All Comments on 'The 7 Secrets of Mr. Magpie Ch. 05'
by CorruptingPower
- 10 Comments
Just a little nitpick:
Krage is the Danish word for crow not Dutch, also given that Freya and Christof live in Denmark not the Netherlands (where they speak Dutch)
Feels kind of short. There's no real resolution to this. Maybe I should go back and reread the others, and see if they end up just as abruptly.
That was hot with rose. I'm glad to see callbacks to earlier chapters, and I'm glad things are going well for Raf.
Fantastic chapter! Honestly, I really dug the world-building regarding the gaming industry and what it's like for Raf. That was really captivating in a way I was not expecting. Rose seems like a really interesting character, I hope to see more of her, she has a good rapport with Raf.
Really enjoy your work, especially when you elaborate on the story telling, beyond the very good sex scenes. Thanks for sharing your talents and work.