All Comments on 'Vampires Don't Sparkle Ch. 08'
by JokerMan84
- 5 Comments
Yet another chapter I enjoyed! I am enjoying the developing story of their life together. Exploring their King and Queen titles could pose an interesting storyline. Looking forward to the next installment! Thanks!!! - AV
Clunky dialogue is still a problem. Stop making characters respond to each other by saying "Wow!" Also, edit for punctuation mistakes and run on sentences before you upload. It all gets very distracting.
But please learn the usage of lay and lie. Not a story breaker but is frustrating to interpret all the time.
[08.08.23]
Re: Nerd Cred Check...
I'm like Wonder Woman you'd be,"
"Superman?"
"Not quite, maybe like.......... I dunno, Wonder Man maybe?"
"Who's Wonder Man?"
"I dunno, I just kinda made him up."
Comics Fun Fact:
Marvel Comics has had a Wonder Man since The Avengers (v1) #9 [October 1964]. He was created by Stan 'The Man' Lee, 'Dazzling' Don Heck, and Jack 'King' Kirby...real name Simon Williams - he has a brother Eric who becomes the super villain The Grim Reaper and Simon's engrams were used for The Vision by Ultron.
"Stay Nerdy"