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Click here"Um," I said, possibilities flashing through my mind. "Maybe you three could line up on the edge of the bed with your asses in the air, and I could fuck each of you over and over until one of you makes me come?"
The three girls all grinned and Lauren slapped my ass before stepping onto the bed on her knees. "Now that sounds very hot."
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- COMMENTS
I'm enjoying the story, but there's one little thing that feels like running over a speed bump at full throttle. Please people, learn the difference between "me" and "I," particularly when there's a second person in the sentence. The easiest thing to try is to leave out the other person, then decide whether me or I applies. For example, you would never say, "give the cake to I," you say "give the cake to me." That doesn't change just because you add another person: "Give the cake to Lauren and me."
Okay, I'm putting my soap box away now.
This Jer guy is almost too stupid to believe. Many derp moments...why doesn't he use some of his magic to give himself a working brain? Then he can talk to the fairy to figure things out, use magic to improve himself and gain money. This guy is fucking most things up and really fucked up with Annalise. Just talk to the fairy and learn shit, like he's so stupid he doesn't even realize how critically important learning/knowledge is.
It's sad that his sister is basically an afterthought in the story. He didn't even get to be alone with her their first time together. He told her nothing even after Lauren's sister was brought in and wouldn't have sex with her until Lauren gave permission.
I found this story while waiting for the author to return from hiatus on a different one. Mostly I've been pretty happy with it, but this chapter was not enjoyable. The torture of Annalise just should not be interspersed with fun times at the baxley grant house. Each could be good on its own but the mood whiplash the reader receives from the tonal shift blindsided me. I was unable to do more than skim the last 3 pages because I couldn't mentally distance myself from what I had just read about Annalise to get back to fun sexy times.
I fu ked 8 different girls for years daily and never got as tired as this kid. What's his problem. Go eat and drink and come back and fuck. Simple
Ok, dude. Tag-team butt-fucking three chicks is mind bending But enough of the cliff-hanging teasers on Annalise. I’ve tapped her as my fav mage, but you’re losing my interest as I’m an ADOF.
So the proclamation he made a few days is already broken.
He either fucked his spell and set no consequences for going after his word, but let'sbe honest he wasn't told he could or should. Or if he had his fairy around maybe he would know his proclamation has been broken. But since he's a horny with 3 beautiful girls on his mind all of his responsibilities just went under his radar. I just hope no one gets permanently harmed for his oversight, or worse.
I must admit I skimmed through the second half of the chapter hoping for more about the plot.
Going through this ch I got caught up on the father broke the proclamation what is the consequence?
So magic proclamations mean literally nothing, like there is no magic to inherently holding it or anything?
Backlash or hit from breaking a proclamation in the magic world... I honestly started skipping to see what the inherent consequences were to breaking a rule or law set by magic...apparently nothing?
Like at the very minimum the magic should have informed him to the rule being broken
This is a great story or series but what the hell was that insert about dad and pruning shears cutting her neck about that was so random it doesn’t need to be there
I have to agree with the comments of wolfbeckett.
He has the power, but doesn't care one bit about it. He is supposed to be in charge, but Laura has all the power. He needs her approval or involvement in every act.
Okay I've really liked the story thus far. However. This chapter was a serious downgrade for me. The author writes the erotic scenes really well and I enjoy reading them, but the problem is that it's impossible for me to enjoy them because of my concern about Annalise being tormented literally in real time as all the sex is happening. Also, the fact that Jeremiah keeps on putting off speaking to his advisor over and over and over again is pissing me off. He comes across as way, way, WAY too unconcerned about this new magical world he's discovered. What should be the biggest revelation of a mind screw in his life he puts off learning about because "lol I'm tired some other time". For these reasons the story is causing me more anxiety than enjoyment.
It's been 7 years since a new chapter has been posted. Maybe one of the other authors, who helps finish incomplete stories, can take this where it should go. I really hope that happens, since this is a great story.
It's been a long time (seven years!?!) but I am back to writing Erotica!
FoF Ch. 8 has been submitted to Literotica - you should expect it in about 3 days to a week from this comment if things work at the usual speed. If you want it faster, and want to read my other stories, you can also check out my Patreon, where Chapter 9 is also posted to Patrons.
Love the story but this is not a place to end it. To many loose ends and future possibilities.
Great story, I really hope your coming back to finish or continue it. Tis cruel to leave us hanging
This is a great story with a very good setup and some worldbuilding that could spawn far more then we see right now. I remember reading this a few years ago and decided to read it again. When I saw the little notes about being updated just months ago I was really happy. Do you have any plans on continuing this story in the near future? I think you could really wrap this up (without closing the book completely so to say) with just one more chapter. But leaving us hanging with Annaliese is just mean.
OMG! We need more! What happens after this? You left us hanging!
I did vote 5 stars for each chapter.
Honestly, I thought it was great. I've enjoyed the series. Wish there were more, feel like you left us hanging.
Love this series...you have spent a great deal of story time fleshing out some great characters plus you have given us a great beginning for a magic culture framework that just begs for an extended group of follow ons. You literally have the framework for a really great novel here with a little reworking. I suggest you get to firming up your metastory outline and GET TO IT!!! This one has the potential to be a really epic fantasy roleplaying novel worthy of the best like Michael Anderle or Judith Berens best magical sagas.
