All Comments on 'The Fox and the Wizard Pt. 04'
by EveBlackwater
- 14 Comments
While I know this is noncon, this chapter was hard to a swallow. Xanth has no redeeming qualities. He's a straight up a-hole. He doesn't let her have a second of self respect. I've never understood the need to strip away someone's personality so there's only a mindless husk. Who wants to live forever with a husk? People care for pets. He has no care for her. You can take the pain so its OK to hurt you? Alayna's despair is warranted.
I knew the 3 prisoners were her guys. I hope you don't give her hope just to make her more miserable. I enjoy your writing so I'm going to stick around in hopes of seeing Xanth get his comeuppance.
Yea, Im with anon. The guy is a scumbag with no redeeming features. There's no relationship and the story, while very well written, is basically a list of horrible things happening to someone, with no seeming avenue of ending or release. Hopefulls she finds some way to kill the raping git, or throws herself out a window. Because her situation appears to be reduced to a life of meaningless abuse.
It's been very enjoyable rwading this far! Not sure how I feel about the cliffhanger but I still liked this one regardless. I hope Alayna is able to have a good ending to this.
This is so hot and the world building is better than some of the fantasy out on the market! Please keep going!
Hello! First, I just want to say that I appreciate the feedback very much. When writing part four, I did worry that the direction it was going in was too dark. That said, I don’t want to give too much away, so continue reading below at your own risk! The following may contain spoilers for future parts:
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Xanth is definitely not the hero of this story. Things may seem hopeless right now, but don’t give up on Alayna just yet. This story should have two more parts before what will hopefully be a satisfying conclusion to her time in the Greenfrost.
Again, thank you all very much for your feedback and for sticking with this story for so long!
No giving up. As I said, the story is very well written and while I dont like it when bad guys do well, thats just my HEA addiction and soft heart (for the underdog that is) kicking in.
I agree with the other comments that Xanth is a horrible scumbag. I hope Alayna is able to kill him and find freedom and happiness. Currently it is too dark and makes me sick to my stomach to see so much abuse at his hands. I hope she finds a way to destroy him and get back with Beckett again. She deserves it even more after everything Xanth has done to her.
I’m very glad to hear from the author addressing this. Thank you for giving me some hope. I was ready to give up on the story.
Love the story so far, but a teeny bit disappointed with this part. You already teased the twins but they had no interesting features, apart from being given Alayna, which we had already seen with Xanth's other servants and pets. The three prisoners was also not a surprise to anyone paying attention. Was hoping for more details on why Alayna is more than just another pet, her specialness is undercut by Xanth promising to just give her away like that.
This got dark.... I love the direction this is headed but damn did that genuinely hurt to read
Honestly, this series is the best erotica I’ve read for a while. I’ve never been so invested in a series and I’m often rereading the chapters or checking if a new chapter has been released. I’m really looking forward to the next chapter 😁
Genuinely eager to read the next chapter. And if you ever finish this, OP, PLEASE CONSIDER PUBLISHING. I would love to own a physical copy of this T-T
It has been pretty clear for some time that Xanth is irredeemable. There is no anti hero in him. For something so special he certainly intends to dispense it for rather middling reasons.
The amount of constraints continue to be added to Alayna's enslavement. Xanth's magic to redirect pain when Alayna calls to her magic, Xanth's arm band, the bands from her early youth and now the potion's withdrawal risk make it almost insurmountable to be overcome . The arrival of her three friends was no surprise as just another obstacle for her to address. At some point there needs to be a rather sudden and unique change to overcome all these impediments.
Looking forward to some miracles in the next two or more chapters.