All Comments on 'The OF Girl Ch. 181-190'

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loving this series,5 stars doesn't do it justice

Writing in the second person is VERY challenging... and you failed to make it work adequately. Safer and more reliable is good ole tried-and-true third person narrator voice, it's what we're all used to and it doesn't demand the author find specialized unusual skills to make 2nd person voice work---don't feel bad, few writers can make it work.

This is played out.

Always 5

I had a hunch that this story was heading into a steep abyss and was preparing to jump into it. You know what I'm talking about, so if my hunch is correct, remember that you heard it the first time from me.

Awesome series. Love both this and AMA boyfriend. John and Robbie have several similarities.

I'm so scared for an inevitable implosion.

Something bad is on the horizon, and I don't want it.

Hmm... I smell the unpleasant scents of my prey here.

Really enjoying this series. Thanks for sharing your eroticism with us

Can someone who rates this story highly please explain why? Apart from the spelling mistakes and poor grammar the inept use of the second person pronoun makes the story really difficult to read. I struggled through to the end hoping there was some redeeming feature but sadly not. If like me you read the story because you like anal sex, then even that part was disappointing. The description was unrealistic and quite frankly laughable. Sorry to be so negative, but I’ve read a lot of stories here with low ratings that deserved it. Truly great stories are hard to find and this was rated so highly I expected much, much more. This at best a 4.2 story.

Rubbish!

Well he soon will have two three hole sluts what more can a man want. Let the adventure continue. Love it more each chapter.

You really need to proof read this shit. Punctuation and grammar are all over the place and things like “Darling says I can get ask you to fuck my ass.” Is just shoddy!

Hmm I really don't agree with them filming Sabrina's first anal for her OF. It's their first time doing it and it's a major milestone, it should be all about them and done in a way where they can completely be themselves and react in whatever way is natural without having to worry about a camera. Just film the second time and lie to your fans that it's your first, it's not like they'll know the difference. The first time should be a special shared experience, not something that gets broadcast to the world.

Part of the premise of the story was the risk of balancing a reputable career with a camgirl career. We're well past that stage in the narrative, and it's not even there to add the erotica, the throuple aspect provides that anyway, so what is the point of the OF stuff?