All Comments on 'When Worlds Collide Ch. 13'
by JazCullen
- 52 Comments
Sometimes with series, the longer they go on the more disappointing they get: authors sometimes rush with the important moments and focus on insignificant things, or they drag out the conflict endlessly and needlessly and cut short the happy ending. This story is absolutely the opposite of that.
This story/chapter is AWESOME. It is wonderful to follow and enjoy, because each chapter is so rich and vibrant; each chapter builds more and adds more and never detracts. I never feel shortchanged when I read your new story chapters, only satisfied--and then I read the whole story again from the beginning! I hope you keep writing, and I can't wait for the concluding chapter and the next story!!!
this was pure magic, the fights, the emotions, you stepped it up a notch , again !!!
one more chapter to go, but i really really really hope that won't be the last of these.
pure bliss to read, sweetie.
hi, i have been following your stories. i so enjoyed it. one tiny thing that bothers me though, on page 2, near the bottom, it says "ring her neck" it should be spelled "wring her neck." sorry to nitpick. i just couldnt help myself. hahaha.
you've done it again!! What a fantastic chapter, the action, the emotion. I could barely breathe. Such a nice touch with Ashleigh and Nors too. Can't wait for the next chapter because you know you have to do another series - you just have to!!!!
You have done it again given us a wonderful chapter, loved it from start to finish! Demetri was awesome and absolutely love Nors! Caleb was absolutely amazing when he took Adrei down a peg and scared the crap out of him! I even shed a tear in parts and had a laugh in others all in all fantastic as usual!
Willie
i am speechless. you made the final battle so breathtaking and the characters unveiling themselves with aces up their sleeves. i can't wait for the final chapter. good job!!!
LOVED IT!!!! You know how to bring forth the emotions. Another great chapter to another fantastic story. I loved how you have set yourself up to carry on with some of the other characters. I can't wait to see where you go next.
Oh by the way I have cancelled the hit for now, but I reserve the right to put another on you if you continue to leave us hanging at these huge turning points in the story. Keep up the great work.
WOW this has been and awesome sequel. It was written so well and the flow was perfect. I loved the way you set it up for another story with the two brothers and the two female weres great.
I am always awed at how you get the characters emotion so real. I also loved how the ancient vampire Nors told the young bitch she could join his household in one year Then he wondered what the heck happened to his common sense. I do want to read more on the brothers and their were mates. Demetrei almost seamed like a good guy in this. I very much like his character. The only thing I didnt much care for was how weak Rafe seamed. I know that I'll get the email telling me they were ancients and all that but Rafe is an Alpha.
But otherwise I gave the story a 5 once again.
Awesome Chapter,
Scurvy
Wow is all I can say. Even though I cried a little... I still found my self jumping out of my seat when Demetri got hold of Graves... I also found myself yelling at the computer monitor. There's one scene nearing the end of "Little Nicky" where Nicky-Adam Sandler- 'releases the good' and an Ozzy Osbourne look alike appears and takes hold of the bat( which is Nicky's demon brother in bat form) and Rob Schneider as the dirty hillbillie in the crowd yells "You can do it, bite his freaking head off!" I was standing up, with my computer chair knocked over on the floor yelling those exact words at the monitor. I love how you made Rafe and Demetri come out as the still human even though I'm sure they probably thought about burning Graves body twice just like I did. And Nors... I have got to hand it to you Nors was just what Ashleigh needed. I cannot wait until the story is finished so you can start on Andrei's and Alexei's story and after that you can start on Nors's and Ashleigh's story. :) I'm not sure if you had a story planned out for Nors but it wouldn't be a terrible idea...I'm not hinting at anything just wishful thinking.
-392OhMyGoodness
Honestly I am not one to post comments on stories. While I have read most if not all of your work, I feel this story is your best work yet. It takes a true author to make you feel as if you were there. I felt it... I felt the fear, the anger, the rage, the love and the loss. I could smell the blood, I could feel the anguish. All in all I absolutely loved this story! It flowed perfectly... it left me wanting more each and every chapter. You are a fantastic author and one of my favorites I can't wait for the next chapter and the next story line!! Thank you for all of your hard work it is much appreciated!
Looking forward to the last chapter and to the next story in this series. The twins perhaps? Nors and Ashleigh? Wherever the story goes, I'm with you. Thanks for writing.
say it isn't so? I know, I know all good things must end sooner or later...... excellent chapter and I am very curious to find out what you have in store for us next!
My loving adoration for Demetri aside, you really have created awesome characters here Jaz. All of them are just great. I'm so proud to have been with them since the beginning. This was a great chapter, it totally sucked me in. You never fail to disappoint. . Oh and are the twins getting their own story? I sure hope so. I love those two lol.
but then again we would expect nothing less from you. This chaper was superb. I can not say anything that has not already been said. I felt all the emotions that the characters felt. I cried and I laughed. I never want the story to end. You have such a talent. Thanks again for sharing it with us.
