Thank You Ronnie Milsap

A good suspenseful and emotional story the whole way.

Would Loren ever get a grip on her heartless destruction of others, or was Jeff the only 'lucky' guy?

Really? A Victoria Secrets Model? Well, maybe for billionaires like Trump, but questionable for just your average corporate multimillionaire.

Still, I liked it and 5 stars.

The story went downhill fast when you switched to Loren's perspective. The whole recap you did with her was a bad idea. The dialogue started to suffer as well; the conversations barely seemed real.

Different than the usual BTB story. Mostly good different. I thought the ending strayed a little too far from a BTB. Jim got off easy overall. Still a good 4.

You need to find a better editor. The one you used missed too much. There was no need to provide a word for word duplicate of what was said when you wrote Loren’s part. Cutting and pasting dialogue to repeat what was said on the previous page is a sign of a weak, immature author. 2 stars because I’m feeling magnanimous.

She would rather ride in one hundred degree heat THEN get one hair out of place.

She would rather ride in one hundred degree heat THAN get one hair out of place.

I CANNOT comprehend how anyone who claims to be a writer can confuse those two words.

I liked the plot and how you handled it, apart from the cut and paste couple of pages in the middle, it wasn’t needed, not a bad story by any means

More stories please!!!

1) I agree with the writer who said the MC deserved what he got. 101%. Stupid is as stupid does.

2) As to JIm's wife's call, the correct response was "he's your spouse and your problem, NOT mine. What part of he was fucking my wife don't you get? He's lucky he still can walk. The two of you come over, he can get on his knees and apologize to my face, beg my forgiveness, and MAYBE I'll consider it. Until then, I'm sorry to hear your kids are on welfare."

3) Loren WAS all about the money, OBVIOUSLY. "Jim, you make thirty eight thousand dollars a year. You have no prospects of doing better. After Jeff's last promotion, with his year-end bonus he makes almost two hundred grand a year. I like you Jim, the sex is incredible, but you're not that good. Jeff is not bad in that department, so I will really not miss out too much. But someday he is going to be the CEO of that bank and I intend to be there to share it with him. So there will be no divorce."

I have met Ronnie mishap o nol....I'm sure he wouldn't recognize me though.I ever worked w/ one of his classmatea,, he always had a pretty girl on this arm. i saïd,"Dale, why do you always have a good looker all the time... Leave them for gays that - can see!!’~’., he said” its just sympathy!! -,d

Well written but stunning that he would be back with her, let alone marry her after the harvest dance and Billy Barber. Heck she married Billy Barber after their divorce. And there was no choice but to divorce.

This was a well written story. Only one time did the author get the names mixed up. A 5 star story.

This MC is a complete cunt. Marrying this slut when he even knew she was a liar. He deserved it all.

I actually liked The Gift as well. Lot more impact then this story.

It’s not nearly as well written as “The Gift”. It had many grammar problems along with short, choppy repetitive sentences. Frequently your sentences rhymed or you said]d the same thing in 3 sentences in a row. You need a much better Editor. Keep up the good work. MtM

Redundant for a bit. Too bad he loved her so much that he married her after she trashed him at the dance. Ended well for him.

What' I find most shocking is that he knew what kind of person she was and failed to wait until he'd found proof that she'd changed. Instead he went all in and the consequences are all on him. Seriously doubt that there is a Victoria secrets model that isn't also a scheming whore. So fail on that one too.

A good tale, not a waste of time. Thank you.

Loren had mental issues. If anything it wad the equivalent of a person who does self harm. She can't be content with what she has. Her internal viewpoint supports the fact that whole being stupid, naive and self centered, she is not a narcissist. But as she says at the end, she ha something wrong inside her that makes her blow things up in her life. It is a type of neurosis. Doesn't matter in terms of the marriage. After the dance and the aftermath, she already had a huge strike against her. As soon as Jeff found about her and Jim, it was over. Dead and buried. She didn't have a shot, as it should be. What really doesn't make sense is that she would marry Billy Barber, after her divorce. There is nonway that can work. I am sure we can guess why that marriage failed. That just made no sense. She really needed therapy, not marrying an oaf like Billy. Some people from time to time have this deep seated urge to set themselves on fire. Jeff did the absolutely right thing and moved on after the discovery of her affair with Jim. But not only fid he misinterpret her conversation with Jim about his rising in the bank, which Nina corrected later, but also her screams of passion. It was the illicit nature of the sex. Hardly doubt that Jeff was in any way an inferior lover. But they never got to that part of the conversation because he was just done with her. Surprised she didn't fight for counseling but suspected she knew it was over and she felt too guilty. Not that counseling would have mended the fences but it might have cleared some of the misinterpretations up. Again given what happened with the harvest dance, and honestly who would get past that in the first place, he was still young, and had his whole life ahead of him, but given he forgave her and they moved on together, when she stepped out again, it was a done deal. Kaput. Nada. Zilch.

Weird story. Why he got back together with her after the dance fiasco is odd. Also the fact that she married Billie after the divorce is strange. She was seriously self centered and damaged goods inside.

I did not have much use for the MC. Loren screwed him over earlier, so he was pretty naive to think she would not do so again.

Overall good but too long, as in page 4 was a wasted repeat of previous information. Also, Jeff wore a Yankee's hat, not Mets. Since Jeff was so rich he could have sent Jim's wife a check for 25 or 50K

You need a proofreader. You mess up.bames repeatedly, Jeff/Jmm, Beckman/Beckwith, you can't even keep the baseball cap right. Four stars for a very flawed manuscript. The repetition of pages of text from Loren's POV was maddening. The four stars is a gift, a rounding up from 3.5.

Good story and plot you held close too.

I thought it way too long though...

You noted clearly in the latter half of the story, when Loren's point of view, (POV), started. Thank you!

You maybe don't realize author, how many writers here, just switch POV with no warning at all. That makes stories damned hard to read and figure-out who's doing, or saying what now, and why.

I had two problems with your writing in this story, I will simply point-out, for you to think about. This, while writing and then editing and proofing your next story, before posting it here.

One, towards the last half, and through the last half of this story, you wrote Jim's name many times, when you clearly were writing about Jeff, or Loren thinking or talking about Jeff.

I even caught a couple times, you wrote Jeff's name, when you were clearly meaning to write about Jim.

Makes us have to stop reading and go back and figure-out who you really meant. That interrupts us readers story flow, as we read...

Two, when you switched POV to give Loren's part of this story, you didn't have to repeat whole paragraphs and pages of exact verbiage in what was said, or written in the story from Jeff's POV.

