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Click hereWhen we calmed down Sarah handed me an envelope as I opened it I saw that it was from the DNA laboratory.
"I don't want to know," I said.
"Read it Harry" Sarah almost shouted.
I started to read. The main part of the letter was presented as a table.
Subject: Paternity dispute the alleged father being one Gary Dawson
Alexander Anderson probability <0.1%
Madeleine Anderson probability <0.1%
Jacob Anderson probability <0.1%
I was stunned, then Susan handed me another envelope.
"After what I did to you Harry I realize that I had no right to expect you to believe there had been no one else so I used your old toothbrush as a sample and got this one done" she said.
This letter followed the same pattern except this time the alleged father was Harald Anderson
Alexander Anderson probability >99.9%
Madeleine Anderson probability >99.9%
Jacob Anderson probability >99.9%
"They're all yours Harry," said Sarah
"Now for some light relief" Sarah said. She gave me a smaller envelope. Inside was a gold edged invitation, which read.
Mr Gordon McCurrie and his wife Elizabeth request the pleasure of the company of Mr and Mrs Harry Anderson on the occasion of Mr McCurrie's 60th Birthday party.
"I can't go to that." I said "The last time I saw him he threw me out."
"He said you would say something like that so he wrote something personal on the back." Sarah said. "He said you would understand what it meant"
On the back of the invitation he had written, "I am Asking"
"Take plenty of business cards Harry and I think he has a business proposal for you."
Well that is the end of the most traumatic year of my life. Sarah's father did indeed have a proposition for me and we are just about to open our Business & I.T. Consultancy service. My two wives, for that is the way I think of them, live with our families in the big house that I used during the separation.
Luke has got involved with Alex and I in restoring the Velo, which should be ready to show by August. Gary did not contest the divorce so never got to find out that the evidence was all bluff. I would like to tell you what happened to him but to be quite honest I don't care enough to find out.
Armed with her evidence Susan did tell my mother all about what happened. Mum sort of accepts it because her grandchildren are still her grandchildren. John and Elaine still come to visit John says, "I always knew you would find a solution" of course the fact is that I didn't. Elaine is the real surprise, she still acts kindly to me and refers to our living arrangements as being avant guard."
If I were a vengeful man I would say that my vengeance was complete. I had not only screwed Gary's wife but also made her pregnant. I had stolen his family and robbed him of his meal ticket. However I am not a vengeful man and all I can see is that if none of that had happened I would not have Sarah in my life and I would not be looking forward to the birth of our daughter. Another child to call me Daddy.
Daddy, now that really is the best word in the English Language.
- COMMENTS
Read this again, a remarkable story, l thoroughly enjoyed it.
It still rates a 5/5
Miracle. Polyamory a solution for a big win for almost everybody? (Brigham Young would be so proud?) Happy, good role modeling for the boys?
Fucking outstanding. I love Hollywood happy endings. Life is a shitstorm enough. We need a few happy endings to keep us alive. Well done.
So two chapters and lots of pages for a nonevent, why didn’t he do what every other husband in the world would have done and had DNA tests done and just like that bish-bash-bosh job done kids are mine and there’s jam for tea. Of course it would be only one page and all the better for it.
Knew the kids were his when Susan revealed thr turkey bester. Doesn't work. Not enough velocity and hard to align with the cervix. Really low probability of success. The biggest ending was dumb. Husband went through severe emotional distress but didn't do anything rational for a long time. Abandoned his kids, got some.measure of revenge on Gary and fell in love with Sarah and cheated on Susan repeatedly without getting shit for facts. Please. Simple first step is a DNA test. Then confront Susan period. Can either file for divorce before or after Alex is out of the woods. His son nearly died because he was petulant and immature. Seriously? DNA test. But author wanted biganist ending. It is his story. But the reader doesn't have to like it. Still well written. Just crazy behavior. Stupidity on part of Susan. Idiocy and punitive behavior by an immature husband, who yeah he should be pissed, but get some information first. Sarah was the only adult.
