All Comments on 'A Wife and The Amazon Tribe Ch. 01'
by kingbooruwa
- 45 Comments
I like the whole premise of your story, eager to read from the wife's p.o.v. though, cause the sex was straight rape from the husbands p.o.v. and I'm not into that. Also, you have a little grammar to work on, but those are the only criticisms I have.
Only have a problem with the 14 inch cock takes away some of the realism. Otherwise great story. Can't wait to see wife's pov.
outstanding and refreshingly different...looking forward to your next installment...
Looking for ward to the next installment from the Wife's point of view.
Hopefully just as tasty as this one!!
hopefully it wont be too long before chapter 2 comes out,i really enjoyed the story so far
Awesome story.. keep writing can't wait for the next chapter.
Thank you so much for your comments. As you can see there are many grammatical errors in the story. The main purpose of writing this story was to brush up my writing while doing something fun. So I'm very happy to see so many people have enjoyed the the story.
The chapter 2 is already submitted. Waiting for the approval.
Again thank you for all the comments and votes.
WTF - are you as brain-dead as this trash? No, no, no - don't bother adding to this illiterate garbage. Try taking an online course in English grammar before insulting and humiliating yourself. Better yet,submit this dog shit on that other cuck/wimp site so that some retarded freak will give you some false/flawed positive feedback. In other words, fuck off and crawl back under the rock you escaped from.
You do have an interesting way to looking at this. And a sound advice. I'll take what you said in to mind. I needed to write something other than reports. And knew I'm not good at story writing style. This is a good place to practice that since people here are not judgmental over grammar and they concentrate on the story. There's always a good side and a bad side of anything.
Well-written, well-articulated, well-thought out. Can't wait for the next chapter in this sex saga!
Superb detail and outstanding writing. Really enjoyed part 1, anxiously waiting for part 2.
Please keep developing this story, there is a lot of potential here!
I think some spelling/grammar mistakes just need a proofreading before submitting, and I would love to see some more detail in character development. The chief's size is a little unrealistic, but the concept of why he's the chief is good reading. I, too, can't wait for the wife's POV, but just a thought... wouldn't the wife had rather have her hubby's child? She has to realize what men want from a pretty girl. That's just my thinking, anyways. A race to see whose baby she carries and the suspense of not knowing until birth? Maybe hubby's successful and the chief releases them to honor being bested by a magic bullet, so to speak? Just ideas. But whatever you do, please ignore the rude comments made by some of the anonymous commenters. Keep it up and keep me wet! ;-)
Please write from the different points of view. The next chapter is from the wife's POV, how it started, felt, body reaction, etc, then from the chiefs POV noting the feeling, tightness, climax, ect
but I did here to say I absolutely loved this story. Very creative and different. I can't wait to read the next part of the series!
A young sexy married woman who is not into sex. A cuckold with a little cock. Smallest in the village. And a horse hung chief. And a fellow traveler who is also trapped here. The POV of the woman will be interesting. Also, how the other native women treat the hot sexy wife now that the chief is fucking her. Lots of questions to be answered. Will cuckold attempt to eat her clean? Will slave cuckold be forced to service the other men? Cock cleaning? Please do not leave us hanging with stiff cocks. Now that the wife has been fucked by real man meat, will she get hooked on it? Will they use aphrodisiac's to train her to slut for all those studs?
This story is a great! Thanks a lot for your taping. It's a thousand pities I could give 5 points only. It cost more than 10!
when I saw the title listed. Pretty young white wife taken by savages in the jungle. Good story except for one very big detail. Improper grammar!!! Your word usage needs a lot of work and proof read your work before you submit.
Still will give it 4*
I am not usually into this type of story and although a bit predictable I surprisingly enjoyed it! Embarassingly I was truly aroused when the view was described from her husbands lying on the ground and the Chief cumming inside of her.
According to numerous studies, women's breasts actually get perky when they're not trapped in a bra 24/7, so...
fast paced beginning. still wondering how a 14' weapon is able to be stuffed into a woman that can hardly take a 5'...gotta love those savages...lol
i do agree with the commenters that suggest a proofreader. im not a language nazi but...