That just caused us story readers useless repetition of the same story plot, same dialogue, we'd already just read through, for pages in length!

It also added 2-3 pages onto the length of this story, which is why, by the last half of the story, it was already way too long!

Still, this was a good story plot and premise! Outside of the above problems I've set out, IMO, this is a good story!

It was well worth the effort reading through all the redundant dialogue, to make it to the final end pages and see how the story ended.

So, I went ahead and gave the story 5 stars anyway.

Hopefully, that might somehow encourage you to keep honing your skills and keep on writing and posting stories here!

Thank you for your effort author! I liked this story plot!

3 stars. On one hand, it's a decent LW, with the main hero getting a seemingly good wife and his own kids in the end.

On the other hand, I'm dociking 2 stars from what could have been a 5 star story for the following:

1. What kind of a mentally defective idiot would marry someone who ALREADY cheated on him and treated like him? This made him far less sympathetic, and the story less enjoyable.

2. The whole being nice to the asshole's wife and letting the ass get a job. He should have explained to her it was HER fault for deciding to stay with the cheating bastard; with him having zero punishment for what he's done. Yeah, sucks that her kids don't have a high earning hubby. Hell, as C-suit executive, he could have offered to pay her to divorce the ass and burn him in divorce, without any negative impact to the kids.

3. The way he handled his hoe of an ex-wife. He clearly hate to give her a TON in a divorce (NY laws). So, the only normal way for him to do this would have been to show her the evidence, start the timer, and tell her to sign VERY VERY punishing divorce settlement (vetted in advance by his lawyer, to be able to pass the court); with a threat that if she doesn't sign, all the videos and pictures with his commentary go to her parents, family, friends, and work and future fiances. Same if she fights the settlement later. Instead, he was a stupid wuss and let her win from her cheating by getting a ton of money in a divorce despite not contributing to household.

A lot of writers/commenters on here seem to think reconciliation is the only form of a happy ending and this is an example of how it could end up without one. Well done

He section where Loren rehash’s the whole story is redundant and doesn’t add any new informational. I would have enjoyed it more and scored it higher without it.

Overall it is well written but the storyline is threadbare.

Jim was lucky his wife loved his children as much as she did, or his ass would have been grass. Whether she loves him or not really doesn't matter. If she does, then he is the luckiest of men to have been given a second chance. There will not be a third.

Loren burned her second chance, because she never remembered what she did did him that night at the dance, and that she was already well into her second chance when she cheated on Jeff with Jim.

The second he found out, she was done.

Mighty white of him to sit with this cheating cunt at aby time at all. After she's returned from Florida why bother coming to the house? No matter what she has to say, it won't change the actions she took there and fir six months prior. 5 years later at the family dinner, his comment to his father was spot on. "What the hell are they doing here?" perfectly summed up a reasonable reaction. Nothing she had to say to him changes a thing in his existence and therefore is useless to pursue or entertain. She has shown what she is. Excise her and move on.

Excellent job. Give us some more.

Very good! Don't stop!

[08.10.22]

Great story!

11/10!!!!!

What a joke…who spends days watching his wife cheat on and lie to him? Totally unbelievable.

1st, Lauren dumps him at that dance, & he takes her back? That much of a wimp or that desparate?

2nd. Despite her claims of being sorry, she cheated & thereby disrespected him, called him names... because she wanted to. And perhaps she just thought of him like that internally. She's just sorry that she got caught. Her saying that the dealings when checking out woke her up is garbage.

3rd. Earlier in the story, she says that she started cheating because she's bored. Did she think of getting a PT job, volunteering a bit or something similar? I suppose that would've been too much.

4th. Wanting to speak to Jim, hoping for a reconciliation. She already had one, some time after the dance. At that time, there shouldn't have been one at all. She showed her morals & ethics right then.

5th. It WAS good that he stopped his actions robbing the guy of a job. Shows him & his family more consideration than he, Jim, was served. But he seems weak, taking directions from all the females. I'm not sure if, after what she did to cause the divorce, I'd agree to talk to Lauren again. Just tell her mother that her actions seemed to say all that's needed. Well, maybe down the road when I healed a bit.

Last. However, the story was much too long, mainly too much into the school days. 6 pages for this story isn't called for. It was well written, & taking that into consideration with the above, I really can't say I like this story, so 3 stars it is. Bob

First time through I believe I scored this story too low because I was looking for a reconciliation. I was more generous this time. I see what you were attempting in providing Loren's side but I think you came up short. It would have been better (IMHO) to have filled in more of Loren's internal dialogue. Also, providing Loren a voice holds out the hope for a recon.

I believe you have the skill to have pulled the recon off. Perhaps it just wasn't there from your muse.

How the #!*(&* did a man stupid enough to marry Loren after she'd shown her lack of character beyond any doubt get into, much less graduate from, Wharton? Anybody stupid enough to marry that girl has fully earned his unhappy marriage.

Well written but the MC has "walk all over me" written across his forehead, or at least you'd think so by the way he acts and follows the females instructions/hints.

Excellent story!!!

Great story

Shame you don't write anymore on literotica

Pretty darn good story. Little sad, but that's to be expected.

There are hundreds of authors here some of them posting hundreds of submissions each, 99% of their efforts are crap. This author wrote two stories and stopped, but those two were a couple of the best ones out there.

Shame we don’t have more.

The problem I have with this story is a 61 t bird looks awful with the top up or down.

I want one of those hats that changes from Yankees to Mets.

just double dumb, gave her two chances to gut hum. Surprised he did not make it two. Once a slut always a slut....

Once a wimp; always a wimp.

Very good story but what gets me with all the stories like this is that he didn't confront her as soon as he had proof that she was cheating. Authors never find a way to be true to reality when these events occur. No husband is going to sit back and wait for more proof of an affair why would you? As soon as you have proof you use it and maybe fight to keep your wife. You wouldn't let her go off on a trip with her lover knowing what she was going to do the pain would just be too much to bear. Just wouldn't happen. But then of course there wouldn't be a story would there?

These type of stories rely on ignoring reality it's like the movie where the women knowing there's a serial killer on the lose and goes into a room where she hears a strange noise coming from but doesn't turn the light on when she goes into the room even though it's night time and dark. No one would do that.

So although it's a good well written story it gets marked down for ignoring reality.

this was and is a great story ,, it was perfect

I dont think everything had to be repeated from Lauren's point of view. The story lost rhythm and the energy was diffused. Also, I dont get how the writer had to have Jeff questioning himself as to whether he should leave the slot or not. So many stories agonizingly question "can I forgive her, why?" Who gives a fuck? Not the reader. Not me. Weakens the story to no good purpose.

