All Comments on 'Strip Game Addicts Ch. 07'

Could only get through part of first page (Amy down to playing in socks) before absurdity overwhelmed the story.

First allow me to say that you're entitled to your own tastes, nothing wrong with that, and it's true my stories are more "unrealistic than not", it's a matter of design, not oversight.

If you would like to leave more constructive criticisms (better stories, etc.) feel free to do so, thank you for commenting, and I'm sorry the story wasn't to your liking.

Viredae, as you probably already saw in my fast comment to your email after this, I wanted more stories, but of just Amy. Naturally, you had hinted that her family would get in on this, and I really wish to read that. We have seen her rival strip and play with her, then her friends more times than could be counted. Now you need to shit the story again, and let her family have a chance to strip the girl. Admittedly, I would like a chapter with the parents, then a chapter with sibling(s), followed by a chapter with the entire family. If you can manage that, then I would be ever so grateful. I look forward to more naked Amy in the Strip Game Addicts series. Thank you

Hello ShyExposure, first let me thank you for enjoying the stories so far.

Second, yes, I have hinted at things to come with the main character's families, and that is probably coming soon, of course, I hope you noticed that I'm alternating between characters every chapter, and since the John stories have their own fans, I don't feel right skipping turns.

Rest assured that I will try to bring up stories concerning Amy's (and John's) family in the future, maybe earlier since they seem to be in demand.

Well alright, but I'm most hooked on Amy and how her family will strip and deal with her. I'm looking forward eagerly to such chapters, and will possibly skip john in favor of her. I apologize to your John fans, but I'm just so eager to read more of Amy, that I hope you do two chapters at once. One of john, then one of Amy. I'm looking forward to it

I enjoyed the first few in the series (even have the first bookmarked), which focused primarily on the strip games, but the last few have changed a bit. It seems like you're glossing over the strip games now, and rushing for the aftermath. Personally, my kink is the strip game and the reaction of Amy and others to the game (and to a lesser extent John, though I definitely enjoyed the game portion of 4). To me, the aftermath you're focusing on now is just another public use scenario, and there's plenty of those out there. Definitely continue writing what you want to write, but consider branching the series off if you're going to gloss over the strip games.

Viredae, maybe if you gave me the rough drafts to the new Amy chapters, I could help you with it some? I used to like writing before I fell out of practice. Still, I enjoy modifying some stories to make them have a bit more than the original. The core story will never change, but I think if I saw what you had for Amy, I could help. If you feel like it, please send the rough drafts to my email

Thanks for your feedback, and yes, some of the strip games do get glossed over, mainly because of the nature of the way I write, as sometimes I have a great idea for a forfeit/aftermath I want to write, and other times there's a nice twist with the strip game that I want to add, I assume you can guess what my intention in the stories you mentioned is.

Rest assured, the strip game kink is always going to be one of the main focuses of the series, but since this is free form writing, the escalation I provide may not be as structured in certain regards.

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Love that she said she didn't want her clothes at the end, especially since they usually don't give them to her anyway. She probably saw the pattern.

I also hope her mom is included in a future story. You mentione her several times.

Dude, you know that it's legal to put periods in the middle of paragraphs, right? They don't always have to be at the end?

Did you know that the reason people concatenate paragraphs is to save space in print? Seeing how this is a digital medium with functionally infinite space, there's really no point in doing that.

In fact, doing so reduces the readability, so it's generally a good idea to have as many paragraphs as reasonably possible when you write online, and just edit it down if you write for the purpose of being printed in homework essay or for a newspaper/journal/magazine/etc.