All Comments on 'Tanning and Teasing Ch. 02'
by CeasarBoobage
- 9 Comments
Very, very good -like your writing style and your imagination -clever story!
I love the way you developed Karen's character through both chapters. As a hiker, I've seen others for example: couples, females or males at various waterholes, primitive campsites and on trails. Some in various stages of being dressed or some have even been nude.
It has been my experience to see seemingly shy females lose their inhibitions when they are out in nature. Some just take a little longer than others.
For constructive criticism, I only found one place where you mixed up your characters and had Karen and Amy mixed up.
I hope there is going to be more of this story - when they get the urge to been seen again and they call Amy to set up another meeting.
RecHiker
great story just feel left a little short changed when the final scene ended without the guys fucking Karen and Mark getting it away with the chick , but other than that 5 Stars
Your story has jumped straight into my favorites. Well imagined and VERY well written. I too was waiting for things to go all the way and you kept it at the top of the teasing level. Can't wait for a followup!
I enjoyed your story. Exhibitionism and voyeurism always get my motor running. I could almost feel what Karen felt in the first chapter. This one was more about group sex which is nice too but not really my kink. It's 5* for sure, but maybe the wrong category.
For me, the transition from "showing" to "feeling" crosses a line. It's just me though. If Karen and Amy had masturbated for the guys and visa versa - that would be Exhibitionism. Even the sex in front of the others turns me on. Swapping to suck breasts, rub penis against clitoris, etc. not so much.
Love this story, I hope you are going to continue it with a couple more chapters.
This story is so utterly amazing. You have to write a continuation. One where the woman fucks the boys while the man is distracted and he finds out. It's so hot
Come on, why not finish it off the way everyone was waiting for????