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by Hooked1957
- 146 Comments
while I have not had the pleasure of a glass of 15 year old Pappy Van Winkle, I was very luck to get to enjoy a glassy 10 year Pappy. It is something one drinks slowly and savors, never thrown back like a glass of Jack
I had to give 2 stars for abusing Pappy.
CLASSIC, GET RID OF WHITE SKANK FOR ORIENTAL YELLOW TAIL. TYPICAL AVERAGE DICK WHITE GUY. MAKE THE WEST WHITE AGAIN/ MWWA.
Some aspects of this story made this a unique cheating story. And the ending made me smile. A big 5 stars!
An Excellent yarn made all the better by Victor pulling his head out of his backside and getting together with Lainey. While I appreciate that love can't be turned off like a switch it always irks me when a male character continues to compare subsequent dates with the skank that cheated on him, stubbornly refusing to accept the fact that the sun doesn't shine out of her butthole. 4 stars.
Why would Traci be mostly unemployable? After all, everyone knows she puts out, so she ought to be in demand! 😇
Thank you for the story, Mr. 1957. I look forward to your next. Randi.
For the most part, the story requires a substantial, but still acceptable, degree of suspension of disbelief from the reader. The ending scene, however, pushes the envelope too far. Wise guys don't climb the ranks to become Mafia bosses by spending time worrying about having accidently harmed a third party. Such a showing of weakness could prompt a Boss' enemies to test his hold on the reins of power. Thus, the Godfather never says, "I'm sorry."
Capice?
Started well then fizzled off to a lackluster ending. Ordinarily I might complain about unanswered questions, but this ending with Barile is totally unnecessary. I guess it’s good that Barile doesn’t feel guilty anymore, but why would a feared Mafia boss be feeling any guilt to begin with?
Kind of goofy, but I always enjoy selfish cheating wives having to pay the price for their destructive choices
I like this author but don't understand why the Traci characters are almost always written with no or very little remorse. They have usually been HAPPILY married for some time, then cheat, and then are pretty much ok with the husband leaving them?
They don't take responsibility for their actions and in fact sometimes repeat them. Often their children forgive them easily or aren't mad at all. (Though the kids here were at least upset with her some.) But overall I just don't get it. And often they still get their own happy ending. In this one, at least she doesn't end up overly happy but still.
It just seems like the Traci characters are usually not punished enough and don't regret their affairs enough or the loss of their husband's. I don't feel they have to be destroyed in every story. But sometimes seeing genuine remorse and strong consequences would be nice.
We're always looking for original ways for hubby to discover his wife's infidelity and this was great. Poor Big Tony, though. Anyone can make a mistake. :-) I loved this and gave it a 5. Good one, Hooked1957.
Good read, as usual, but I want you to know there's nothing wrong with Paducah. (I you
re driving through it - LOL) 5* - Salut!
This is supposed to be a site for SEX stories; not high school writing class. BOOOORING
After reading all this writer's work, I've come to heartily dislike all women named Traci!!! LOL. Thanks for the story. Cheers!
Enjoyed another Traci story. The mafia connect was new. Never seen a man so pleased after 4 months of incarceration. 5*
Rare to see a new story outline here, this is a good day. Definitely one of Hooked's most entertaining romps.
Liked it, got couple chuckles out of it. I liked the way you gave some characters the chance to tell their little story.
i would have preferred a more linear story line. Finding out the mystery was solved early in the story released a lot of tension
Not bad, only issue is 4 1/2 months in jail with no evidence doesn't happen to people with a lawyer & money in 'Merica
You go to prison when u r sentenced. Why did he spend 4 months in jail? There was zero evidence? Really poor plot and your writting is tough to follow.
What not to like about this. The two lovers got a big BTB. She is now in a very small town , the lover got his in two shots, the good guy came out on top.
The story is based on absolute claptrap, there was no evidence whatsoever that the husband killed her lover, at best it is very circumstantial; they would have checked both his hands and clothes for powder burns and found nothing, no witnesses; any half decent lawyer would have had the charges dismissed before trial.
A fun read! Nice variation on the cheating theme!
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Did have a few quibbles that, for me, made this less than perfect:
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— Lack of any real conversations between Traci and Victor both before and after the divorce robbed the tale of any catharsis. Frankly, it made the enjoyment of tne final scene with Barile much less than it otherwise would since readers didn’t go thru Vic’s anguish beforehand enough.
— Lack of any real experience with Traci losing all….not just her relationship with Vic, but more especially her kids. Would have liked to “feel” that better. Again….it made her banishment to Paducah less impactful.
— A nit, but the constant highlighting of Vic’s experience in tne media…which got Barile so mad…was never really explained.
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That said…still a superior effort, and one of the better contributions in weeks around here.
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4 very strong ****
Another fine, entertaining and well-written tale by one of my favorite LW authors.Nice touch with the ending, bringing the story full circle to conclude with the Barile character.5*
Another Traci bites the dust. I really enjoy these stories and how karma plays such a big role. Nice job and 5 stars from me.
5 stars and yes, I appreciated this story, as both the ASSHOLE and SLUT got exactly what they deserved.
Yup, gangsters go around apologizing. Decent plot for a short story otherwise.
Nice new story line. Coming up with a newer way to catch the cheating wife is difficult, well done.
How could someone be married to a woman for so long...have 2 children...and not have a clue about how narcissistic and selfish she really is?
Is it possible for a woman...in what was described as a happy marriage...to act the way she did? It was described as a good marriage. He treated her well. They had a good life. And she cheated. Wasn't very discreet about it either. Long term affair.
