All Comments on 'The Lucky Slave'

The concept is great but it seems a little trite she’d have to be a sociopath to be able to flip her ‘emotions’ on and off adapting that rapidly to such devastating life changing events. It’s as though you’ve taken a multi part story and crammed it into one.

Thanks for sharing, best of luck with your writing

Tess (uk)

It looks like Emily has lucked out...but I can't image her life continuing that way. I think family and friends are going to test their comment. It would be fun if you continued their story.

Naw. This wasn't a romance story. It never got to that point; all it portrayed was sex.

What happens if she gets pregnant? Would his kid be a bastard in this world?

A great start a little short and rushed. Still a great story.

Overall it was pretty average. I find it inconsistent that Emily, a hard-working individual struggling to pay her debt, suddenly started loving her master in one day just because he is somewhat better than everyone else. The emotional switch is way too sudden and throws the reader out of the loop.

You're probably right that the relationship blossomed too fast, but I felt like Josh was almost desperate for a girlfriend, though he was too shy to chase the girls himself.

Had Emily immediately tried to have him fuck her, that would likely have thrown him off. He wanted something more like genuine affection and by taking it a little slower, spending time kissing and touching, that made a difference. Josh was also sick of having his friends rag on him about being, shy, nerdy, and virginal. He wanted someone they would think was a real girlfriend.

Emily for her part was slightly submissive, which we saw in how she fell into the light dom/sub play during sex. She also knew that if Josh was unhappy with her, she'd end up in a far worse life as a whore in a brothel. She was desperate and would say and do anything that would keep her out of it. When Josh was tender and affectionate during sex and considerate of her, that sealed it for her. It was almost a rushed Stockholm Syndrome.

I have just completed reading all 59 of your stories posted on this site this my favourite by a nose over all of them they are all great stories and all deserve to be read and in my Orion they are all worthy of a 5 star rating although some are a more solid 5 than others none of them deserve less than a 5 star rating This Dystopian story reminds me so what of Margaret Atwood’s A Hand maiden’s tale I feel that you have full length book in you and why not use this type of story to it and who knows one day you could be as famous as I feel with a bit of effort your work is good enough to warrant being published a main publishing house so a little bit of luck and a lot of talent which you have in spades we should be able to purchase this book by you in a couple of years or so take care now and the best of Luck as the best of writers need this KEEP UP THE WONDERFUL WRITING

Still my favourite despite reading your 2 new stories .So is there any chance that you could extend this story or write more Dystopian world stories I really liked all the work you did in setting up the development of this world before telling the story I really enjoy stories with a lot of background detail so hopefully you will write more stories were you set up a back story before telling the main story but what ever you write I really enjoy reading so keep up the great writing and let’s have more more more wonderful stories please

Discovering Each Other

Seized, stripped and sold to satisfy a debt, Emily is bought by Josh's dad who is concerned that Josh is shy about girls. The seizure was harsh on Emily who had tendered payment of an installment of her debt. Her default was purely techincal, a delay in crediting the account and denial of a period of grace. Yet, on her introduction to Josh, it's Josh who is reluctant. In a short time, the frost of both warms and Emily plans on having her contraceptive implant removed to cement the relationship. There is a criticism that all this happened too quickly. Sometimes life is thrust on people unexpectedly.

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