Wow, I wasn't too impressed with the ending of part 1, but the author brilliantly saved and concluded it here. Easy 5 stars. Both for the happy end AND great writing. I especially appreciated the "don't care what happened to the gary guy" mindset.
One can not overemphasizes the importance of booty calls in a failing relationship. Not being vengeful helps too
Great writer and a good story. The "Norman ending" with 2 wives is a real stretch but I'lk give the author the benefit of the doubt. The one thing I don't understand is how he made ends met, for 6 months he did nothing but go back and forth from Susan to Sarah's house.:)
Hmm... It seems the only honest adult here is Sarah. But it took a very bad marriage to see it. The other two were just convincing themselves that they wanted something unique, and was willing to do anything to achieve it. On another note, the lack of resemblance of the children to him was never explained in any way. This was absolutely a fantastic story, and I guess similar situations may have happened in real life, and so many men would jump at the opportunity to have two very willing wives to share one husband. 5/5 stars. Well written, and thank you.
Really, 2 wives? I'm glad to see the kids are his, but going back to Susan? I guess it is one result, but I think the better one would have been to divorce Susan and marry Sarah.
Anonymous from the 3 months ago starting with "Odd." had it right. The MC is a shitty protagonist. Susan fucked up taking decisions into her own hands that were wrong. She made serious mistakes (3 times) thinking Gary was able to father their kids (surprise!). She acted on wrong intel, apparently knew nothing of in vitro methods, sought to spare the feelings of inadequacy by her husband, and performed a clinical procedure 3 times (thinking the first was successful) with at most a handjob and a turkey baster (which won't work btw worth a damn). What does MC do? He runs, abandons family, and has a full.blown emotional and then physical affair with Sarah and knocks her up, leading to a bigamist relationship dynamic. Huh?
What a load of crap lying to your Husband and getting pregnant by another guy 3 x isn't some little deception 🙄 And where does the whole Susan is so great come from this bitch is weak as fuck has the back bone of a fucking slug and is supposed to be this bastion of femininity.
And the MC as per usual what a fucking pathetic wimp bends over for his wife bends over for Sarah basically he's a total Pussy like every other Guy that's depicted by this Author😳
Really?! The last 2 pages almost ruined an excellent tale. The storie should have developed with him staying with Sarah and gradually Sarah accepting Elaine and the kids moving in
A nice twist on LW genre. Well written and paced. Thank you for your time and talent. DMW
I liked the story. Would have felt bad if Sarah got completely aced out.
Agree with those that having two women living with a man is a male fantasy. Two momma bears in the same house is difficult enough, but also vying for the affections of one man is asking a lot.
It reminds me of the Bud Light commercial with Cedric the Entertainer. His fantasy was being on a deserted island with his beer and two hot women. Fantasy blows up when the women start nagging him with honey-do work. He shakes his head and reimagines his fantasy. He is still on an island, but the women are replaced with a gas barbecue and a golden retriever.
Odd. I can understand the husband being upset about the deception of paternity. But he and Susan were told he was shooting blanks. Assuming this story was set in a time before modern IVF procedures, they would have gotten a sperm donor, yes? That sperm donor would have been from another man. Probably a stranger but someone they selected from a clinic. Ok so what has him so massively upset he would flee his family the day after Alex gets back from the hospital, to have a lot of adulterous sex with Sarah (revenge against Gary was a small part of it), fall in love with Sarah, br out of the house for almost six months, only see his kids on weekends and plan to file divorce? Is it (a) that the sperm donor was chosen without his knowledge by his wife and is Gary Dawson, (b) that his wife was in a bra and panties and gave a quick handjob to Gary, albeit three times, getting no pleasure or any other contact whatsoever, or (c) that he though he was the father and really wasn't because his wife lied to him and kept it hidden. I am guessing it is some combination of all three BUT does that warrant all his actions especially when he doesn't talk to his wife for many weeks, and still then refuses to get tested despite being a donor match for his son(??). I think it more likely he just assumed without talking to his wife that she was having an affair with Gary for four years (which was apparently totally incongruous with her behavior), birthing three of Gary's kids. Even if the latter might have been true using the turkey baster approach (which btw good luck with that working, that is basically an old wives' tale), he just jumped to conclusions about the first without confronting Susan (not saying it