I would have left her at the Dance .. Let her explain that to her Mom . I was on the football team in High School and played linebacker .I got into a few fights but I won More then I lost .

After watching the scene on the hotel balcony I knew my marriage was over. .. yet he already knew she was cheating for 6 months?

I think the whole Loren part of the story telling could have been cut down to just reveal new information, not tell the whole story we know over again.

Good story

Ditto on the Loren POV. You write so well that the facts were firmly established the first time around. Good stuff. Bet you've got another story in there. I'd sure like to read it.

LWlurker

It was a nice story. The whole POV switch to Loren was bogus, dude. It added nothing but a rehash. Story would have been much crisper without that. Write another story, please. Randi.

Another author who sabotages a fine story at the very end. That last conversation between Jeff and Loren was total BS. She did indeed betray Jeff on two occasions with forethought and malice. Both were premeditated and conscious acts of treachery. She absolutely indicated to Jim that she was staying with Doofus because of his money.

A lackluster attempt at revisionist history is a terrible way to end a story.

Ok. He ended up good at the end, but there was no reason to give the ex wife any forgiveness. The most I would have done, is to say I am now very happy, and have moved on. The bitch did not deserve any closure! 3 stars

Sorry, this one was just stupid. He had all the evidence that he needed with the first recording.

Jeff winding up with a Victoria's Secret model was just too much wish-fulfillment fantasy. Until then it was a pretty good story.

Read it again and the fact remains that Jeff is weak. He's just a wimp for letting Loren back in after her first betrayal, a wimp for not burning that asswipe into the ground, and for letting his parents basically bully him into having anything to do with Loren.

Great story, great singer. Very enjoyable story with happy ending after gentle BTB. Wish this guy had written a few more stories.

Just once, I'd like to read a story where the wife takes it.

Dude might just be a hopeless romantic, to put it charitably. No other reason he'd take a person who deceitfully manipulated him in publicly humiliating fashion, and then put her on a pedestal. Small wonder she thought she could cheat on him with impunity.

I met mr Milsap many y are ago in Asheville Ncesc. One of his classmates the school for the bilind also became a very successful do and even wrote some beach music hits some of his music was recorded by other stars . This stoy was 99.4% pure entertainment.

He turned out to be a pussy in the end. He might as well sucked her boyfriend off!

Good story. Starsong1977 was right about not needing the Loren section, but all in all enjoyable story.

I don't know why i said this was good, it is 4 pages too long. The whole "Loren" section was a complete waste of time. The husband was present so we already know the events.

..... on the side of Wrath, two things were missing; details on scorched earth on the ex, if he could screw with the bastard, why not the ex ? Second the mother in law, after viewing the dvd, should of Bitch Slapped her daughter and state “Where did I go wrong”?

The Sheep will says “Don’t go to their level or turn the other cheek.”.

The correct response “What the going rate on broken heart and spirit, over the course of time”?

Followed by “When you walk in these shoes, then you may speak”!!!!

Very well done

These were two great stories, i wish you come back!

Great read!. Another cheating wife that can't resist the bad boy losers...talk about self destructive behavior....They always think that they can talk or screw their way out of any problem. Short of having a time machine and going back in time and slapping yourself silly so you don't have the affair in the first place you're not going to get the guy to forgive and forget unless he's into the whole slut wife scene in the first place.

Treated like wimp acted like wimp don't that make him a wimp

Later same thing and even admits to twice

And he finds better and forgiveness?

Sweetness level is putting me in diabetic coma

I too wish he kept writing as he showed promise but this story needed work. The other one was far better

Page one - what is it with these emotional cucks who refuses to say a bad word about the whore? why not let everyone know exactly what kind of bitch she was

Page two - Shoulda said "Loren Im sorry you were a liar and a cheat, but if I dont apologize to you now your friend is going to withhold sex from her husband becuase apparently you cheating on me is less of an issue for her than my not wanting to talk to you"

but what kind of brain dead moron get involved with a known cheat? I dont feel sorry for morons

"I need to get proof of her infidelity" again not sorry for morons - you dont need proof for shit no court cares

I can understand a man not wanting to go to the effort to burn a bitch

I cant understand why the fuck these men work so hard to make sure no one is ever mean to the cheating cunt

To bad you stopped writing. You have talent. I gave you a rare 5

Best wishes

He was a total Dumdass! Fly to the same hotel the cheaters are at, dumb! Not hiring professional private investigators, really Dumb! Not hiring a lawyer to advise you, Dumb! He's mostly a wimp, and not very likeable.

He wasn't weak. He wanted to make sure and he did. Then he left her. It was his only choice. The betrayal ran too deep. I do like a happy ending and he was a big enough man not to add to her pain. Good story! But, what a bitch!!!

When you make comments of your husband to your lover like dufas, it's you and your lover disrespecting him. When you tell your lover the reason for not leaving him is cause of salary and the lovers lack, shows you to be a gold digger. Hell your lover wouldn't like comment, and your lack of sensitivity makes you a bitch.

The patented LW weak/cuck husband cliche is so overused and toxic that the "He lived happily ever after" ending is just rendered ridiculous. Formulaic, cliche-ridden. It's not redeemed by being well written technically.

Blech. Not all divorces have to end with everybody holding hands and singing kumbaya, and she most certainly was talking about the money when she had the doofus chat. Go back and read it.

How many times

Tears good grief man up

Money he spent work missed hired a PI got it done better wouldn't have to watch and cry

but I would like to see more revenge on the cheating wife. I also don't get the reason why she cheated. But still a good read whether or not I agree with the ending.

A great story until the end. Tell his mother if she ever wants to see grandchild again she must kick the betrayer out NOW!

Tough about the first shits wife and children! Life's a bitch! Don't stop action till the bastard tops himself! Why waste perfectly good revenge.

This guy is just too much of a saint. It takes a special kind of moron to marry someone who treated him that way, even if it was high school. Some assholery, people don't grow out of.

Well put together, lots of great scenes and details that added to the story. Thank you.

i, wish we had more stories like this. most writers just love to tell how great

some cheating married is getting screwed. they never think to tell the other

side of the story, about, the faithful husband or wife (most always the husband) we readers are just supposed to focus on how some cheating bitch is getting drilled by a 15" cock that is 10" in girth, like that is the only important thing. there are many ways

to tell an exciting sex story that doesn't destroy families and kids. i, get as much out of a story like this, of a liar, and cheat getting hers, as i do in the straight sex stories.