We all knew that the wife would get more native cock from the chief. Now in the
next part we find out that she enjoyed the ebony cock and wants more of this big
cock. Lets move on and get the white wife to start being shared by All the natives
of the village.
but there's a kind of fascination to it. Super detail in the breeding part, almost mind blowing. Almost seems really unfair to Sam though--since he's a decent guy in this story. Please edit some, since Julie because Lucie at one point. Still I'll say a 5.
I really enjoyed this story. The premise is very realistic. It looks like Sam is going to be missing out on getting his wife pregnant plus Julie's pussy will never be the same should the chief keep on buried his cock in her.
Thats a damnd nice Story and i can not remember to read something similar here about natives raping White women. 5 stars mate.:)
The author who wrote this story is the same one who wrote "Forcing Aunt Lisa" "Julie My Fiance" and "Missionary's Daughter". She's a middle-aged white woman from the Midwest who is obsessed with black cock. Not bad for a social worker by day.
Terrific story and great description of a raw erotic sex.scene of forced variety helpless husband wooow rated 5
Story line is ok. However, the writing (grammar) is so poor that I won't be reading any more of them. You need some serious editing help.
Can hardly wait for the wife's point of view. I bet she enjoyed it. 5*
And next year she is the queen of that place and he is her willing cuckold slave!! And you are the world biggest idiot who thinks he can write stories!!! Big mistake!!
This was easily one of the best stories I have read on this site. The plot was well developed and supported all that happened in a somewhat realistic sense. I certainly hope she enjoyed it or eventually learned to enjoy it and was bred many times by the chief. Don't let all the little guys whose masculinity is threatened by your writing bother you. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Can't wait to hear how much the wifey hated that sexual encounter with the well hung chief that she couldn't wait for the next breeding session! Makes my little 6 inch peter hard and start precumming while thinking of the nextepisode.
Were the chapters edited? I remember reading this story and it used to be way longer.
Did this become a promotional summary for the full story? If so, where can I buy it? It's not on your amz profile.
Genius Genius Genius man I prolly need help writing my story a real life story .. about my Gf fucking a BBC for first time in a motel was so intense and way better than watching porn .. nothing beats real life !!
Have him fuck her every day, several times until she is pregnant and then continue while adding other men to the mix once she’s pregnant. Lots of cock sucking and deep fucking, please!
It had me wet in my pussy. I want to know if she got breeded and had the baby. Keep writing these kind of stories
This was so poorly written I'm not going to bother reading any more. I do hope you find an editor if you insist on continuing this drivel.
Ever since my white wife was raped by a black intruder to our home these stories interest me! I know exactly how the husband felt because I felt those feelings! Seeing a huge black penis stretching your wife’s pussy and you are helpless to stop it! U can only watch and listen as her once tight pussy now opened to twice its normal size! It will never be the same! You feel like such a pussy when this happens!
Your story was so exciting to be as it brought back the feeling I had watching my innocent white wife being raped by a huge black cock in our own bed! I know how the husband felt! It’s a feeling of fear, humiliation, and sadness but at the same time your natural instinct causes you to get hard as a rock and you feel guilty! After my wife had this experience it changed her attitude on sex and made her desires different! I bet the same thing happened to this missionary wife! Can’t wait to see the next writing!
soon white boy Sam will envy his wfie and be so mesmerized he'll beg for a taste of that Chocolate cock worshipping it like a faggot whore slobber over that Superior Cock only wanting more and more. Then the final step when the Bull puts hubby in his place as his ass now becomes a pussy to Big choc cock. craving two or more as he becomes a sub sissy to that cock being a bigger whore then even his wife. Now having the Hunger he will virtually be a whore for Choco Cock whether Hispanic, Black or dark Asian as long as its in one of his holes. Seeking out Shemales and Ladyboy Goddesses to suck and be fucked by or the ultimate a male sub faggot to be used by groups of men being dominated just so he can taste or feel their power in their now gaping pussy hole...