wouldn't be probable for many couples) or even talking to her. Then when she tells him and he believes her, by then he has been banging Sarah for quite some time. Then he is butthurt about what the in laws and kids think? I het it with the kids, especially Alex, but for the love of God, tell Susan that she has to come clean to them or else they will never get back together. It takes Sarah to do that? Huh? Look I know at face value that Susan lied about something big, and some would say she cheated though it sounded like what she did was clinical like a nurse might have done in the old days to get a "sample", and she was reluctant to come clean as she carried her lie around for 14 years, but again how different wad the effect than if they got a donor from a clinic to donate sperm to impregnate Susan three times? The difference is (a) he knows who and got to choose, (b) his wife just went into a clinic to get the sperm injected into her womb, and (c) he doesn't like the lie the kids are his (though they actually were, which is a ridiculous coincidence given their prior difficulties). I am not mocking there wouldn't be pain and anguish for the MC but it is NOT an attempt to hurt him, to marginalize him, to disrespect him, to get intimacy from another man, and was not real adultery. But what he did, and Susan was so accepting of and resulting in the author's desired ending of a bigamist relationship, was actually really freaking bad. Not only did he repeatedly cheat on Susan (did not file or legally separate) with Sarah, but he had a full blown emotional affair with Sarah and fell in love with her during those months he (mostly) abandoned his family, and oh yeah got Sarah also pregnant. This seemed like he was so upset that he got the cart before the horse. Do things in sequence. Confront Susan. Get DNA tests. Maybe a revenge fling once you get confirmation but not a full blown "choose between two lovers" scenario. Susan made a dumb mistake (which she repeated two more times, since it appeared to work the first time) and lied about it for many years (probably got harder to tell the truth as years went on). And there needed to be some sort of reckoning. But the MC was a scared asshole who ran and then lived as if divorced and only showed courage when he donated a kidney to Alex. What he did to Susan really also sucked. A lot. The MC was a pretty shitty protagonist in hindsight.
The central tenet of the LIterotica website (aside from making money) is to provide aspiring or polished writers an opportunity to share their (mostly erotic) fantasies in story form and to have those critiqued (or commented upon) by whoever has the will to make the effort. Obviously the readership is so vast that comments will range the gamut from very positive to very negative--which is as it should be because each individual reader responds according to their own psychological/emotional state; that's just the way life works--FOR EVERY ASPECT OF LIFE.
Whether you liked the plotline of this story or the conclusions (i.e. living/loving arrangements) are irrelevant to whether the author wrote well in terms of style and content, and developed his characters such that they achieved believable status. I personally think he accomplished both--not only giving depth to each of the protagonists but also inserting a living arrangement (polyamory--disguised here as a menage) which is now discussed quite often in the public domain as a viable lifestyle and found to be so by a growing number of people. As to how smoothly such arrangements work over the long term? Only the participants know.
Yes, in some ways the ending is a juvenile fantasy--but it is not possible (any longer) to deny the very real possibility that it exists.
5 out of 5. Well done and more please.
No more than 3 stars. Veered away from reality when the kidney match worked for him after all the Gary build up, then went further and further away as he found a second "wife" all fit and eager to please him and to top it all the paternity tests all made him a winner. Then the two women agreed to live under the same roof as him. At that point we moved into a parallel universe far from reality.
Take this tale at face value and it's the perfect male fantasy. Look at it with a small dose of skepticism and it's two sluts uniting forces to keep their meal ticket and developing an arrangement that allows them to keep slutting around.
An inspiring story any way.
Great Writing
For 3 pages I thought this was going down the usual path and then....... sort of expected it.
Sort of was hoping for it.
When you get your reader do involved...... 5/5
Original
Keep Writing
Why read the comments first? So I can thank the people who suffered and let me know just how much of a waste of money it is to store this dumpster fire on their servers. Share him. Gtfo. I swear some men are stuck at puberty
Pretty cool story, I have to tell you! I'm running through all your stories in alphabetical order and this is my favorite so far. "Almost" believable and how many stories can you say that about on this site? LOL 5*
The Chinese pictograph for 'chaos' is that of two female figures under one roof.