Great going !!!

However lack in 'spark & spice'

Narration are dragged too long with out any action..

I always get amazed how writers here have a good story messed up with eagerness to make a quick and complete resolution in the end. Sometimes it is better to leave some things uncertain than to have unrealistic payback resolutions like that. Also it speaks of ignorance when using Slavic last name for a Romanian. Victoria Secret model no less ... why not a chess champion as well?

You've crafted such a story that (I think) invites the reader to consider the life-defining dynamics of how a fundamental character flaw wreaks a lifetime of havoc. And how that fundamental flaw, in turn, enables an interlocking supporting cast of others. Of course, Pride is the root of all such, but if not dealt with aggressively it enables its derivatives: a sense of entitlement, a distorted capacity to correctly perceive reality, and on and one an on. Everyone is susceptible. How do we detect its subtle process of self-delusion? How do we detect its workings in others (since we invent all kinds of behaviors to mask it from everyone else too). How does one deal with the trap: "He or she may have X tendency/behavior/attitude, etc. that isn't good, but if I love them enough they'll change -- for me!" Why don't we learn that we can deal with nutty behavior traits in The Other; maybe even induce a real change. But character flaws are truly unworkable and thus intolerable.

Anyway: good story, good plot line and character unfolding and development. Nice title too! Thanks much for a thought-provoking read.

A very good story, again with an appropriate ending. Loren destroyed her marriage entirely on her own. Jeff did nothing wrong, other than taking her back the first time. Her punishment was light by BTB standards. Jim also got off lightly, able to keep his marriage and suffering a bit of employment difficulty. Loren's mother suffered more than anyone other than Jeff. Jeff finally learned the lesson he needed to have a happy life. Good, deep story, one of the best. So sorry this author only did two stories. If you're out there adevilru, please come back. We need you.

Sorry, but she REALLY wasn't. She was already a self-professed 'shit' since they were in school and she humiliated him at the dance; the years only served to build upon her shittiness until she was screwing Jim. She even married Billy again afterwards. What does that tell you? Good story (except she never DID explain why she dumped him the first time round...) but I disagree with Jeff's evaluation. She may have been beautiful on the outside, but her insides were rotten

Yes, many of the critiques about length, repetition and only cursory character development are fair, but the quality of the writing and the strong narrative made adevilru a writer I wanted to follow. This is a case of 2 and flew though, and we are the worse for it.

Thanks for those 2 stories at least, Adev.

and when those words form patterns in ones mind, open sesame, TK U MLJ LV NV

Jeff falls in love with Loren from the minute he sees her. What he did was fall in love with her physical beauty. I mean it happens, especially in a 16 year old, but the flaw is he fell in love in a very shallow fashion. So he was shallow in the sense that he was obviously a very intelligent person, but his approach to women was superficial. Believe me, been there and done that, and as they say men fall in love with their eyes. So there are a lot of women who have great character and are attractive enough, but the second woman he falls in love with, Nina, is a Victoria's secret model.

So Loren is shallow because she wants a 6'2" stud with a big cock. She is shallow that she wants the linebacker in high school over Jeff who is 5'8", and although I don't think his description was laid out I take it average or slightly better than average looking. But Jeff is not shallow that he wants to be with a beautiful woman like Loren and then when he has more money upgrades to a Victoria's Secret model. Obviously, for the author the worth of a woman first and foremost is physical beauty, but when a woman is attracted to a man based on his physical attributes, as Loren does, then there is something wrong with her. The author does redeem Loren quite a bit, but there were some commenters on here that were so hard on her, but wouldn't think twice that Jeff's main characteristic in choosing a mate was her physical attribute as well.

Thanks.

Really nice story

Isn't it marvelous how the two lovers always mention how long they have been shagging and what they do in overheard phone calls and how the jilted husband always ends up with a nicer and prettier wife.

Loren was a conniving slut who really thought her husband was a doofus. She only changed her opinions when she got caught. Loren was always a self centered bitch starting in high school. Loren didn't deserve to be forgiven. Also Jim should have been hounded until he died of a drug overdose!

You describd the hotel as being U-shaped with his room in the middle of the U looking out on the ocean. Between the "arms" of the U, the pool went the entire length of the two arms pf tje hotel. So this guy had a room that completely filled the middle of the U, thereby closing off the hotel corridor?

If his room faced both directions, then perhaps he could see the pool. If not, then all his surreptitious viewing could not occur.

I was pulled into this story right away. Very good writing and story skills. Made me want to read more adevilru. Sad -- only one more.

I read most of comments. Most flaws (none really serious) were pointed out. I add: too much intuition, ie. recognition by gut. Looking into the eyes and seeing, not just one, but a.range of emtions/tells. But the TSA agent seeing their whole present situation -- with him at a distance, even -- was really over the top. While concentrating on her job? I agree such paranormal insights make interesting scenarios, but at the price of drastically reduced realism.

Greatly disagree with comments blasting Jeff. He was the right balance between flaming revenge (which I hate) and crying do-nothing pansy.

Also, the snapshot at the end, giving us a glimpse at Loren's (and her mom's) aftermath was clever.

Thanx for fascinating read.

So, on to read the other story.

Paul in Oklahoma

5* for sure.

She really was a dumb deeply flawed bitch. You were too nice to her in the end!

This is officially my favorite story on literotica! Not only did you not belittle the hero

you gave him just vindication and a happily ever after thank you!!!! So many of the stories on here are about rubbing salt in the wounds of the hero. I love Ronnie Milsap too

A great story well written. Thank you!

You've made the two principals such sympathetic characters that there's little way you can make readers believe either will be really happy. In fact the pathos in the offered ending is sliceable with a knife.

The only saving ending would be a long, drawn-out reconciliation and a grandchild for grandma Cheryl. At least she would have been one happy person in the whole mess.

Perhaps another author will provide an alternate ending. Sigh.

I would give it, perhaps, another star than I did 14 months ago since I appreciate the writing.

Why no divorce settlement info,why just stop Jim getting a job,Lauren was equally to blame.After Jane rang why not get Jim a job at his firm,to make up the hurt he had caused Jane with the vendetta and prove he was a better man,also to rub Lauren's face in what a good man she threw away.

for being dumb enough to marry her. You single lads, a woman does what she did back in school to either you or anyone else, run.