Kate
I know there is still one more chapter to go to wrap things up, but I feel like I can at least relax a little now that the conflict is over. Unless there is some terrible twist coming, but I hope not. I thank you for letting all the main characters return to their mates alive. I really love a happy ending. There is even the beginnings of a happy future for the ones who suffered the loss of their loved ones. This chapter has left me with a good feeling inside andi know there are good things in store for our beloved characters.
I cried so hard its unbelievable....You have such a fantastic talent for writing and ridiculiously fenominal imaginaton. You're attention to detail had me thinking i was there with them. In a way t combate all the loss, many have found their mates and the pack has gained more powerful allies. I must say however "Nors and Ashleigh" very unexpected, hopefuly by the end of the year she's better and she matures then possibly a match there? Sorry i know i have gone on too long but please dont keep us waiting too long for the final chapter and new story (would love to read about the twins plz).
<p>Thank-you for a very good chapter. For letting Rafe decide on mercy. For helping Ashleigh over the death of her family. For all the hints of possible future stories. For pre-empting Rhianna's feelings of guilt (I'm not sure I could stand seeing her go though such guilt). Most of all, thank-you for there being another chapter to come!</p>
<p>On vampire psychology.<br/>
It is interesting to see how interacting with the Were has affected a number of vampires. It seems to me that they go into a kind of shock from living too long and loosing too many friends. It manifests as a form of indifference to the world and those in it, particularly the short-lived humans. Most interesting to see them come out of their shells when interacting with the wolves. Do vampire's powers start growing again when they've broken through this barrier? Maybe we won't ever know.</p>
<p>On physiology: you've told us that Vampires can't reproduce with humans or other vampires. Has there ever been a Vampire-Were relationship? <br/>
Also, I can't seem to remember how long a typical were lives for... Cedar seemed to imply long life in her comments to the twin, but the turnover among were seems to be a lot higher!</p>
<p>That's all for now, thanks for this chapter again, I await the next with anticipation.</p>
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-ShadowedDreams</p>
So glad that Graves is dead, lol, and that most people survived.
I really hope you write more after this!!
Just wondering, are you still continuing the story of the Siochan?
(I still love WWC, TA, and FTI most, but the Siochan isn't half-bad, haha)
I'm thinking that the twins could get in trouble with the Council, but because of the whole mate thing, then perhaps the Weres help to defend them? Or something like that.
Your stories are tons better than Twilight(they remind me of twilight, for some reason), and I love your characters more.
Best series ever on this site(that I have read)
So glad that you give us the privelege to read your stories!!!
Thanks!
I thought this was great and I look forward to reading the next chapter. I also hope that you write something about the twins, Cedar, and Loretta. That seems very interesting as well. Thanks for the great stories.
I was bawling and bubbling and sobbing... I liked the Ben character too, well his connection to Rafe was endearing. And that old wolf, that was sad too... This was a really hard chapter and that just makes this story even better... I'm waiting for the next... Great job!!!
No words can describe how much I loved this chapter, this series. All I can say is Gush, Gush gush, gush gush gush, gush gush gush gush, gush gush gush gush gush, gush gush gush gush gush gush, gush gush gush gush gush gush gush, gush gush gush gush gush gush gush gush, gush gush gush gush gush gush gush gush gush, gush gush gush gush gush gush gush gush gush gush, well I think you get my point.
I cried like a baby over the losses but it was a great story and look forward to more from these characters.
I tried to be nice and offer the possible dropping of the lawsuit but nooooo you had to go and cause me to have heart palpatations with this chapter!!!! Stop messing with my emotions girl!!!! My husband made me stop reading because I screamed and scared the crap outta him!!!! So now you have two people with mental anguish all because of you!!!! Hope your happy little miss jazzy!!!! I await the next chapter!
Each scene of the battle brings the Weres and Vampires closer to understanding, love, and personal growth. Nicely done. Now, if we could get Muslims, Christians, Jews, etc. to form an alliance to stop the extremist killers from multiple religions and learn from each other...
Okay so I have been trying to figure out what to say regarding this installment...
Firstly - Argggghhhh!!! Now I want to know what happens with Cedar, Loretta AND Ashleigh - the suspense is going to kill me lol. Actually I thought it was clever that you gave the Ashleigh/Nors story a distant starting point... it will help us less patient fans to keep in check ;)
Secondly, thank you for maintaining in the end Rafe's & Dem's personality with the killing of Graves. It would have been easier to make it a massacre but the honor and dignity that was there is more suited for the characters and remind us how much Dem has changed.
Lastly, I loved how it ended, the simplicity and the emotions without restraint all mixed in with a touch of hope and faith. Jared and Millie are so wonderful.
Thank you so much... you can breathe easy now knowing that there are no more major death threats against you and you only have one more chapter of this saga to go.
I see that Morningdawn has canceled the hit ... YAY!!... that leaves you with less stress to continue on and write us some more.
Love Love Love Love Love this chapter and the series to date!!
yay Go Demetri and Rafe! As always I LOVE this chapter!
I didn't see the Nors/asleigh thing coming but i <3 it
I really needed my WWC fix and I got it, amazing!
