by Winterfrog
What trip to Madiera?
She treats you with contempt and disrespect as an imbecile with a low self respect, distrusting and insecure!
All the while, she knows about Star and that your concerns are valid but she still chooses to treat you as an inconsiderate, distrusting husband with no valid reason.
She went to meet with Star and was fully going to go all the way and she knows it - just believes you don't have a clue.
With regards to the business trip, any woman knows if she was vaginally sexed and feigning doubts that she didn't think anything happened - nonsense - she knew damn well. Now she knew that she willingly was cheating and thinking no one knew! She caused her own problem and blames you for the exposure. This is not the character of the woman you thought you married, this is a conniving cheat!!!
Now, she lunches with Fox and is angry with you because you caused her to be treated as a slut so what do you think she is doing? Nothing to lose so what the hell.
Happily married for ten years - well, circumstances placed in front of her and she went for them - not the woman you thought she was. Possibly, even she didn't know who she was but now - forget it!
By the way, he already gave up on her...sex with the Choir lady - he knows the marriage is gone.
Trip to Madiera - really?
Your good so I'm wondering how you are going to reconcile her cheating twice and most likely three times without making him out to be a loser/wimp? Please don't try to justify for the sake of the kids - No? Your good, she changed, he has the ability and desire to be monogamous. There will be another love...say - maybe the Choir lady?
Anyway, you did well again - thanks for the story and Yes I'm looking for the follow-up....Please don't disappoint those of us who are straight.
Thanks again!
I love your stories. I've read them all and was beginning to think after the last two that you were losing your edge. I'm glad to see that you are back on form.
I know that you have been criticised in the past for your Scandinavian/English but I think that it adds so much to your tales - and I may add thart your use and command of the English language is far better than many of your detractors and other Literotica writers. Please don't be tempted to have your scribblings converted to proper English. You are who you are and your stories would lose so much if they were correctly transcribed.
One error I would point out, is that a female headteacher is called a 'Headmistress'. A minor point, I know and it certainly doesn't detract from your excellent writing.
Keep up the good work and I eagerly await your next submission.
Jim (junesmate)
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I would like to have read that 'Star' was given a severe birching before being tarred and feathered. Perhaps it would have improved his acting skills....
Hope Chapter 2 isn't a total wimp out. She cheated when she pulled down her pants for Star, and why pussy boy believes any of her bull shit, and is still hanging around is beyond me. I think I'll change the name of your country to "Skankdanavia." The women are sluts and the men are either wimps or idiots or both.
I am looking forward to more than simply the story of the hiking trip to Madeira. I am looking forward to what happens after Madeira. If they divorce does Nilla take Emil's children from him? With a conviction for assault, it is very possible. If they do not divorce, how can Nilla regain his trust, and thereby, their marriage. What would be her acts of contrition to prove her true remorse and ability to be worthy of his faithfulness?
I would like to hear how things end between the 2. and does he get Children if they Divorce.
as always with Winterfrog. It is not obvious to me why the lack of interest in a private visit by Nilla did not write an end to the story. But you will do best by not writing chapter 2. Just leave the doubts up there.
another dumb story, does she have to run around with the whole town before he catches on and how did he get three months for hitting a guy who did what he did to his wife. VERY, VERY DUMB.
but I was surprised that you left this one unfinished.
Clearly Nilla has lots of issues. If she didn't want to visit him privately in jail, after giving her boss a beating that the guy richly deserves, we have to question how much she cares for her husband.
But however this ends, I hope you'll post the rest of it soon.
Thanks,
ohio
I also enjoy your stories. I gave it a 4. If you would have hooked up with a writer you respect and got some editing, it could have been a 5
Wf,
Great story and writing! Hope you have the/your story written, Pt.2 & more... and that 2. is not influenced by "story comments section", other than "yes" to share it.
Please do 2. and let us know how you ended your story.
I've no comments, untill you submit your conclusion. Really looking forward to reading more.
Thanks for sharing on Lit.
x
She has done too much to forget, he will always wonder. No matter how much you love them sometimes it is better to cut and run. This is one of those times. Good story.
You're plots are always great. The flow is good but your phrasing and syntax are confusing and very challenging to read.
I didn't like this story very much. Too wimpy for my tastes.
Emil succeeded in getting some 'revenge sex' while in jail. I approve of this, as in my eyes it levels the score and draws a line under the previous cheating. I hope to see part 2. BTW, There seems to be some confusion as to whether Robert Olsson's wife is Susanne or Lena.
I enjoyed the story, and I do like your 'voice'. It's that rarity of being both unique and good so any editing should leave the grammar stuff alone. I thought it dragged a bit at the end wondering about divorce. You certainly left enough gore's in the marriage to damage it beyond repair, but still, it could go either way.
Look forward to part two
Chilley
YOU GOT ME WAITING FOR THE FINISH OF THIS STORY,HOPE IT IS SOON.
WF, by and large I like your stories. But you really do need an English editor. Yes, others don't care but I appreciate the Queens English...OK, the Presidents English, far too much to allow so many errors from a talented writer. You change tenses from past to present to past too often. Pick a tense and keep to it.