If jim's wife is stupid enough to stay with him she has price to pay. Get divorced and marry decent guy

Or castrate jim

The continued relationship made no sense. As to the assholes wife calling to beg forgiveness for her husband, the cheated husband Jeff should have told her, you divorce the piece of dog shit, and I will make sure he has a job adequate to pay your alimony. He totally fucked up my marriage, from now on I will totally fuck up his life. If he really loved you and your children he would divorce you to spare you from suffering his punishment. Otherwise you want to keep him, then you keep the baggage the asshole brings with him.

The ending with the super model replacement wife is just too contrived and idealistic. But at least he dumped the bitch. She was bored?!? How exciting is her life now?

I hope you will be writing more stories in the future. Outstanding from first word to last. Oh, and I love Ronnie Milsap.

Your stories are good it's a shame there are only two. Hope to read more in the future.

How was Mr Beckman supporting a wife and two children on $38K?

In that part of the country.

Actually, I loved your story. Thanks

While not perfect , you got the readers into the characters and story line. Well done.

One thing that made no sense, was why he didn't ask for an explanation when they met at that party and he just forgave her, that is not good enough. She had betrayed him once, any sane person would be wary about entering into a relationship with her.

200k salary does not make you rich. Especially not living in a big city. Throw out 40% of it for taxes, and then then another 25% for the mortgage. Supporting two families on what is left would be a hard choice to make.

no sense:

Jim was punished - lost his job, and lost many chances for a new one. I think this one was just right. :)

Obviously Jim was fired for affair with colleague. Even used company funds to pay for nine day lsexfest. He is one who convinced his boss to have Loren go with him

Those facts would be reason for his dismissal and would be on his permanence work record. Even without Jeff's actions his professional career would be over

Why Loren is made to suffer and not Jim is beyond me, especially since he ws the seducer

Why you had Jane Beckman forgive her husband...children or not.

He was obviously a serial cheater. If not for his insistence the affair would not have ended the marriage as the week in Miami would not have happened. In fact he insisted on that week when Loren called trying to end the affair

Jeff was rich-he should have told Jane if she divorced her slimeball husband he would provide for her and her children.

Like I stated, Jim is one who seduced Loren, I am sure it was not his firt conquest.

Your treatment of him ruined good story

I can understand why he was kind to Loren there at the end; He won. He has Nina, the baby, all those material possessions, and a happy life - he can afford to be magnanimous. Loren and her mother have little or nothing. Loren especially has only memories of self-annihilating her one great marriage, a disastrous affair, and another marriage that was apparently horrible from almost the very beginning. Jeff is looking at a bright future, Loren despairs of what's ahead in her life.

There's nothing to be gained by Jeff carrying a grudge or hate - he would only be harming himself. Loren is punishing herself, every day, and will be for years to come.

What I don't understand is why he ever gave her a second chance after that "harvest dance" thing. It wasn't just that she spent the whole dance with another guy because I imagine a lot of young girls could fall for the QB and do something similar. The unforgivable part was that she was a good friend and was very aware of how badly it hurt him, but obviously didn't care enough to even try and make amends. That's cold, so very deliberate. It speaks to her character, or the lack of, and the type of person she was becoming. I guess now he knows that sometimes, some people don't deserve that second chance because they cannot, or will not, change.

Great story - hopefully you will one day resume writing. Thanks! 5 stars.

Let's face it she was a serial cheater. She did nothing but shit on Jeff since she met him. She did not DESERVE forgiveness. You lost me when Jeff told her she was beautiful inside and out. She was toxic. I would have gladly spoken to her mother. I would NOT have had anything nice to say to her...so, why speak to her? So she can feel better about herself? No thanks

She never told him what her motive was for her original deception. What? That would be the first and only thing I would HAVE to know before I ever touched her again, as a minimum.

Can't anybody write a decent way to reconcile. There should be SOME punishmant to fit the crime.

Bechman got all the punishmen and still had a wife and kids.

Well, that's where I am today.

What the second time showed was that he was right the first time about the first time.

He could have let go of the anger, but having anything to do with her again was a mistake.

Words are often false.

Actions show character.

re:

A good story, well written...just a small issue to me: Why in hell would he take in account the solicitation of the bastard's wife for him to let her husbad get a job? When she had chosen to stay married to him, she should be prepared to the consequences for what he did, would reach her and her children...If she had divorced the cheater she would never worried about that.

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If she divorced him?

Child support and spousal support are based on his income.

The more he makes the more he pays.

The less he makes the less he pays.

If all he gets is food stamps, then all she gets is a percentage of the food stamps.

Jeff shouldn't have talked to Loren at the end except maybe to ask her if she was still a POS cheating slut.

A good story, well written...just a small issue to me: Why in hell would he take in account the solicitation of the bastard's wife for him to let her husbad get a job? When she had chosen to stay married to him, she should be prepared to the consequences for what he did, would reach her and her children...If she had divorced the cheater she would never worried about that...I know he had a soft heart...that was one of the reasons his wife did what she did...However a good story...3*

Why would you STILL marry someone after they show you their true colors? What she pulled at the dance with billy would've been a wrap. I wouldn't start dating let alone marry this person. She immediately dumped him at the dance for another guy with no hesitation, so why was the husband shock to learn she found her another billy? It's weird... She casually threw you away the first time for a guy, breakup and a few years later you date/marry her and wonder why? The why is because she's a slut... It just baffles me. In high school I dated this guy who kept sleeping with my friends.. When I caught him--it was a wrap... No excuses no forgiveness.. I seen him a few years ago, he was trying to do his best to convince me to cheat on my husband with him...lol... I laughed in his face.. I laughed so hard I peed on myself.. The nerve of this loser thinking I'd give my soulmate up for his dirty dick..he actually caught an attitude.. Zero fucks were given...I don't understand, how hard is it to stay faithful to your marriage?.. If you can't stay faithful don't get married.. Well I'm glad he dumped the wife, she just wasn't wife material...

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Glad it turned out so well for him.

My experiences taught me way too late when it comes to matters of the heart very seldom if ever should someone who has lied to you get a second chance.

Simple enough reason. You forgive her once she believes a precedent has been set and she is correct. So when she does it again she does it fully expecting she will be forgiven.

Next thing you know you are married to a serial cheater

Facebook profile of details such a wife.

