All Comments on 'A Suburban Shift'

Just excellent, characterisation so very good and achingly erotic. Also loved the title, stood out amongst today's titles and drew me in. So glad it did, well done for a brilliant first effort. Cant wait for the next part. A five without reservation.

I enjoyed reading that so much. It was just so fabulous, so naughty and so erotic. Loved it. Can't wait for next chapter.

Fantastic. Really well written. Loved it

Looking forward to more.

Please don't take to long for the next chapter.

Sometimes you get great writing and sometimes you get great sex. It's not unusual to get both in one story, but when it happens you make a point of remembering when and where. This is a great story, written with depth of feeling and just a smidge of sexuality!! Can't wait for the next installments...and hope that nothing bad happens to Maddie.

A wonderful story and so well written. A great mix of back story, anticipation and sex. I loved Maddie's odyssey from suburban housewife, to reluctantly bi-curious woman to a lover of women. I look forward to more stories from you.

So many stories are destroyed by rushing too much. You built the story slowly and the character development was first class. I wait impatiently for the next chapter.

Wow, what a debut! Great detail and descriptive story telling. Look forward to coming chapters and future tales. 5*

Agreed with the comment the build up of characters kept my interest. Also building arousal throughout. Great writing. I look forward to your next chapter. Sooner of course better than later.

Have fun writing!!!

Great treatment of a woman coming to grips with her sexuality; it feels honest and real. Keep it up; I can't wait for Chapter 2!

This turned me on so much, and brought back memories into my first time with a woman! Love how it took it's time, and was very detailed about their lives too.

Can't wait for the next chapter!!

Professional level. Great character development, great plot and very good organization. A true joy to read. I cannot believe this was/is your first story.

An outstanding first chapter; please don't be a "one-hit wonder" and leave us hanging...

What a great story. It feels like it was based on someones life and feelings as they are like new things and trying to push those feelings to the side I can't wait for more.

I really enjoyed your story. Thank you.

Your writing technique and the flow of the story were great. Everything of a technical nature was spot on and I can see where this story can be seen as sexy. I am only speaking for myself when I say that I have essentially been the Lauren in this type of situation...same scenario. I really resented Alex and her wedging her way into a marriage that was not unhappy. Maddie was bored with her existence and she definitely needed someone/something to make things interesting again but the fact that Alex willingly and rather selfishly took it upon herself to be the one to "open Maddie's eyes" was not right...especially when Maddie tried to exit the friendship. If Maddie wanted a divorce or a separation prior to pursuing romantic relations with Alex, then that is another thing entirely. Once again, I totally know that this is just a story and it is for that reason that I think that you are an excellent writer. I experienced or, in some ways, re-lived emotions that I once felt as I was reading this story and that is because of your skill in eliciting those emotions... So much so that I couldn't continue reading after Alex kissed Maddie which happened after Maddie told her what happened at the spa (she was upset and needed a friend).They, the characters, became real people and my personal bias against cheating/"home-wrecking"/inappropriately interfering in no way takes away from your skill from your skill as a writer. I quite like your style and hope to read more of your work in the future.

Beautifully written and developed story! You provided a good amount of description, painting pictures of the characters and action. I would love to see you go further, especially when creating the images of what the ladies are wearing: We know Alex and Suzanne wore sexy tops and skirts when all the ladies met at the bar, but I wish the picture was more complete with a description of each of them wearing some sexy stilettos as well. Did Maddie make her wench costume complete with a pair of black high-heeled booties?

I hope the next chapter develops a sensual, erotic relationship between Alex and Maddie that includes some truly feminine dressing - silk blouses and pencil skirts, lingerie sets with garters and stockings, Louboutin pumps. What a thrill for the characters (and the readers) if the ladies attend the school association meeting in tailored skirt suits that hide pin-up model lingerie, and they meet after to sensually strip each other down to just stockings and heels for a torrid love session.

You are a skilled writer and I hope the next chapter of this story creates even more exciting, vivid images of beautiful, sexy women aroused by each other.

Ooops on page 6 you stated Maddie dressed to go to Alex's house wearing, '...a brown skirt that came to below her knees. She added a white blouse and brown button down sweater...' Then a few paragraphs below Alex is trying to whip off Maddie's jeans! Despite this, the whole story is so erotic. Really like your story writing.

Maddie chickened out on Thursday- wearing her skirt... then came back to Alex’s the next day in jeans....

Or horny?

You have an incredible vision and a gift for story telling. This was so erotic. Than you. I look forward to reading more.

Excellent story, well written and and paced just right. Well done!

Style is very clunky and dialogue not very convincing

I liked how time was taken to build up the story.

Ok ok, you made me wet, very wet! Pay no attention to the naysayers. Very well written with just the right build up. Very realistic but I might suggest you read your work out loud to see if someone would really say what you wrote. Write a story about meeting me and.........you know what I want to hear.

I loved it all the highs and lows the trepidation and the joy. A Wonderful story. Please write more.

Great story! I'd love to see Maddie get together with Misha again.

Fantastic

Excellent story and build up at a good pace with no rushing to the first fuck, like most men do! To be honest, I felt it was on the long side and may7be could be broken down into several parts.

Jayne

Fantastic story - ignore the naysayers - one of the best I have read on this site!

If I find out my wife slept with another woman I'd as mad as if she slept with another man. The least she could have done is talk to her husband and ask his opinion, than she could decide which way to go. Sleeping with a man or a woman doesn't make any difference to me, it's cheating!!!

that was hot! i havent read the other parts but i really want Marci and Suzanne to hook up next or Marci with Britney!

Perfect, I really liked it! /a suburban wife/

This story was fucking awesome well done. Ready to read some more

Great story ,. Imm for more

Wow it’s been 5 years, enjoyed it

Wow! Great build up to the final climax. This made me so hard. I can’t wait to read more! Please keep writing!