The Mormon solution would have made more sense if Harry weren't such a complete arsewipe. He abandons his desperately sick son and despairing wife and children when they need him most. Won't talk to his wife - and at least hear her side of the story - while happily allowing another emotionally vulnerable women to fall in love with him. How selfish, insensitive and self-indulgent do you need to behave like that?
Fantasy Hollywood ending that makes a mockery of all that went before.
LA
I have multiple mistresses who know about each other. Living under one roof polygamously? It would be beyond awful. If this is your fantasy, find another.
5* because the solution is a mans dream even its reallly risky. But hey, we are all here on a erotic site to read storys and not all storys have to be close to reality.
Wow! I must admit I was torn with which of the women he should go with. Boy you pulled this out at the end. Great job! Wish I could go higher than a 5.
Interesting, but two wives are better in fantasy than in reality.
Interesting conclusion. The ending kind of delved into the fantasy realm in that Susan and Sarah decided to share Harry and transform their relationship into a polyamorous relationship with Harry in the middle as the linchpin.
Great story. But no doctor should ever refuse to test for a kidney match no matter how low the odds. Doesn't make sense strangers donate kidneys all the time.
She waited till most fertile to insert semen and yet all 3 times it didn't take?!
Sex is still sex hand jobs count. Dressing up in lingerie for other than spouse cheating
3 times and thinking it is not husband!
And he believes she doesn't want to hurt him?
WIMPY CUCKOLD
"I took a robe into Alex"
But that is child abuse!
On a serious note, what a nice cheery ending. Susan attempted paternity fraud, but in the end, did not succeed. Husband believed her flaky story (I still find it fishy), loved her and their family too much to run off with Sarah, and in the end, wound up in a supposedly loving 3-way relationship. Well, all is well that ends well, I guess. Sure left this reader with a good feeling, so thank you for that.
But still, that story with the 3 lingerie clad hand jobs... It just doesn't ring 100% true. Why would the dingdong do it for a couple of hundred buckaroos, spread out over several years, when he supposedly had this amazing meal ticket through his wife? That is just one of many questions surrounding that sordid tale.
But hey, now that our hero has two wives competing for his attensions, does he really need the first one to be 100% trustworthy? Second one is even hotter and younger... Sounds like the perfect insurance plan, does it not?
Awesome finish to a great story. I like happy endings. All the best......
I see some commentators didn't care for this one but I think it was a great solution, especially for Harry. I am making my way through all your stories and am mostly loving them. Keep them coming, yeh Ken?
WHile I loved the plot and the characters for the most part, portions of this little 2-part ditty felt flat and unfinished; glued in just to fill a spot in the telling.
Rated Part 2 at 4*.
She cheated and cheated and cheated
1 attempt which she believed worked possibly forgive
3 times no way
... I was an “Assistent Medical Services Custodial Engineer”, i.e. I was a hospital janitor. I cleaned toilets, mopped piss spilled from full catheter bags, cleaned shit from floors when patients pooped themselves during physical therapy (only happened twice, but stil...). No, shit (oh, a pun); that was my title. Now, if it was that vs. a social worker (as is the case of the guy her family thought was a “social better” than him) I could understand. It wouldn’t be “right” but I could understand a parent wanting their college educated daughter marrying elsewhere.
Not that that being a janitor is bad. Heck, it helped pay my tuition and books. Most of the people I worked with were good people (except my asshole super who really who gave all the college kids who worked under him a nasty time). (My mother was a waitress for 20+ years and put three kids through college) And I knew several of the older workers were putting their kids through school, and paying rent or mortgage to keep their kids clothed and fed. You do what you have to do to live. But janitor vs social worker vs mechanical engineer. You figure it out.
Not the first time this has come up in a story before. Guess I have to go searching for it in the other story(s) to see if it is a British-thing.