College instructor in Helena Montana until details on that profile came to light

TRUE STORY REAL LIFE FACTUAL FOR THE WORLD TO KNOW

She married her 3rd husband because she was living on welfare food stamps govt housing and couldn't afford to buy new things or have them fixed. Set her sights on a handyman and seduced him. At time of that seductionshe was having affair with married man. From what she told one of her students she wasscrewing, comments made by her indicate she was giving private tutorials to more than one of her married male students, only requirement being he had to have muscular arms. She threatened to flunk one student to get him to screw her. When that didn't work she told him she would FALSELY ACCUSE him of sexually assaulting her if he didn't do what she wanted.

From my correspondence with Facebook profile I received pages of info detailing the threats, the sex, her sexual history not to mention some sex photos of the 50ish grandmother and her cupping her bared breats, a penetration photo clearly showing her purple rose tattoo to the right of her bush. She also has black widow one on her left shoulderblade.

The pursuit began spring semester of 2001, affair lasted until july 2003. Last communication between the now former instructor and that student was March 2010. She was still cheating only was now having multiple affairs at same time. Husband had not left her and based on her remarks she had cheated on him beginning in 1993 when they first got married and had always had a lover.

Fact is she BOASTED ABOUT THAT AND LAUGHED AT HER HUSBAND WHEN RELATING HOW HE HAD BROKE DOWN CRYING AND BEGGED HER TO STOP

sad moron should have learned his lesson the first time. she got away clean. didn't like this.

great story well done ( written in English. English )

I could have given more stars for this story! More stories adevilru12 pls!

Now that's the way to write a story! Great plot, tension and resolve and justice. Five big stars! *****

Good plot and well written.

The sexual scenes were very cleverly thought out, making them less pornographic and more real, while still making it obvious that adultery was taking place.

Five out of five for sure.

and the other side of that coin hurts. TK U MLJ LV NV

to marry her! not much simpaty for him.

Only nice character was Loren's mother. 2*

The cheating whore asks, "How can I make it up to you?" when the obvious answer to that question is, "DROP DEAD CUNT!"

How stupid can cheaters be? I wonder...

First ... PLEASE start submitting again!

Next ... the transition from (Future) Hubby's apology at the party to them being married (for several years) has two problems ... first, it begged for some rationale. FH wiping years of feeling cruelly betrayed TOTALLY out of his consiousness is implausible. LOTS of 'authorship' was needed to get him (plausibly) past the sticky points! Second (and interwoven)... It is likely Hubby would have been more wary of Sweetie's potential to back-slide! I think a man in that position would be less devastated than he was depicted!

Still an excellent read.

can't win for losing. His friends are shit, they ambush him with the hateful bitch, his parents are shit, they ambush him with the ex 5 years after the divorce. New wife is a narcissist and the only one in the story worth a shit is the ex-mother-in-law. I don't understand why in all of these stories the parents of the poor hubby treat him like shit, mother takes the cheater's side against her own son and the son just loves them to death. You are required to honor you parents, but that can be done from afar.

Only gave it a four. First off , yes what she did in HS does take precedence in this. She threw him over for no reason other than wanting a jock. Now while people can and do change since HS, she didn't show it. Her answer was what you're still on that from six years ago? Obviously she didn't see anything wrong with what she did. Then he dates her and married her? With no proof that she changed? I can understand that the heart wants what the heart wants. However, he should have had some kind of pre-nup to protect himself.

(Paraphrasing)

"Jeff, please go forgive Loren so I can get fucked by Becca tonight."

Response #1 (to Jack):

"Well, since it's your fault I'm here tonight, I guess you *should* be punished; sorry, no can do"

(Or)

Response #2 (to Loren):

"Loren, I'm sorry I was rude to you just because you were a deceitful bitch who willingly used, lied to, and hurt someone who befriended you in high school. I should have realized you couldn't help being the bad person you were - after all, you wanted to be the cliche of a shallow cheerleader who dated athletes. Accept my apology...?"

Ok, it makes for a MUCH shorter story...

I'm continually weirded out by women who comment about guys they cheat with who are better lovers - and yet it never occurred to them to help their husband LEARN to be better...? I mean sure you can't learn bigger equipment, but you can learn technique and you can improve stamina. What you maybe can't do so easily is UNLEARN "cheating slut".

I want some fucking payback, what is this let's-be-civil-with-the-ex shit?

so you destroy the guy but not the wife. You didn't marry him, you married her. Then you let his wife talk you into not destroying them but you don't destroy the wife, you walk away from her while hiring a PI to follow and destroy his life while Loren just strolls along. I'll destroy him, he cuckolded me and she just was a innocent bystander that I just happen to married to.

She dumped him at the dance

then he married her?

So she could do it all over again?

and then she married the doofus she cheated with in high school?

One thing I learned from these stories is never, ever take back a girl who cheats and plays games in high school or college because she will cheat and play games in her marriage. She had it right, there is something wrong or missing in her.

She must really love her husband, she carries on a 6 month affair and when her husband acts strange, what does she do, she goes on a 7 day vacation with her lover. That shows true love.(satire) She calls him names with her lover-a doofus- but she said she only did it once, and you can believe her why? Yeah, this woman really loves this guy, she just keeps showing it and showing it. Thanks for the story.

I do not agree with the comments about what a good story this was. I did not like it, even though it was well written, few spelling errors, few punctuation errors. I just do not like cheaters. but the bitch did pay in the end.

But I do fully agree with what Anon said on 1-19-2015. Having been in Anonymous's place, I agree with him.

Good story, good ending nothing of forgiving cheat wife or the pathetic story of loving her fuck another man

Great story! Very well written with a excellent conclusion!

Thank you and please keep writing!

I can't find it within me to feel any sympathy for Loren.

She did what she did without any consideration for Jeff at all.

So please excuse me if I don't buy her crocodile tears confession at the end of the story.

Some men are forgiving. Sadly, I am no longer one of them.

This was an excellent, well crafted story.

thanks for your work I really enjoyed this story

A rebuttal to all the illiterate critics who hide behind the anonymous tag. Sign in to the web site then you can say anything about the author and their work. This story is well written with an excellent pace that ties everything up in a nice ending. Some of the characters could use more development. Such as his cheating wife, why did she suddenly become an exhibitionist? Just a though. Overall an excellent tale.

10 damn fucking pages?If Jeff would be real...he'd kick your ass royally!!This thing needs a follow up...atleast smething involving little jeff jr.PLZ DO SMETHIN BOUT IT!!!

5 years on ,

ex is a wreck

the other guy is broke & has to get his own wife to beg for him.

good ole jeff , is rich , got a supermodel wife , lovely baby son .

let it go , move on , grow up , be an adult ... don't poison yourself with continued hatred ...

only a real cuck/wimp/pussy ....

gets stuck in a negative Hate loop...