And when the murder happens she doesn't feel any guilt for cheating? Even if she thought her husband might have killed her lover, she makes zero attempt to see him? To apologize? To try and find out the truth? She just believes the worst of her life partner and cuts him out of her life completely? And talks him down in the most insulting manner possible to their 2 children? She attends the funeral of her lover...conspicuously enough to be noticed by his wife and her family? This is serious sociopathic behavior. Not caring whatsoever about how anyone else feels.
I found this character so repulsive as to be a bit unbelievable. Still gave it 5 stars because it's good writing.
⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ That was pretty original, with a good twist on the good guy coming out ahead and not necessarily finishing last.
How nice to have a unique spin on the 'catching the cheating wife' genre. 5 stars for the entertainment.
Cheating ho, the mafia, and ballistics-induced testicle removal. What's not to like?
Yet another novel way for the husband to find out about his wife’s cheating. you write well and I always enjoy your stories, but I didn’t understand much of the interaction between Vic and Lainey when they met (even after rereading it several times. Subtlety and innuendo are great, but this was apparently too subtle for me.
My only question would be why the thug wanted to meet with Victor in the first place?
A rushed, superficial little thing full of two-dimensional characters and improbably dialogue. Pass this on by; unfortunately, it's not worth reading.
Great original story plot with just the right amount of humor. Full 5 star rating for a fun story with a super finish!
There is something sexy about Italian mob bosses. Ruthless, well mannered gentlemen.
You got a love how All the top authors on the site all praise the story and give it a good rating while all the anonymous who probably haven’t or ever will contribute to the site always find no problem criticizing the authors work. I say well done as usual
Nope. The dialogue was complete shit. Little ffort went into it and it was clearly aimed for the easily impressed. Its called lazy writing.
At first I thought you had something, then you added the bottom feeder dialogue and totally destroyed any desire I had to finish it. This is the BTB version of a cuck level story.
Bloody hilarious story...I enjoyed this very different LW submission. Your crazy reminded me of a Tarrantino Pulp Fiction-like plot where the different scenes seem out of sync until you draw them together in that terrific last scene with Vic and George. Nicely executed (pun intended!)
Clever! Get the mafia to solve problems you didn’t even know you had. Gotta like it!
Another aardvark marriage. She's a loyal loving faithful wife and mother for many years, then Shazam!, she become's her boss's slut. And the husband just woke up one morning and realized, what the fuck, I married an aardvark. Hell, the whore was actually falling in love with the predator asshole and the husband, nor the children, had no clue. Did they all have the monkey pox? Hear no, see no, speak no. Oh yeah, you claimed it took a year of seduction. As if getting into a woman's pants is like building a house. A woman knows if she wants to fuck a man within a few minutes of meeting him. Then its just a matter of time and opportunity. If she gets laid, great. If it doesn't happen, then it wasn't meant to happen, yet. Women are much more practical about fucking then men are.
So I'm glad the whore got laid low, and the husband got the better woman. Thanks for the effort.
Very unique and an enjoyable read, though a better description of his times with Lainey would have been the icing on the cake, so to speak.
'Been a while since Hooked gave us a genuine BTB story. Glad to see he hasn't lost his touch.
Thanks for the share, author.
That was... something. A shallow story, characters were poorly constructed. I didn't care about any of them, not enough detail. The wife was an afterthought, she doesn't have much of a part for some reason. I didn't care at all about his search for a new wife; I was completely out of the story by that point. 3 stars, best I can do.
Try showing and not telling. Help the reader to understand what is going on, by giving the characters emotions. This was very hard to continue, because it was like reading a newspaper article on the events that happened. It almost felt as though you were trying to pander to the group that is against swapping and swinging stories. Never pander to anyone, write what you want. It's not about them, it's about your story. Keep up the work, it takes time.
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Author Tilan….who today posted a very average and almost boring tale …. goes after other authors in what he thinks was a clever critique.
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And yet this coward has neither scoring nor comments turned on for his stuff 😎
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What a Maroon 🥳
Bitch got what she deserved… forgotten by all and pushed out of the way to obscurity.
Jilted Hubby was redeemed by an unknown “hero” and rewarded with a stacked faithful woman. What’s not to like. 5 stars
Fairly clever story, but the cheating slut wife got off a bit too easily for my tastes.
As always a nice story, with a slightly twisted plot.
A good read.
Thanks, 5 stars...
Cagivagurl
As far as I know this was an original discovery method not a worn out troupe ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
"Well, I don't need to take Gary Finchell's leftovers!" One of the best lines I've read on here yet.
Pleasant story Hooked1957.
Too, too bad, the rest of it stays in your head, lol.
Thanks very much.
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AMerryman
Original and fun. Poor Traci, her self-inflicted tribulations will never end...
Why didn't he sue the police?.Two of the finest arrested him and charged him with murder with no proof what so ever.
Good apart from that you have used the same bits ( cut and paste??) of the new girlfriend from other stories.
I don't get it, what part of this is suppose to be erotic? Why do so many of you people write non-erotic stories?
To anonymous from 19 days ago. You will never 'get it'. The answer is that some people think with their big head, not the little one. It is obvious which one you use!
Thank you Hooked.
somewhere east of Omaha
Good story, and as someone else said, unique. Never seen that particular plot device before. Thanks for the story, Hooked.
Why didn't he sue the police for wrongful arrest and imprisonment.Ok,his wife was having an affair with the dead man but they had no evidence he knew about it or of him killing the lover.Any normal citizen would have. The police are always too eager to put the blame on some one.