All Comments on 'The Cursed House of Crow'
by TheTalkMan
- 31 Comments
This is an amazing story. I love the genre you write in and find this story exceptionally good. Once I started I couldn't stop. Please bring on the next chapter soon!
I begin to understand how the Church got Ms. Crow in the first place--her stupidity. She comes back after 4 centuries, and one of the first things she does is tell the Church she's coming for them!?!?!? Hello! Prepare first, then attack without warning! Silly witch! That said, to the author, don't change it, I'm making an observation only, not a criticism. After all, if it weren't for villains announcing their plans, where would James Bond, Spiderman, Thor, etc etc be?
I truly appreciate your work TheTalkMan. Especially when you connect your various stories to each other. Keep up the good work! Looking forward for chapter two! 5/5
Really great story, i liked it a lot.
Just a little criticism:
I found the use of "older woman" a bit excessive,
since Madeline supposedly has a hotter body than
99.999999999% of all women on earth.
"Older woman" on its own seems a bit unsexy.
I would have liked to see more expressions like "mature beauty", "sexy/hot witch" or at least "beautiful/sexy older woman".
And now i'm off to investigate old abandoned houses and witch legends in the area. Wish me luck. :)
"My wife is not a witch!" Samuel Crow cried as the jailors drug hum away. Reverend Phillips followed him at a hurried pace.
From the above opening line I struggled to get into the story with spelling and grammatical errors so rife in the text. Judging by the other comments clearly other readers are more forgiving. Me, I'll stick to the work of authors who proof their work before posting it.
great work. I don't even know what else to say, that haven't been said before. Hot, sexy and as always pleasure to read. Especially the ending, telling the fates of the characters.. plus connecting it with another of your works and showing what happened to the couple in it. Can't wait to read more.
Still waiting for those twins.
Excellent story with great authentic quality. And not to mention arousingly HOT!!!
Can't wait for more!
brilliant want more would of liked to hear of moms seduction
keep writing
Nice! I have a request for a story.
I'd like to see one where a sister and mother 'reclaim' their son/brother, plus they have a fetish for being pissed on by each other or the male as an added twist. I've never seen you do a tag-team fic throughout except for 'invasion'. This just addresses my fetishes.
P.S: When's your new fic due?
The story was pretty erotic and written quite beautifully.....but im afraid i dont think i have the heart for it. When i read the story, i felt more like crying rather than enjoying the story....but this is the type of stories you prefer writing after all. Great effort and interesting characters. I know asking this is not exactly right of me but i was wondering if there can be a sequel where the witch is defeated and everyone returned to normal? They all feel guilty and try to free Sally? sorry...im a romantic at heart.
I have enjoyed all the stories of yours I have written. Keep up the good work.
If you are thinking of another chapter... Think about let a wizard come to sally's aid and freeing her. The wizard could come directly from the vatican to assist sally and the church to remove maddy crow. (Plz note: this is just a suggestion for a fan). I do wish some of your stories had happier ends, but I do enjoy your work.
Okay, first lesson: *never* write characters that are "perfect". Never. How am I supposed to sympathize or feel sorry for any character that has no flaws? How is a character supposed to evolve when they are, by definition, unable to improve? If you wanted me to feel scared or sad by that ending, it fell completely flat, because your characters are nothing. I couldn't care less what happened to her or any of these other brats, because none of them are likable and barely have any identities.
You have a good grasp on how to write sex scenes, sure, but pick your poison. Either be a pure porn story with a bare-bones plot or attempt to actually suck us in with compelling characters that we want to see get together. This just floats in a dead zone between the two.
Loved it once it got going. I want a sequel! I pictured Madeline as Amy Anderssen.
The ending really broke my heart, (which is saying something seeing as it's pornographic literature), I think the church should rescue Sally. Because if they don't, she's going to be trapped there forever and forgotten despite the fact the church was told by Madeline that she was trapped there.
You know if you leave the ending open for a sequel people will request a sequel, right? Seriously though what happens next??!! I NEEED to know!! This was really good and could be sold if you wanted!
Good read overall, but applying the proper use of pronoun cases would help your writing immensely!
You should make one where Timmy goes to comfort Sally's mom and corrupt her too!
Don't leave Sally trapped like that! Let her learn that she has powerful witch talents, that she develops with the help of the witches library. Then spring her free, perhaps with the help of a witch hunter? Then let her get her revenge!
Re-read this story for the spooky season, this was one of the first ones of yours I read and though your writing has improved much since then this will always be one of my all time favorite concepts/characters. If not Crow herself I cant wait for the current you to tackle another witch or supernatural seductress again.
I felt like I was right there in the house, watching everything unfold. You have created a very powerful, addictive narrative. I was disappointed when it ended only because you had me so hooked. I can't wait to read the next instalment. Please write a second instalment!