In my neck of the woods an engineer is right up there, in the salaried professional world, with anyone in at least a middle management white collar position, or someone just under MD in the medical profession. Maybe it’s just the “Silicon Valley” socio-economic setting I’ve lived in for the last 30 years.
A physically mild (not weak) man with the courage to do everything as “right” as he can. And in the end wins ALL the marbles.
...than the way chp. 1 left things. Thank you for sharing your stories with us.
Thanks for such pleasure filled reading. Wish more than 5* were possible.
Fairy Tale! That's the beauty of a work of fiction. You can do with it what you wish. "Much Ado About Nothing". All the children were his. 5*s.
Not a story to be treated as anything other than an over the top comedy of errors. What attracts a woman to a particular man is a mystery that I've never quite managed to solve and I am certainly no wiser having witnessed Susan and Sarah's obsession with Harry who - like most Literotica husbands - makes decisions ahead of the facts, thinks with his dick, abandons his children, operates on double standards and has the sensitivity of a flying brick. Entertaining nonsense - but nonsense nevertheless.
LA
Well, after all he did end up raising Gary's children didn't he?
I'm not jumping up and down as other commenters about the ending to be honest.
The polyamours family thing is not of my liking. Of course your writing and storytelling is superb. I truly enjoyed reading this story. However I think you went into a fantasy ending because you took the cowards way out. It takes really a lot, to believe that a man like Harry would gladly accept something like this. Of course it's a male fantasy, and we are all smiling about how good he things turned to be in the end for Harry, but it's really weakened the story and your heroe.
I know this is suspended reality.....but this was the most, hilarious and best possible ending! Thanks for the great read and laughs! 5*
I'm not even into polyandry or any form of multiple partners and loved this story.
Well done!
Great story, didn't see that ending coming. Nice to see a story in this category end on a happy note for a change.
Some are debating whether or not realistic. When it comes to a story being believable or not, all any author is responsible for is to create an environment that allows the reader the opportunity to suspend incredulity, however grudgingly. The author has to meet us halfway, well, maybe a little more than that, but we are talking about using our imaginations here, aren't we? As readers, it's our responsibility to make that jump from disbelief to acceptance once the author has successfully provided us with the necessary tools.
For example: I would scoff and stop reading any story that suggested dinosaurs could be cloned just because some rich guy "hired the best scientists in the world and they figured out a way to do it because they're THAT awesome". However, if the author was to tell us about how dinosaurs could be cloned because biting insects were caught in amber back in the day, and then scientists drilled into the gut of that insect and pulled DNA from it, then provides some details about recombinant technology, etc., yeah, I'd read that story in heartbeat - and did - probably like most of us here. That author provided us with enough tools for us to suspend disbelief and go along with him to enjoy the story (and the eventual blockbuster movie).
I think DYK gave us enough to accept the story as presented, at least he did for me. Yeah, we could nit-pick it to death if we wanted to, like any other story, but we're supposed to use our imagination to fill in some of the missing details, right? Susan was on the pill, got off the pill to try and start a family, didn't get preggars right away so she started tracking ovulation and etc. Then she got desperate and stupid and collected the other sperm and would then inject it, but only a while after making love with her husband. Susan said, "I always gave you a head start Harry, I really wanted them to be yours." Then, after the baby was born, she got back on the pill until they were ready for another. Remember that after the first baby, Susan didn't have to try, and try, and try, hoping she'd get pregnant. She thought she had a fool proof method so the babies could be "planned" rather than take 'em whenever the stork brings them.
I thought it was a great story with a happy (if fanciful) ending. I wouldn't have ended the story that way, but it was nice. Remember: "Where do you think I have been going this last month?" Susan asked, " Sarah has been giving me the treatment she gave you and we have become like sisters. Add to that we have something in common. We are both deeply in love with you."
This is another moment where it's our job (as readers) to suspend disbelief, use our imaginations to fill-in-the-blanks, and maybe be a little generous with our interpretation of DYK's writing: Susan and Sarah are TOTALLY having sex with each other too! :^)
This is a porn site, right?
