by fgmntfmgnshn
I liked it! Didn't really much care for the romance between the orc and vampire. It and they felt like filler material.
Funny, sweet, detailed. Loved that we didn't to wait for additional chapters. Can't wait to see what you write next.
This amazing story is begging for a sequel you left it with such an awesome twist at the end that it begs to be told in a follow up.
What a frustrating story! Through the whole thing I felt jerked back and forth by the good news bad news progression, then the end turned to garbage since the ultimate villain missed getting justice.
If the good news bad news hadn't been so excessive it might have been more pleasant, but I'd still hate it for the ending.
Sacrificed several hours sleep over a week in order to read this story and it was worth it. Do you have plans for a sequel?
A great story, with a couple exceptions, until I got to the end. The ending pretty much ruined the rest of it for me.
You fucking RUINED the whole damned story with your stupid ending you human!!!!! Gail Kenward was right, you humans are annoyingly feeble (bwahahahahaha. kidding..... NOT)
LoL. but overall, the story was dope thumbs up
You made Cody a joke? What's the point of the story?
Then James turns out to be someone else, who is in fact evil, and is glad to not be with his mother, though he is probably aware of his mother being raped repeatedly...
You make his mother a sex slave?!?! .I considered ending the story at this point but I kept on reading...
I think the world building was great, the action scenes were good, and the dialogue was a little less than perfect. However your plot of the story and how you ended it made it a huge disappointment that I wished I never took the time to read it. Such a waste.
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I could not have done as well. That being said, please tap into a thesaurus and actually use it. Also, your choise to repeat a word more than once in a sentence is not a good choice!
Wow the ending just ruins it good job you fucking cretin, absolutely no point of the story if the main character appears in the last paragraph. I wish I hadn’t bothered reading up to this point be ashamed of your plots, if you want the main character to be evil they should’ve you’ve wasted your talent in writing with this sham of a plot though.
Wow just really waste of talent and good world building with that plot be ashamed.