All Comments on 'Creating Ginger Ch. 01'
by Ms_Allison
- 10 Comments
If you have to explain your writing format at the beginning of a story, IT'S NOT A GOOD STORY! Can you imagine Danielle Steele, Steven King, or Kurt Vonnegut doing this? You can't explain away crappy writing.
Keep to one storytelling perspective, otherwise it's a complete mess. You lost me within the first few paragraphs, because I don't want to have to read things two or three times to figure out which character is the story teller. Some others may be tolerant of this, but this is LAZY AF writing, and it's insulting to the reader.
Fun start to the series!
I love Michelle's attitude...would love to give her all the oral service she desires...
Exciting to watch Ginger fully grow into her new identity!
Will keep reading.....
Why is Ginger not capitalized? It is her name after all and you used the capital letter in the title. Very off putting . Shame , as I like the storyline .
Oh doh. Don't be silly, ginger is the pathetic submissive sissy. Of course lower case has to be used to signify it's lowly status in the world. Mr Allison didn't want anyone getting confused.
Minor thing. A nun’s gown is called a Habit and the bits covering her head are the veil and wimple.
As a mature crossdressing male who is addicted to kinky Literotica stories, this first chapter has my full attention!
I am completely hooked by the thought of ginger's continuing submissive feminisation at the hands of the wickedly devious Michelle, and intrigued by the presence of Ms Allison orchestrating developments remotely.
I am living this story through the mind and body of ginger ..... and right now my mind is scrabbled by a mix of envy, excitement, and anticipation ... not to mention leaking precum .... which of course I lick from my fingers ;-)
Ohhh Ms. Allison...what a deliciously, naughty thread you weave. Christine wishes there was a way to give this "tail" more than 5 stars. Being a life long Crossdresser it's become one of My deepest fantasies to have a woman, like Michelle help me live and dress as a Female 24/7. Your writing skills, attention to detail, and the delicious, descriptive sensations of wearing lingerie, that You express are very apropos for Christine. The more that I follow threads of this nature, the further I descend into my "Sissy Psyche"....and believe I could "transform" into becumming Crissy. Thanks for sharing all of your stories. Crissy's definitely changing into a fresh, dry thong for the next chapter....Mmmm !!!.......... xoxoxo ;-)
I'm glad that Ginger is now confident to go out in her female attire. And I'm glad Michelle is so nice to her. I can't wait to see the other stories. Thanks for writing so convincenely
Brilliant, what a beautifully told story so far. Absolutely loving it 5 stars.
Thank you Jennifer