All Comments on 'Lori Returns Home to Face Her Husband'
by flman
- 13 Comments
This story is just another swinging/slut/whore story and is very crass. Of course the group sex and swingers and sluts both male and female will love this story so I am sure you will get top marks for the content. Well if this is where your going then count me out of your stories.
sell it anyway you wantyour still a loser who writes stories for losers.
Sorry, but at the end of the day she's a slut who cheated on her husband. My reaction, if it wasn't to divorce her whoring ass, would be if you get to fuck her then so do I, in fact you owe me alot more than one! I certianly wouldn't get off on thinking about the slut doing other men. Hubby's just a pussy.
many writters just make husbands think with their dicks and not with their brains. It should have been better if you injected some drama, or maybe making the husband a little upset and not with the typical OMG YOU HAD LESBIAN SEX THAT IS SO HOT EVERYTHING IS FORGIVEN... that every author writes.
You had all this buildup in your previous stories, then decided to expose Anne as just another whore/slut like a previous reader wrote. Take time with your next story--maybe a year.
As just another brain dead lit idiot, give him a blowjob and the world is rosey again, stupid story.
In this return of Lori you have successfully trashed the whole series. Gangbang bullshit. I have placed you now in the LW pile of sorry writers. Sorry to be so critical, but just to think I followed this series so carefully and was really enjoying some fine writing then this bomb. The series is well written and it is a shame the writer went to hell in a hand basket. No More.
This aside was not as good as the main story. Please return to the island.
I have to agree with the other posters, you've ruined a good story. In the end she's just a whore and he's a pussy and a whimp. I say, if the slut gets to fuck her sister he does to. Any complaints and he can divorce her and tell her parents why. Hell, I'd be wondering where she got the blow job practice, certianly not from doing her sister. Better off if he just starts packing her bags, let her return to her sister.
Wow based on comments you better go back to the island,maybe include one of the local girls(just to add a little color of course)
Congratulations flman, you have enraged the monkeys to such a point that they are flinging the crap from their cages at all the passerby's. Keep up the good work!
I see you have posted a new chapter "Ann Makes Some Friends" and I'll go check that out next.
The intro to this story included "...written eight chapters in the 'The Young Widow series...' " and all the raw and ignorant, many cowardly anonymous (like mine) public remarks never asked about number 8. True, another story appeared a few years after this but I'd really like to return to the islands for more.
I like to lose myself in your romantic fantasy world and I've enjoyed the trip. In my limited writing experience I treasure the words that my spell checker suggests and often laugh at the properly spelled but inappropriately placed words I may have used.
Thanks so much for your efforts and contributions.
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