I look forward to the continuation of this great series!!!!
Of Course...5 stars
Sorry but you have so much unanswered. What happened to Annalise? What happened to his seat meeting, the girl at the mall?etc,etc,etc!!
I think someone stole the story and put it on amazon as the life bringer's harem
Hoping the author is actually planning to post the chapter 8 he said he'd posted on his Patreon. This story was enjoyable...I just remember hating that it ended without resolution. I'll have to reread it now.
Still fun to read but getting to end of life.
Authors seem to all be caught up in the same parts of a tale.
Anal has to be included in all Literotica stories & everyone seems to be in a contest to see who can write the raunchiest story.
Not necessary. Write to make your characters real. A great story is one where. A few days later I can’t remember if I read it, watched it, or lived it, & I think I actually know the characters.
There are some out there!
Bill S.
Damn totally enjoyed this story was disappointed that there was not another chapter to address the Botanist
I hope you know that people are still reading and loving your stories even now.
It was wonderful! Though I am curious to see how that 'Plant $+>|}' is going to get his come uppin's. HE-HE-HE
On dec 2020 the author updated his bio saying he was thinking of coming back but now it's 2022 .........
This is a great story, but its a dam shame you could leave us hanging on the storyline for 10 years. Please help out your readers and continue the chapters.
So... It's 2021. Please post what you have if you have anything so we can give you motivation to keep going.
28 days later from the last comment, I'm lost, abandoned, starving to hear about the a-hole dad!
2 Questions: Has anyone successfully reached out to the author, BreakTheBar? It has been 5 years since he has released a story, feels like he may need some motivation. Also, after 5 years, it feels like we may have to Game of Thrones this and pick up the ball for George RR Martin. Not sure what policy is here, but I’m sure the community would be open to it if we stuck to the writers style and don’t go rogue. Very tempted to do this myself.
What a waste. I mistakenly thought this story was completed. Another potential Lit gem left abandoned.
Please tell me you will finish this. I actually skipped the the last sex scene hoping there was more with Anna. Its such a great story and I want the Dad to get his god complex shoved up his ass and lose all he has ever made. Maybe let Anna become the curse he feared so much, it would serve him right.
I absolutely loved this series and want to read more! I just hope you don't go any darker than you already have with the conflict your are building with Anna and her dad. I hate stories that are wonderfully fantastical and full of rich world building only to see them ruin it all by making a horrid villian that does things that really take you out of the story. I really hope Anna's dad gets his and bad!
I wonder what happened to the Author BreakThe Bear, for there has been nothing written/released since 2016, the last chapter in this series was released in 11/2015.
Will Jerry find out about Abigail's situation and rescue her in time and what will he do to her father for defying him ? These are things people want to know...
Oh damn.
Six years now?
Gotta find out what happens with Annalise, at least.
Don't need to be the best story/line but finish it.
Nothing's more dissapointing than unfinnished business.
(Also for the writer/creator)
All other is said from the previous comments.
I really have loved the story so far and see where you posted 5 years ago that you had a lot of ideas on the rest of the series. so why haven't you finished it yet ? you haven't even finished this story and I really want to know why he didn't know that that girls father violated his proclamation for him not to be able to harm his family you would think that he would be alerted immediately. also how did he kill them when he is supposed to be blocked magically from doing it. I would think he needs to cast a spell so he knows if someone he cares about is in danger and one so he will know if when gives a judgment it's not followed he will know. It might also be helpful if magical families are tracked and kept an eye on so that situations like that girls don't happen and mentors not from their family are set up for any magically gifted child so they can learn and control their powers. please finish the story I think 5 years is long enough to finish writing it don't you.
I really enjoyed this ☺! Hope to read more! What happened to Annlise? More please 🙏!
Since this story was written back in 2015 (today is 2021) I suspect the author has moved on and doesn't care about all of the loose ends they left. I really liked the story and would like to know what they were thinking of the Council of the Seats.
There are too many things left hanging at the end of Chapter 7. We do NOT have closure on important characters like Annalise, her sister, her mother and father, on Odama, on the council of the Seats, etc. or on issues. like the magazine The magazine cover with Lauren on it and the story supporting the photos of Lauren was a major turn off. It destroys the power/magic that are at the base of the story and the desire to keep the dick power secret. It kills the story. Since the Jerry proclamation is not enforced, it ruins the idea of the power of the magic and it has a major impact on the effectiveness of the council of Seats. Somehow, it feels like the author has given up on the story and wants out of this plot altogether. It sounds like story suicide.
Please ask someone with deeper knowledge of English to reread and correct the numerous mistakes included in this story. It would be nice to have a story where the author and proofreader know the difference between there, their and they're.
BJD
Very disappointed and I certainly agree with tiercenpts comments. Like he stated five years is a long time since the last chapter and you better be dead and fucking buried, that’s the only excuse I’ll accept for not continuing on with this amazing story. it’s a shame really it’s one of the best stories I’ve every read.... ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
Just read your story and it was great. Would have been great without the sex just implying what had happened. Do want to find out about what’s happening in Arizona. She was and is a great character.