... CUCK/WIMP SHIT ENDING!!!

He would have been totally committed and in love with her even at seventeen.

She was still plenty old enough to rip his heart out and humiliate him,in fact in the teens humiliation is even worse than it is later in life.

He forgave her but it's not something you forget,rather it's something that would come back as if it were yesterday if it happened again.

If you had condensed the last two chapters, you would have had a sure fire 5+ rating from me. I was so enthralled with your writing until it went to long and got disorganized some. A solid 5 for chapters 1 through 4. then a disappointing 2 for the last.

Some people learn from bad things they have done, for others it is just bad character. I would take a wait and see attitude, if the person continues then you remove them from your life.

Sheesh, get a life!

I am far from a RAAC, if anything I tend towards BTB, but if you really believe that holding a 17-year-old girl's actions from 5-6 years ago makes sense, then you are a sad, sad individual.

While my gut feeling was that it was Grace, particularly after she obviously gave Janice her contact info for Tom, it seemed odd that neither Lisa nor Rose commented on who his date was.

that's the way life goes, I was surprised at how long it took it wife to figure something was amiss

Congrats, adevilru12 for your clever writing of the classical repetitious LW story.

That your efforts to trick the annoyingmousies and other BTB lynchmob trolls for the spelunkers they are.

A few of the less stupid ones wrote comments that hint at their dim realization that they are making a mockery of their own sexual confusion.

Just gender reverse the character's conversations and it becomes obvious that these trolls are exposing their own lack of personality and perspicuity.

to be cheated on in the marriage. Any loser that takes back a slut that uses him and dumps and humiliates him deserves everything he gets. She was always a cheating cunt, and deserved to die from Aids. He was a loser. Any guy that gets fixated on a woman that he KNOWS is a decietful slut and still marries her, deserves the inevitable. No likeable characters in this one.

Thanks and please write more

LW stories seem to have problems with authors explaining male emotional pain. It's either sobbing, with copious flowing tears, or blinding anger. Actually this hubby was fairly well controlled by the author, but still the expressions seemed to go on and on.

An excellent sad tale which I think conveyed the emotional pain felt by the wife's cheating period.

The switch from male to female POV work very well.

I would say to any recovering from a break up / divorce. The best revenge is to have a good life and show them what they have missed out on, not what a loser they believe you may be.

I love the song, by the way. I would have given you a five but you were still a pussy with your ex.....fuck her worse than Beckman.The slut totally earned it.

Somebody please help me out. What is it with these fucking cheating cunts? They're only sorry when they are caught and their words are "Give me a chance to make it up to you." How can she possibly do that? Fucking cunt. I'm glad our hero found happiness and success with a good woman and a great job. I'm also glad that the cheating cunt wife realized that she made the worst mistake of her life.

If these women would just stop thinking with their pussies they might live a good life. Fucking cunt. All cheaters should suffer.

Liked it a lot; the editor didn't catch a couple of times where Jim was mentioned when I think you meant Jeff. I agree with the comment about re-hashing the events from the woman's POV. Please keep writing; you come up with good plots.

it was a good tale. the only thing I did not care for was the ex repeating

almost everything you already told. it was like reading it twice and did

nothing but make the tale longer but not. better.

Just like your previous story. Keep up the good work.

This story may not be perfect (in my eyes), but it comes close. You wrote a good tale about a marriage falling apart and concentrate on the most emotional parts. Yes there are many other stories out there that glory in the pain of the aftermath - I'm sure you've read plenty BTB stories yourself - and they're perfect if you're in the right mood.

I value this story a lot more for purposefully not going there however. By that I mean both the BTB sentiment but also the drawn out tale of the divorce in progress. Instead you stopped at the most appropriate point when it was clear that the marriage had no chance and put an epilogue at the end to resolve what needed resolving.

Thanks for this great story! I'm so surprised that you didn't get a hot-rating of 4.50+ for this story.

... why re-date (and then marry!?) a cold-hearted bitch who knew she was humiliating and inflicting pain upon her shocked (now ex) BF in one the worst ways possible. This is a betrayal which cannot be forgotten by any man (aside from MM and his cuck following) and if she was truly remorseful desperate to make amends, it would take major promises and sacrifices on behalf of the bitch to make assurances such behaviour would never ever be repeated. Otherwise, a willing sap is worth being called a "doofus!"

The way Jeff described his MIL suggested a revenge fuck was in order but it was not so. It seems a cushy job and a future promotion was not good enough to dissuade Jeff from hiring a PI who would almost definitely do a more meticulous job than his questionable 'rent-a-spy' approach. I mean he was so unprepared, he had to got to a spy store, whilst on stakeout duties, just so he could get audio. This little nugget bothered me.

I'm pretty certain his divorce would not have been that simple. I'd even go as far as assuming Loren could have raped Jeff when push came to shove because his prospective future was the gravy train which kept her from abandoning him.

When a women commits to an adulterous-laden vacation, there is no way she will have any regrets about what she's temporarily leaving behind. She went on the trip knowing she was having extra-marital sex and it is reasonable to believe she would enjoy it, despite the domestic interruptions. The little episodes of regret interspersed from Loren's POV were uncharacteristic and therefore implausible.

2*

with a five, but...

HDK is right there were unnecessary errors even spell-check would have picked up. I thought the portion where Loren did a rehash also was irrelevant. And also, though it's boilerplate, a good story is a good story. How many ways can you slice infidelity?

I disagreed with HDK about the dating thing. In fact I'm in the middle of something where the courtship is singularly important.

Please continue to write, but don't...End a story with gun play, a blimp, a neon sign, a blow up doll, or anything preposterous. We've got Stang et.al. for that. Please also, no Mustangs unless they're real horses. Alas consider a story where there's some reconciliation. I would have loved to have been a fly on the wall for some Jeff-Loren reconciliation, certainly with a counselor. I know there are many who only want Loren to burn, but hadn't she seen the light? I think it would have been great to hear her remorse. To be sure there'd only been the singular infidelity with Jim. The dance thing was high school shit and didn't matter. The Jim thing was certainly awful, but Jeff was strong; he might have been able to...well

what a great story. enjoyed it very much. loved the ending, why do people love hurting each other is beyond me.

While she sort of got what she deserved in the end, for me it could never have gotten that far.

I do like Jeff, except for one thing; when it comes to women he is obviously mentally deficient. He obviously has an image in his head of what a woman should be, and then measures everything by that.

