by JoeDreamer
Where's the rest? What's the ending??
I'm hopelessly addicted to this story and I want MORE!
Oh I'm sure there are critisms, but I can't think of any at the moment. I love it.
MORE!
Great concept for a story. But I noticed a few glaring gramatical and spelling errors and the whole Katia/Natia/Tatia thing really threw me off. What's up with that? A little bit of editing would tighten this story up considerably.
Please a little humor and less predictable if you will!
Great premise and delivery - I'm very impressed with your imagination and talent. This is what can be done with each. Thanks Author - with High Regard
best story I've read in ages... I am sure hoping your hero finds a way to have his girl and beat the rap... good luck, this should be a book...
You keep switching names, almost as if you changed your mind on three different versions of the story, but missed some instances of the name on the edit pass.
So, is her name Katia, Tatia or Natia? You switch several times throughout the chapters.
im enjoying this story but cringed when you changed the name 3 times. otherwise a very interesting, seemingly well thougt out story combining intelligent plot, interesting characters and (of course) plenty of sex!
I laugh, I drool, I get knots in my brain... This is awesome creative writing.