He continues cheating after knowing the truth and doesn't care. He makes love to his wife and feels guilt for cheating on Sarah - What a dick. He is cheating on Susan with Sarah
In the 1st part he was in favour of AID and Susan did not cheat. Although she self AID'd with another man's sperm without his explicit consent I still think he went overboard with his reaction. And to feed his self pity he continued accusing her of cheating and at one stage of saying the cheating was ongoing.
I can see why he thinks so much of Sarah - she thinks and has the views of a man so he always agrees with her. One of the quirks of male authors - unable to have the female perspective. And the male in Susan's personality - continued taking all the blame and even allowing him to continue "shagging" Sarah when he came back home.
Despite the holes in the plot it was well written and an enjoyable read.
During Gary's exploits with prostitutes he probably caught something that rendered him sterile. The vasectomy he got later on was just locking the barn door after the horses had escaped.
I cannot improve on chief3blanket's evaluation of this story. Thanks for your effort.
the fact that it is just a story and you're given some latitude for that. What I found was that your quaint English verbage was a pleasant factor. Now I know that must sound odd to you since it comes from an American but I enjoyed that part of the tale. I got caught up with the characters and was intertained. Thank you .. Scotty
So they're all going to live together as one big happy family? Until someone squeals to the Police about their living arrangements and takes the kids away from the cheating idiots. A truly terrible resolution to this messed up story.
see there are more equally imp factors with sperm, all that is needed is one, not to say one will do, but even below normal can fertilze a NON-HOSTILE uterus, sperm motility is a key factor, nums are low but good motility, will get the job done just like seal team 6,
for a lay mans answet,when u jack off what u see is mostly food & protection for the sperm, color,smell,viscosity are vague guesses(taste too, for the ladies).
the primary reason any sensible gynaec will tell u is plain & simple STRESS.
u dont have to agree, but i do hold a medical degree.
so the reason am being defensive? may be i am overcompensating, trying to be macho or am just tired of trying to convince my best friend & her hubby who have been tryin since 3 yrs, but think that it has to be done correctly,with all the charting & logs. yet regularly find enough time time to get depressed & argue on silly things, all i can do now is smile.
this one Ken. I always like your writing and am happy to say that I still like most of your stories and for me that is good. I'm not sure that I'm man enough to have 2 wives. I'm pretty sure I'm not brave enough to have two wives, that's for sure.
Thanks for sharing your talent with us.
I have just about read all of your stories and find them all very entertaining and worthy of a 5. I evaluate stories on whether or not they are enjoyable and a pleasure to read and to what degree.
Great, interesting, cool happy ending without going nuclear.....bill
, yes it is HIGHLY unlikely that not only does the guy with low sperm count get Susan pregnant 3 times, but each time only after she uses the turkey baster?
Wouldn’t he have failed at LEAST one of those times, and as Sarah showed, couldn’t he have succeeded at LEAST one time when she hadn’t used it?
"No" he said "but she might be the reason you don't come back."
That’s not true – in fact, Sarah won’t be with him unless he decides first to leave Susan.
He should definitely tell his mother why he doesn’t want to be with Susan.
Sarah’s right – he should tell Susan that they are going to meet with her parents, and she is going to tell them EVERYTHING, or else he will proceed with the divorce and their only interaction will be around his visitation with the kids.
Alex made a good point – you could MAYBE excuse one time out of her desperation to have children, but once she had one she should have stopped her cheating, and yes, even without intercourse it WAS cheating!
It’s all well and good that Elaine accepts him NOW, but he shouldn’t have had to “earn” her respect. That’s PRECISELY why he didn’t want to tell them!
I don't find the final solution as hard to believe as others do. Both women were deeply in love with him, and knew he could never really be happy without one or the other. I DO have doubts about the three of them sharing a bed, that implies a degree of intimacy between the two women that I find HIGHLY unlikely!
All kinds of time passes on the occasions where it's reasonable to assume hubby and her were having all kinds of sex... maybe an assumption but it doesn't seem unlikely...
On or about the three occasions where she turkey basters herself after jerking off the jerkoff for his sperm-laden cum she becomes pregnant... as if her husband's sperm has just been loitering around wasting time until they died... EXCEPT when they saw jerkoff's sperm heading for their maker's wife's egg... and THEN they've said, "Oh screw that!" and raced to impregnate said egg before the interloper could...
