All Comments on 'A Special Kind of Love Pt. 11'
by relayer500
- 5 Comments
I really love the your work, I hope you don't stop writing parts to series
Happy that the story continues. not the biggest fan of smearing but I really liked the other parts so far <3
OK I enjoy the progression of the mother-daughter incest, as stilted and awkward as the dialogue can be sometimes. Katie's enthusiasm and willingness to please her mother on her journey to becoming a human toilet are charming and endearing. Her mother is clearly conflicted between her own selfish lust and wanting her daughter to be happy.
For the most part, I'd say that the story itself is well written, though my main gripes still stand - I appreciate that the author is a former prostitute, and I'm not expecting the articulate prose of an Eng. Lit. graduate, but the grammar is all over the place. I'm not just talking about punctuation, like the odd comma or apostrophe in the wrong place. Sometimes the tense will randomly switch, mid-paragraph, from past to present and back again. There are entire sections, where it looks like the author just shat out a pile of words onto the page, and let them sit where they fell. The sex passages, in particular, can be excessively verbose, making them sound more at home in a technical manual than an erotic story.
This aside, I'm enjoying the story and I'm looking forward to reading more. Heck, the fact that I've read this far in is testament to that. If it were as weak as I've probably made it sound above, then I'd have discarded it like a used arse wipe before I got through part 1.
Side note - is "Billings Wood" in the story a real or fictional location? I searched for it on Google maps and it seems to be just outside Leintwardine, near Ludlow. My uncle used to live around there.
I can't believe how much PERFECT and fucking GORGEOUS that is. Honestly, I have no words to say, can't wait for more, MUCH more I hope