All Comments on 'Unlikely Love Pt. 03'

I only wish the chapters were longer. Loving the build up between the women, and anticipating Alan’s downfall. I like getting to know what each is thinking along the way too. Write faster! :)

Can hardly wait for the next chapter.

Amazing!

These stories are too short.

Brill. Keep it coming.

Wow...great read...cannot wait to see how it progresses!

Another great chapter. Tamara is a sympathetic character without being totally pathetic. Elena is a strong protagonist who is facilitating Tamara's reclamation of her individuality and her spirit, while also helping her discover her true sexual identity. Alan is a convincing antagonist who adds a nice amount of tension to the narrative. Good stuff.

You have us hanging - very nice storyline, captivating characters, great writing. Could guess where you are taking us, but never know. That said, love the romance. Thanks for sharing your talent.

Your chapters are too short :P enjoyed all three installments. Looking forward to more. Thanks!

Great stuff! More more more.... Pretty please

wow its heating up nice now and cant wait for next one

Loved Every Line!

Bring On More!

Unlike some, I don't mind the short(ish) chapters - you pack so much into them! The way you capture details of scene and mood and shifts of atmosphere and feeling is utterly spellbinding! And such beautiful prose too!

What’s clever is the way you describe the same events from two different perspectives in a way that mirrors real life. We witness the same things through our own lenses so we end up with different interpretations. I love the way you play with Tamara and Elena’s desires and insecurities to achieve this.

You have created two very attractive characters and you describe their developing relationship with care, skill and sympathy. I am really enjoying this x

A lesbian with that much patience can be overwhelming sexually on either side of the spectrum, someone has to give in because the passion is there, the intimacy is at a fever pitch all it would take is a touch in the right place and wala, success at last. But sadly, not in this case, the subtle drama continues with anticipation but much reluctance.

In my opinion, the careful reluctance is spot on. The loving scenario they mutually described and pseudo-dreamed together in the restaurant was an ideal indicator of why that reluctance is necessary. Anything more um, ... aggressive would likely be viewed by the recipient as border-line predatory as this point. It would at least be intimidating.

Long term relationships require long term patience. Otherwise, it just becomes an overnight shag.

Also, didn't like seeing Lily in there.

But then, after thinking it over, isn't sex with someone you don't care about just a form of masturbation?

I told you before how good of a writer you are. Your dialogue and narration I find to be excellent. Great story which I have happily rated at five stars!! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Just phenomenal in your narrative and the flow of the conversation. You are building a friendship and bond between these two that is pulling me the reader, and writer in deeper to see where you take the on their journey. 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

Flows so well off the page, the anticipation, the nervousness, so engrossing, so enjoyable, so well written!

Thank you