All Comments on 'A Christmas Gift'

I liked this story. 4*

I have a little positive criticism, but I haven't even been publishing stories for long, so take my advice with a grain of salt

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If I understood the ending correctly, she knew her rapist and this was consensual-non-consent, right? Just role-play, essentially?

I like cnc stories just fine (it isn't what I write, but I enjoy them)

However, I don't tend to prefer when "it was all pretend" is revealed at the end of the story. I know it can be hard to reveal that it's roleplay BEFORE the story takes off, but I feel like there are lots of ways you can raise the stakes without waiting until the end.

Even a "cnc" story tag would be enough imo.

Either way, I still enjoyed the story.

I'm curious to read more from you. Keep it up

This story has potential. It had small grammatical errors, which were distracting; nothing an editor couldn't fix right up. Another small complaint is that the story switches from past to present tense. This is a SUPER easy mistake to make, but it's a real problem for a readers.

But again, plenty of potential. 4 stars.