- Mature
- Intervention
- Page 4
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Click here"Hi, sugar, you miss me?" she said as she swung into the empty seat on the other side of the booth.
"Did you go somewhere?" Dean said, his face dispassionate as he looked up from his books. "Oh yeah, that's right, your mother said that you went up to Concord for the weekend. Did you have a good time?"
Melanie found herself taken aback for a moment, unaware that Dean had known about her weekend excursion. A light of caution flashed in her mind as she considered her next responses carefully.
"It was okay," she said indifferently, as it had been nothing out of the ordinary.
"Anyone else go with you," Dean asked, "I know you don't really like to drive on long trips and Concord is, what, three or four hours away?"
"Oh, just the girls, you know, the usual bunch," Melanie said, trying to make it sound like just another one of those impromptu trips that they sometimes made.
She didn't give him a chance to ask any other questions about the trip as she quickly changed the subject from the weekend past to the one coming up, telling him in a burst of exuberance that she was looking forward to the concert down in Philadelphia.
Dean waited a very long moment before reacting. So long that a look of concern began to appear on Melanie's face.
"I thought we were supposed to be spending some time apart, isn't that what you said?" Dean finally replied. "To see if we really belonged together as a couple."
"Where did you ever get a silly idea like that?" Melanie said, acting like it was the first she was hearing of it. "Of course we belong together."
"That's not what you said Friday afternoon," Dean reminded her.
"Oh, don't pay any attention to that. I was just upset about those silly earrings," Melanie said, appearing to relent.
Again, Dean took his time in answering, prompting Melanie to raise the ante.
"You know, I was thinking, maybe we could stay overnight in Philadelphia after the concert and see what happens," she said.
"And what do you think might happen?" Dean asked.
"Oh, you know," Melanie continued.
"No, actually, I don't," Dean countered. "Why don't you tell me?"
"Here, in front of all these people?" Melanie replied.
"You could whisper it in my ear," Dean suggested.
"I'd rather it be a surprise," Melanie finally said.
"Well, I guess it really doesn't matter, because I don't have the tickets anymore, I sold them Saturday afternoon and used the money to finally get that computer I wanted. Picked it up yesterday."
"You spent my concert tickets on some stupid computer?" Melanie said, her flash of anger causing her to momentarily forget herself. "I mean, why would you do that?"
"Oh, let's just say I had an awakening," Dean offered.
"I don't understand," Melanie said, not used to having things not go her way. "What does that mean?"
"For one thing, I guess it means that you won't be going to the concert," Dean said, barely managing to suppress a smile.
"But I really wanted to go," Melanie insisted, not seeming to grasp yet that she had lost a lot more than the concert tickets.
"Well, here's a thought; why don't you ask Matt to take you?" Dean suggested, his smile now clear. "I hear he loves to take weekend road trips."
With that, he turned his attention back to the textbooks spread out in front of him, the smile on his face now impossible to get rid of.
Melanie sat there for a few long seconds before finally lifting herself out of the seat and quickly heading for the door. The expression on her face was one she really didn't want anyone else to see as it finally sunk in that she had just lost the best thing she had going for herself.
Watching her exit, Shirley also couldn't help but smile. Like the star of one of her favorite television shows, she loved it when a plan came together.
END
- COMMENTS
Fantastic - I have just found you Ann and I am loving discovering your characters. This was he best! Well told and couldn't help but smile at the end.
Every man has a "first time" but this story, artfully told from a woman's perspective, shows what most men miss by not paying close enough attention to a woman's power of communication. Ms Douglas' superior talent as a writer had me wishing that "Shirley" had been my first, and my first was pretty good. Ann Douglas is a gift to the world.
Great older/younger story. I liked the realism in his inexperience and how she guides him to the pleasures.
Such a fabulous story that took me back forty years to when I lost my virginity to an older woman. Having someone so willing to pass on their experiences is a priceless gift that many fail to see or appreciate !!!!
Madame Douglas wonderful story telling as usual.