And then... some eleven years later... his sperm is floating along and sees this egg... and says, "You know, we haven't seen one of THESE in ages... let's see what IT'S all about." And presto change-o woman two gets pregnant in almost no time...
Sure, this story stretches Occam's razor past the breaking point... but yeah, I liked it anyway...if you can accept the odds of the various preggos occurring as they did, everything else follows just fine...
Plus, I'm a sucker for happy endings...
Not the ending I expected, but I am delighted the story turned out as well as it did. Thanks for a fun read. Cheers!
I though the author might use the fact that she went on birth control after their last child to show she was still visiting Gary.
Since he was 'shooting blanks'.
I guess that wasn't the approach and wasn't needed.
Ratbuster
I think of all the stories I've rated, only a handful have earned 5 stars. There were a few punctuational issues (I believe...though I certainly don't proclaim to be an expert by any means) but this was a wonderful read and a lovely story!!
Fabulous story !
I would have like some detail on how the 3 interacted with one another, especially in the bedroom.
Do the girls get yo ne slightly Bi ! ?
Didn't really see the ending coming until Sarah got pregnant. Very entertaining story. Well done!
Not a fan of the poly ending. Additionally, it seems utterly miraculous that this guy would be the father of all three kids - especially given what she did each time. And of course, as potent as he apparently was, she only got pregnant by him after she met with the other guy and deposited his sample. Very hard to swallow.
Although, quite incredible bordering fantastic, almost completely implausible but well presented and entertaining. The timing was perfect and the emotions well spent and voluminous. All the characters were vivid and tangible to actually care about. The dilemma had no easy out. Some authors would kill off a character for an easy ride but not this one. Although, a tough sell ending, it worked for me. Susan and Sarah, I cared deeply about and I wanted them to come out unscathed. Thanks for a well written story!!!
I'm an old Romantic, and the burn and destroy school of thought gets a bit boring after awhile. A pleasant yarn, well told.
Hi D Y K
I am writing to say that I have read most of the stories in this group and have enjoyed them all. Guess I am just an old romantic at heart and love happy endings. Yes it is some men's dreams to have an ending such as this, there are some who could not imagine having two women who love him deeply not to mention that the families and kids all fitted in together without prejudice. If you need an editor sometime look me up as I would get great pleasure in having the opportunity to pre read your stories. Keep writing and giving enjoyment to your readers.
It really is a happy ending. I can't get myself to believe that this is a realistic ending, but it was a happy one. There no one on the planet earth that things work out this well for. However, because I fell in love with Sarah's character, I will accept it. I knew that she would be the odd one out. I hoped that you would have her find another love interest before she got the boot. This one works too. So glad she is happy.
Frankly my dear, up until the last page of the 2nd chapter, I could not comprehend where this storyline was wandering. DYK, I must complement you for achieving a coherent ending to a very confusing story. That peak is a rare accomplishment even among paid writers using professional publishers.
As for the Velo motorbike, I sure as shootin' hope you get decent gas-shocks on it. Cause if I remember correctly, it has been a hell of a long time since I was on one, those damn things were real kidney punchers. And two of the riders are each peddling with only one over-medicated kidney each? There is nothing manly about stupidity.
I do have a problem believing that the rigid prigs described in this story would ever be able to change their opinions based on verifiable fact. Maybe the author knows a better class of in-laws then I have had the misfortune to experience.
Just as the BTB mob will twist the author’s writing to suit their prejudices and misogyny. They are a District Attorney’s wet dream on a jury. Whatever unsubstantiated rumors and unverifiable evidence the DA presents is swallowed whole by these gullible narcissists who have already determined to vote the defendant guilty against all the facts presented.
LOL Elaine is in her own little world isn't she?
But it is a fun way to have poor Judge Harry Anderson be the big winner -
But I liked this one. Don't worry about the english teacher, she's just mad because cause the hood won't come off her clit and her batteries are dead.