Also, your use of colloquial English is a little rough. You have "the last laugher will get the best laugh.". If you are going to use an idiom, keep it pure and in context. "he who laughs last, laughs best." Also, it is not a "conning fox" but a "cunning fox". There are too many run on sentences. run on sentences. That destroys the flow.
I don't mean to be hypercritical. I can write nothing in any Scandinavian language and I am only fair in Russian or French. Spanish would be the best next to English. :)
As I said, I like your writing. as good as it is, it will be better with a good English editor. All writers use them. :)
Cheers
C
Write a second part. However, you shold seek out a new wife. Nella is obviously a whoring slut at heart orso stupid that she thinks what she did is not cheating and she will surely do it agian. Cut your losses and look for a youger, sexier woman who is not as stupid as Nella
Sort of left the story hanging, but still in all it is a good read.
Having read a lot of the author's work, I can understand his non-English word usage and appreciate the author's writing in English, for I can't understand a word of his first language.
That's why I admire the international writers for posting on this website, they take the initiative and time to write and post good stories.
Thanks for the good read, and I hope to see the rest of the story soon.
There are some things that make or break a story and/or character for me. In this story, it's that Nilla repeatedly says to her husband that nothing's wrong, he's paranoid, don't believe all the (true) rumors, etc, while KNOWING that Star guy is going to fuck her.
That breaks the character Nilla for me right there. Torch the bitch.
Any reconciliation aside from "I want to see my kids every other weekend" is him wimping out.
I agree with bigguy and chagrined that you do need an English speaking editor. It would make the story easier to read, and fix the common mistakes. Just a suggestion.
Until then, I'm waiting for the conclusion!
Great Story as usual, I like the Nordic perspective on relationships and reading your stories is just like talking to some guy from Sweden at a Pub as he tells about his or someones relationship gone sour. I hope that you write more often about the relationships and trials and tribulations from the North.
The shit have hit the fan !!!
Best thing about WF stories is damn pussy hounds getting their balls kicked. Real men fight for their women, real cucks run away sobbing like bitches. huecuck's real life cuckolding left him jaded, ball-less and wanting more. WF kicks ass!
and the other awaited the outcome. TK U MLJ LV NV
Yeah your wife was cheating on you but in prison you cheated yourself. You only had three months but you couldn't wait. Get a divorce, split everything then both kill yourselves. That is what should be in ch.2. We'll see...
sorry for your time in jail, but there are consequences to actions. good luck with nila, ill bet she already found a new hubby. that's the way women are, sorry to say.
She is obviously no damn good as a wife!
Jesus!
A $20 whore has more honor and honesty!
its not always true, but still in use world-wide. TK U MLJ LV NV
And he kicks ass!!! Nilla is a weak bitch with some sociopathic tendencies.
Nuclear BTB is required.
in telling,,,,,,in hiding,,,,,,on vacation,,,,,,shave and a haircut 6 bits, TK U MLJ LV NV
She's already moved on with a rich man. She only comes to see him every other week and she's made it clear she's not happy with his actions. He should be filing for a divorce, asking for custody and threatening to smear her name all across the internet as a cheating whore. No second part necessary. Their marriage is toast!
Let's get out of jail and burn a bitch and a rich bastard. Don't wimp out.
Winterfrog, a taliban as usual. Talking about how you consider women I realky think you have a lot in common with those black wearing sciovinists
1- 3 scumbags. Basically letting actor training go on when is rape pure and simple
2-anonymous 9/4 and 26thnc stated my other thoughts
She slut
He scumbag
There should not be a need for Ch 2,if he was a man he would have dumped the slut after her night with Star.A second part can only mean he is going to stay married to her.
When a drunk husband wakes up in bed with a naked woman, he's a pig and a cheater, no matter what. People hate him for it and want him castrated.
But when a drunk wife wakes up in bed with a naked guy, she's a rape victim. Poor diddums.
What's the difference? Drunk women can be raped, but not drunk men? What if they are both drunk? Are they both rape victims, or just the one? Or is it just the one that regrets it is a victim? When 2 completely drunk people have sex, how is one a victim and one a rapist? Aren't both equally to blame?
Always got me interested, how in stories women easily go to "trainings/team buildings" or other "innocent" acts with a known pussyhounds.
"I thought it would be strictly professional". Right. An attractive woman away with a serial seducer. What could go wrong? Jeez, women that stupid are really out there?
"Nilla is a good mother to our children and has been an almost perfect wife to me." Really? This MC clearly doesn't believe in setting the bar very high. Even if nothing else is true, allowing a man other than her husband or a medical professional to shave her snatch is light years away from being 'an almost perfect wife'. Seems to me to make his decision for him.
Umm isn't it allowing rape to progress, if you watch a woman being spanked and beaten and forced into sex afterwards? Yes he intervened with Roland when it was Nilla. No doubt she fell to his seduction easily to get into his place. But what makes it worse is she did it on the heels of her unwanted, drunken sex tryst with Haller. What the heck was she thinking? She would have been raped by the Star. Wtf? And yet the MC is also a douche for banging a married women visiting the prison, multiple times. Huh?
This was a weird story...