But there is one truth that cannot be altered. If YOU are involved in some deception against another and it is brought to light, everyone is the same: you DO JUST WHAT YOU ARE CAPABLE OF DOING!

So.. if you care about how others feel, then your actions will include them. If you are just there for your own selfish reason, you do just whatever you want.

The slut did that at the very start. She actually did him a favor by showing that she was a selfish whore who would even betray someone who was at least meant to be a friend, back at the dance. Anybody with their eyes open would have cut the whore loose then and there forever, and laughed at her if he ever saw her again. Instead, he married her. So... hahahah! He got what he eventually deserved.

The reality of it is that Nina has probably been trained by the old bank boss on the cuck's history, and is helping to hide it better, so he can have a top-notch bank exec, keep him happy, and have the cuck's young sexy wife drop her top for him too and send her home so she can feed him sloppy seconds.

And I don't know how the slut's mom can think that it SHOULD have been her grandson... unless she thought her daughter was gonna be bred by the bank boss too.

I enjoyed this tale.

* * * * B T B BRIGADES

Thank you for a very enjoyable read.

but still liked it.

I didn't like the repeat.....and Jim her boss and lover made $38K per year - too low...and a 10 car garage - too high. Less excesses would make it more believable.

However it was a very good story...I liked it better than the Gift which was also very good. It would be nice if you wrote a little more often than once a year!

keep posting.

You improved, made it up a notch with this story.

I read and understood enough comments to realize that others, they see it too.

Great story & writing. You even received many many comments from anon readers who may have read it but again beware of the shit from anonymous assholes...

Thanks for sharing on Lit.

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is portrayed to be a wimpy crier.

ruined otherwise very good tale .

3***

I got over the repeated dialogue (her story) by just scanning past to the new storyline, but then got to the epilogue - which really looked rushed. Yes, we expect the hero to do well, but a 10 car garage (3-4 would have sufficed) and a Victoria's Secret model (a 'normal' hot Romanian orphan would have been a stretch enough)?!

Still, overall a good, formula following story.

Telling the audience how much and how many times you cry over a girl is just not a very good way to start a story.

Thanks for sharing.

Would have been five stars but the cut and paste dialogue was a major annoyance. When Loren rehashed the events it was word for word what was stated earlier. You must of clearly cut and paste. Bad move. No need to do that when writing. I just read it, don't need to Reread it. Summarize, add new details, something to further the plot, but never repeat verbatim. Imagine if you went to a movie and they replayed the exact same scene. Your writing is excellent. The plot was engaging and your resolution impeccable. Four stars, but I look forward to reading more of your work.

Excellent second story. Your writing pulls your reader emotionally into your tales making you one of my favorite story tellers. I thought he was nuts for marrying her in the first place but it made a hell of a good cheating wife story.

You pulled me in and I couldn't let go! lol

I dislike country songs. So I start reading with an attitude . I know this 2nd story

is going to be a big dropoff from your 1st. Well, this man is glad he was mistaken.

By the middle of page1 ,attitude forgotten and interest captured !!

I enjoyed it very much ! You improved the technical writing aspects( watch out grammar Nazis). All the actors were well fleshed out. No dumbing down nor

one note characters..And the plot moved briskly, wow. Another 4* effort.

Well, this time I'm not the first to comment.I am glad to say I am looking forward

to the next story as

AMerryMan

As Stated earlier, wife's POV at closing should have been expanded and greater detail given to her 2nd marriage with 'Billy Barber' (Extend the Pain of the BTB novella)

BTW: Currency Trading is known as Arbitrage and is practiced by ALL MAJOR Financial institutions, not just Banks…

I hope to see you continue writing. Loren was a self centered person who. Only thought of her own. Pleasure. Jeff was a fool, burnt once he never should have gone back with Loren to be burnt again. The salary Jim Beckmann made was to low , you cannot live in Long Island with less than 125k. 38 k you are in poverty , you left a 1 out before the 38 k.

I agree,the recap of loren's side did little for the story.I think it could be great to try and see why loren was such a bitch to him,why she could do that to him.Jim is a liser,big cock or not,and there is little reason for loren to even want to be with.him (btw,38k a year on long Island is chicken feed,in reality,would be 65k,plus the getaway makes no sense.I agree that the end is over the top,the whole supermodel/head of company is out there,Having him married and doing well is fine,but that is different than the ending. Loren's tory might have made a better epilog,to see why she could be so cruel when it seems like you believe she loved jeff..everything in the story seemed to say she was a shallow,gold digging bitch using him,so why?And why with someone who is a nothing? You have potential,you just need to get to why people do what they did,your writing isn't bad.

As so many others have said, the Wife's POV added nothing to the story and just dragged it out. Hubby having anything to do with Loren never mind how quickly they patched things up and then getting married, after the callous shit she pulled on him at the dance was pretty far fetched. In both your stories so far, while very well written, the male leads have had zero fucking self respect.

His parent's having Loren and her mother at the barbecue was just bullshit tho. After the shit Loren pulled on him at the dance and then cheating on him during their marriage, the parent's must be utter piece's of shit to have allowed the tramp back into his and their lives. It just wouldn't happen with any sort of normal family.

Sounds like he got it right the second time. Reading the comments, HDK is probably correct in his assessment. Author captured angst of being dumped and then being cheated upon very well. Good story.

I thought this was a good story, well written, you are improving as a writer. Thank you.

This story is a fucking jike right? oh my god... I am laughing so hard at this turd of a story i got go pee.....

I would have like to have read what her thinking was back at the high school dance, that whole thing from her perspective. You did pretty much everything else.

He was an idiot for ever getting back with her after she did that. That was calculated to be hurtful, not just a breakup.

The thing that gets me is, why destroy the man? His wife was the one that cheated, why keep taking it out on him, when she is the one you married. He divorced her and that was that, the man. He hires a PI to follow him around, and fuck up his career and lively hood. Yet you do nothing to "her". She cheated and that was it.

Gave it a 4.

Only one thing missing. You mention the 10 car garage and the Victoria Secret model wife, but you forgot to mention Jeff was a Navy Seal with a 10 inch black cock. Or maybe it was obvious to everyone but me.

Smokey Mountain Rain to the A-HOLE who hates Ronnie M. How do you like 38 Special. The story was good but, too long.

The story is dragged on for too long. Repeating the cheating weekend from the wifes view does not make the story any better.

Great story, but Ronnie Milsap stands among the worst crap ever.

Repeating everything was pointless. And the ending with the Victoria's Secret model wife and 10 car garage is ridiculous.