Fantastic Chapter Jazz you've had me smiling and in tears. I so can't wait for the next one hun and I guess then you will be working on Cedars story too :)
Keep em coming hun your doing ace xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
Sol (jazz' Groupie ) xxxxxxxxxxxxxx
I had tears and i cant wait for the other installments this is going to be crazy who would have thought that the three werewolf hating vamps would fall in love with their mates being werewolfs ont top of it one of them is going to be on the council ha love it.
of the three vamps and were's i think nors and ash are going to be the most interesting because he seems to have a great deal of humanity left to him and she is going to be a little fragile for a while
I am really glad that isn't the end for all these characters. I love them all so much. And if you can help me love Demetri, lol...
It was worth the wait till tonight when I got to it finally. I loved the way Graves died. It was so great to hear D pull off parts for the different people, then for him to turn him over to Rafe. It was really powerful to choose to have Rafe do what he did since his sweet nature has been as much a part of him and the story as Rhianna's nature to pull people in. It was amusing to see how she has affected so many of the hard vamps. I love the scene with Nors and Ashleigh. Huh...does he feel fatherly toward her or something more?
You teased us with Ch. 12 so you know you now have to write more since you didn't mention the twins in reference to their possible mates. I am still unsure what all the things Caleb said to Andrei mean. I was happy you used that scene to make Caleb more of a challenge/tougher again. He was just as intimidating in the beginning as the other elders, but then his personality was softented by Rhianna as much as Demetri, Andrei and Alexei were showed as being tough guys. I like that you showed his strength as an elder/foe. I love that Mara agreed to be turned. You are so good at opening up new routes for new stories to be told...you leave us demanding you tell the stories you hint at. I can't wait for the closing. Thanks so much for your writing, Jaz.
wow. read it, loved it, want more. magnificent writing, hope you put the next chapter up soon, and hope that's not the last. other characters seemed very promising and intriguing. hope to read more form you
Nice way to wrap it up, Jaz. I especially liked that Rafe kept true to himself. You realize, of course, that you've set yourself up for about four sequels here. ;) I hope you get to write at least some of them. Best of luck, and I await the next chapter/epilogue.
I've actually created an account to review this story as it is that amazing, probably one of the better ones I've read on this site. I didn't want it to be just Anonymous either, hence the account creation. I quite enjoyed the action sequences and the fact that you had some slightly major characters die (Shephard, Ben, etc.), as that is a realistic fact of war. I am slightly disappointed about the Graves vs. Demetri fight, however, since it seemed Demetri won out fairly easily, but that's just a minor flaw. Overall another amazing chapter, and I can't wait for the conclusion!
i havnt been online for a while; i just got the internet up and running again. and i honestly have to say THANK YOU; yuh are incredible jazz. and i agree with pennlady <3 yuh just set yuhrself up for some good sequals.. i def wanna know about thee twins =] and emily hahah keep it upp =]
What a delightful story. You've got real talent & i think you should start looking for an agent, I'd certainly pay to read your work! Well done:)
You really outdid yourself with this one! I look forward to reading all the stories your fertile imagination and impressive talent choose to create. Thanks again for taking to time to share with us. :)
I literaly found myself fighting back tears as i read this chapter. I even got choked up when Jared talked of Bill's death. I see a fundamental change coming in the historical relationship between the vampires and weres, especialy with the Nors/Ashleigh, Alexis/Cedar, and Andrei/Loretta dynamics. You have done such a wonderful job of creating two seperate cultures for your vamps and weres, and then having those cultures come into conflict even among allies. Now their hearts are forcing those cultures to intermingle in ways they never thought possible. It will be interesting to see how their seperate cultures evolve now.
well told. Thank you.
One little nit pick: One rings a bell but wrings a wet cloth, I think.
And I've found mine in this chapter! Nors. Love it. Seriously enjoying this series! Only one more chapter to go, and then I can start on the next series! Awesome.
I cried and cried. I ccheered knowing that 3 vamps found their mates in werre but dont realize it yet. You are a great writer and cant wait to read more. I would love to see you published.
V.Cotton
I cried I cheered I laughed. Im in love with all your characters.im so glad 3 vampires found their mates in werewolves but don't know it yet. This story I can relate to everything except the justice I unfortunately havnt found my justice from the wrongs done to me. Thank you for this story
Four times I've read this storyline and it seems I discover the thrill and enjoyment each and every damn time! I think I will print them all out and keep them in a safe place for when I can't get to my internet connection in order to re-read again and again and again!!! LOL!!! Thank you! Thank you! Thank you! You have a wicked and vivid imagination and I REALLLY appreciate it. More pease!!!!!! Your universe...just a Peeping Tom here passing through!
Loving all of your characters. Especially Alexei, Andrei and Nors. They have so much to look forward to, and they don't even realise it. Bummer!! only one more chapter to go. :)
Loved this story!!!! I can’t wait to read how the Romanov brothers deal with Weres as their mates. 😈
Read her stories multiple times, love them all. Maybe in time she will be able to Add More! Please?