women can be fooled or are too easily being seduced by other men, especially at a job with and employee's or bosses who forget about the morality clauses in their contracts for employment, or sexual harassment policy's that are now incorporated in company policy's. These are things that can cost the jobs for those who break those policy's as well substantial law suits that can be levied by divorce attorney's when filing divorce papers for either the husband or wife. Companies can be financially ruined and be forced to shut down. Getting back to this story, Jack did the right thing by divorcing Gwen given all her lies and her reason of loving both Joe and Jack. Jack was humiliated and hurt by the lies and did the right thing even if it destroyed him mentally. I think Gwen should have been eventually told about Jack's dying at least twice and that he recovered eventually and that Charity had found her biological dad and was going to spend more time with him, just to rub it in, a little to shock, Gwen, and that Jack was married now to a wonderful woman now and was very happy.
To the Anonymous who wrote the comment that "most divorces are not all sunshine and roses." I do not know where you live or your actual life experiences, but most of what you said is not how things are. You seem to be under the misimpression that the typical story lines from other LW stories reflect reality, when they do not. Companies do not have "morality" clauses.. Sexual harassment policies exist, but they have limited value when co-workers are involved. But, there is very little that companies lose even in the most egregious sex cases.
Re: Morality Clauses - I realize that this is fiction, and authors can define their own reality, but in real life "morality clauses" or anything similar are between the company and the employee, and are no threat to the company's existence.
I just skimmed this through the divorce, and the thing that sticks with me, which was hinted at, and I wish he had said explicitly, was the proof that she love Joe more than him. She wouldn't give up Joe to keep Jack, but she would let Jack go to stay with Joe.
just a little too much sadness to give it a '5' but I,m glad they all lived happily ever afterwards. I've said this before but when women say they love their husband what they actually mean is that they love what the husband supplies that is a home, a family, the sanctity, the security and stature of marriage which most women look for but they mostly feel that the husband just lacks that little something, that extra excitement that they can find in a man who they think has a certain 'savoir faire' and will carry them away on a white horse and sometimes they think they have found that 'fantasy' and, in the process, destroy all that they already have.
Stunningly realistic. Simply wonderfully written. Thank you, Inkhorn; you are a true storyteller! Five stars ⭐️ for this one.
As a fellow depression sufferer whose spouse has suffered along with me to the point of leaving to maintain their own sanity, this one really hit home. The lines about not being able to move forward because of punishing oneself are very true, and unfortunately that makes any sort of "recovery" even more difficult.
The Cindy's of the world are...saints?, angel's? a bit of both? It was very good to see Jack able to recover to the point of being functional again.
☆☆☆☆☆
Loved it. Great story. 7 stars, because i can't count. Everybody knows that. The Bear approves. But I do appreciate a good story, that tugs at your heart strings. I don't understand how people can tolerate actions like Gwen's. But that is life, and you have to experience it to know. Are you better off with her in your life, of out? only he can answer that.
The BEAR
I believe this tale is, indeed, true to lifs’ reality. Excellent, heald my attention throughout, even though h halfway through I realized I had read it before long ago.
Very good story although it left me longing for more. I would love to hear that Joe found out that Charity was Jack's daughter and not his. Please we need another chapter for this one. You could do one very well I am sure. Please do it because I'm sure a lot of us would love to hear about what happened to Jack & Charity. Did she marry her girlfriend. Did he attend the wedding?
Truer to life for a sad sack loser. You stumble you fall then you pick yourself back up and move on. Well written though 4 stars
I have a friend who has a similar story. I put it to paper a while back and it's sitting on my shelf. Maybe one of these days, I will get to it. The funny part is it even has dungeons and dragons in it. The major difference is how the son came about. You know, maybe it's worth cleaning up and editing.
Loved and hated the story. But you are right more true to how life is. I do agree that one more chapter would be nice to close it out and tie up loose ends. Thanks for your time and hard work.
An average guy in bed with my wife in a room that reeked of sex. The raw stench of it hung in the air.
You are one of the few who write for Literotica that even acknowledge that there is an aroma/smell to sex and that it doesn't dissipate seconds after the act(s) is/are completed.
Wow. Lots of unexpected turns to this story. Letting real life into the story made it harder to read, but no matter how many times I put it down I just had to keep reading.
Gwen and Joe were just so over the top thinking what they wanted was OK and that if they just explained it well enough Jack would somehow accept it.
One of the most poignant parts was when Jack pointed out that Gwen really loved Joe more because she had not hidden any part of herself from him like she had from Jack. Just a great detail to include.
Just tremendous! Inkhorn is a true storyteller. Five big stars ⭐️ for this one!
Very well put-together story, and a refreshing ending. I know that the original premise may seem unlikely to most, but I actually know of a situation that was startlingly similar, and shockingly resolved itself perfectly amicably. Everyone who was privy to the situation was surprised at the outcome, but those involved simply sorted it out and went on with their lives, not married, but still friendly.
agreed that having too much money and not having to think about it makes for an easier plot line I guess. a good fantasy. but difficult for most readers to relate too.
interesting the story lead to the narrator dying, was uncertain how the story was going to survive the narrator being dead. enjoyed that it was a clown that brought him back.
and the pain of his love for Gwen and his broken trust in her was evident in his refusal to be drawn back into her life through their shared daughter. nice bow tied on the plot by acknowledging her lies to Jack, Joe, and her daughter, and that Gwen thought it was fair and the reader seeing it as ironic that Joe did not know the paternity of the daughter and that he got to raise her.
thank you for the story