Merci
Englishman in Paris
Once more I just want to thank all those kind enough to leave a comment about the story - both on here and directly via email. They were all greatly appreciated.
As soon as I saw a new story from you Ann I knew I was going to enjoy a well written tale. I was right. You always portray easily believable characters and your story lines unfold well. Never rushed or choppy. And the intimate scenes are intensely erotic more than simply pornographic. Nicely done!
And definitely an enjoyable one and not going to be the last either. Maybe a tad predictable but I thought the writing was good and the final dialogue between Dean and Melanie was excellent.
Personally, I like a little longer stories since the characters can be fleshed out more thoroughly and various incidents can be brought in.
The affair with Shirley was a single occurrence with no hint as to whether it's a one-off or more to come. He definitely would need more experience so is Shirley destined for a comeback until he moves away to college. Yes please. 5 from me.
you always have characters that we can all at least partly recognize, either in ourselves or people we know...and this is no exception...we have all known Melanies in our day...nice to see her get what she deserves!
I enjoy reading your stories because you have a very good gift at expressing feelings/thoughts in your words. You have a great ability to make a reader eager to see what come next as well as stirring thoughts along with feelings as one reads your stories. Please keep writing and sharing such a great gift that you have in making things come to life :)
Thanks for another great story. I look forward to seeing your posts, and wish you’d write more. You’re the best!
BTW, there’s a typo near the bottom of page three where the word “potion” is used instead of “position”.
A great story as always. Enjoyed the way you developed the storyline and carried us to the perfect finish.
Ann, as always, your stories are wonderful. And this coming of age story is another wonderfully written story. Thank you so much for sharing this with us!
It makes me happy when I see one of your stories posted. They are always a nice slice of life with an interesting story that is erotic rather than porn. Please keep them coming. Thank you.
When I first saw the name D"'Angelo's", I thought the name was in reference to your more older work "Delayed Gratification", but I read that story and realized that the particular diner's name was Tony's. It's a very good story that actually has similarities to Delayed Gratification, a good story as well.
Thank you. I thought it was interesting and it held my attention, even though it's quite long by the standards of these stories. What I like about it most is that the characters aren't stereotypes - e.g. it's shy Dean who initiates fucking with experienced Shirley and not the other way around.
Nicely done, Anne
Young men like Dean need instruction from experienced older ladies. Some nice young lady(ies) will eventually gain the benefit of the things he has been taught. But not Melanie. All that Melanie has now is an oaf like Cody,
Lue
Very entertaining storylines and so well written. Thanks for sharing.
I enjoyed the character development & your concise writing style. Thanks Rob
I really wish I had such a fortuitous education, had to settle for back seat of a Nash Rambler. You certainly have a way with words, I have enjoyed all of your stories.
Great storyline... I remember lusting after a few of the women around me when I was younger. The whole story line was very well done and enjoyable
Phenominal, this was the first of your stories I have read. I don't know if there was something almost wholesome about it, but while a bit predictable it didn't go exactly the way I expected. I liked how Melanie got her comeuppance at the end. Offered a bit of closure to the whole thing. I for one greatly appreciate it.
Watching her exit, Shirley also couldn't help but smile. Like the star of one of her favorite television shows, she loved it when a plan came together...
And the diners gave a round of applause.
5* given
I wish I had a female mentor like that!! A story- a lesson - great sex, and a young man grows up!! Great!
The kind of awakening from which most young men could benefit. You have finely tuned the plot with believable dialog. What's not to love?
Good story and you get extra points for the A-Team pop culture reference. I don't remember the exact years but a good, "Where's the Beef" and "Help I've fallen and I can't get up" reference would have played well also lol.
God love the Shirleys of the world. Kind of wish I had a Shirly when I was just starting out. It's hell when you have to learn by trial and error when it could be so much better if you could learn from a teacher with experience and patience. Not saying I didn't have fun learning, but thinking of all the wasting time and effort when it could be so much better with a little knowledge.
Great story, as usual.
Lovely story. I am happy it turned out the way it did. Intervention is the perfect name! 5*s