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by NewOldGuy77
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That was really entertaining. I'm looking forward to reading the second chapter.
Oh, and getting revenge for being dumped by screwing Rosalie's mom is pretty epic! (Even if nice-guy Josh won't see it as revenge, Rosalie probably will). Plus Donna will never let her daughter forget about dumping the lovestruck genius for an unfaithful husband.
Loved it.....time line off ....1st lottery in Indiana was 1989.....cell phone..maybe but who would you call!
IS DONNA A WIDOW? MAYBE HE CAN DO HER, TOO. FUNNY IF HE'D PUT A BUN IN HER OVEN...
Very good story. Well written and can't wait to the next chapter. 5 stars.
I know Josh’s high school geek loneliness. I know his severe depression of getting dumped for the first time, when it all looked so promising. I suspect that he’s about to discover the same joy that I experienced with a woman as old as his mother. 5 stars. Next chapter as soon as is convenient, please.
Hey, if it's a multi-part story say so in either the title or introduction. I much prefer to read a whole story and would rather wait till it's finished. Not saying this is you but there have been far too many times where installments were months apart necessitating that one go back and reread the previous part anyway, or, worse, the "next" part is never posted.
Case in point I am 20 odd chapters into a very good but unfinished story in Novels that has had one chapter posted in the past year. I am now regretting the hours I invested in it.
This is a nice tale you have going, though you've forgotten that cell phones were uncommon until the late 90's, oh, and 5'8" 122 is cancer patient/ concentration camp skinny. My certainly not large 5'7 sister weighed more than that.
Hope to see the next part soon.
Enjoyed it to the end but the meeting at the end was too much and then to find out there is a part 2? Can we say cougar on the prowl for her daughter’s ex bf? And despite how much he claimed to love Rosalie, can we say Josh thinking with his little head so soon after the breakup (even with his brother’s advice) rather than with his brain? Hoping for Josh to think more clearly in part 2, maybe after some fun, games, and lasagna with Donna.
Interesting twist with the mother. Let's ee where that goes. Hopefully it won't be months to get the second chapter. If this were real life chances are Rosalie's husband will cheat on her again soon after they reconcile. It's what cheaters do, they lie to get what they want and the cheat. Most likely the girlfriend dumped him anyway. Good story so far
I really enjoyed the story. Yes, as a couple of people pointed out, there might have been a few "inaccuracies" but overall, it was a VERY good and entertaining story. You have woven a good plot and developed characters well and I wish I could write as well or formulate a plotline as well as you have. Thanks for a good read--and please keep it coming!
Another great series in the making! Enjoyed the introduction and looking forward to the next installment(s).
Enjoy Paradise!
Cheers
SAGE
The person who said 5'8" 122 is cancer patient/ concentration camp skinny can suck it: THAT WAS LITERALLY ME IN HIGH SCHOOL.
My time listening to WLS was mostly during the 60s and 70s but I can relate to its importance. Clear channel stations were a musical sure thing prior to satellite radio's arrival. In spite of minor inconsistencies, this part of the story was superb (5*). I can see things progressing nicely through at least two more installments, with some plot twists after Donna gives Josh more education in the art of loving.
Cell phone commenters: In 1982 FCC approved AT&T proposal for AMPS and allocated frequencies in the 824-894 MHz band, and in the early 80s only rich people and companies had them. Donna is a rich West-sider, everybody chill the f**k out!
if i remember correctly, my dad’s cell phone in 1986 was built into his car. it certainly didn’t fit into a pocket like modern cell phones.
Yeah, you DEFINITELY got me hooked with this one. Great characters, everything’s believable (especially when you don’t nitpick over time details. Lol) and most importantly, it DEVELOPED. Nobody’s the same person they are at the beginning of the story and I’m looking to see where it all goes next.
I’m definitely rooting for the Rosalie relationship to work out but I’m also a hopeless romantic so don’t feel the need to cater to me. Just make the best story you can and I’ll keep on reading.
That being said, I’m dying to know how the last blowup affects his future relationship with his parents because I DEFINITELY relate to feeling like I was never good enough for the people who said they loved me most.
Hopefully Josh will go off to college and find the girl that deserves him whilst Rosalie will stay with her ever cheating husband, having a really shitty life & regretting how she threw away the best guy she could ever have had - unfortunately I doubt part 2 will go down this line, which is a great pity as it will probably get them back together again even though Josh should never trust or go back to somebody who discarded him so easily!
Excellent fun story. Loved how you mix song lyrics into what's happening in his life, made it even more realistic for me. I don't know about up there in Chicago land, but the rest of the US of A was listening to those songs on the FM dial, And their videos on MTV. Looking forward to "Second Helping", I'm thinking Ms Donna is exactly what he needs before college. Five Stars!
I loved it! I want to see this guy be successful in life, business, love, and sex! Also, Rosalie is nuts. Married, has wild sex with him, her husband loses his new girlfriend (why, how would he lose his gold digger") and comes crawling back. He will cheat again, will she want Josh back. I sincerely hope he does not go back.
I love the story. I grew up near Chicago in the sixties. WLS was the 'go-to' radio station along with WCFL the only other teen rock station. In the sixties it was Ron Riley and his fake friend 'Bruce Lovely' hiding on the outside window sill. The beginning of the story brought back all of those memories. Thanks.
GREAT one...and great prom night for him, and her too-yeah, can remember when I was 18...tho even then never came close to his night
and also the divorcee I hooked up with in college, and her ex- was never seen, mentioned...
easy five, and fave, and real curious about the cougar...
Great story with a good pace, 'voice' and tastefully fun. Surprisingly heartwarming and again......fun. Looking forward to the next installment!
Great story! I also remember listening to Larry Lujack. My other favorite was Bob Barry, WOKY 920 from Milwaukee. My Galaxie was a '66. Thanks for bringing back the memories. You are a great author and I am glad I found your stories.
Your writing ability is nothing short of AMAZING
You should be writing volumes not short stories
Keep up this SUPER-EXCELLENT work, I"m waiting to read more
MUCH MORE!
This is a great story, and I love it, but there slight detractors that prevent me from giving a 5 star review. I think some scenes seemed rushed, and some of the reactions seemed either over the top or other small issues.
"Dad stood up and shook his finger. "Don't you dare be disrespectful to your mother!"
I shut him down immediately. "Disrespectful? I'm being exactly the opposite!" -- No you little self-righteous imbecile. If you think you are being the opposite of disrespectful to your parents, then you're not as smart as you think you are. 'I shut him down immediately.' IS a line and style of thought that shows inherent disrespect towards another. It shows his hubris, his arrogance towards his parents. This kid may do well on a book test but he will fail the life test.
Surely you remember Franklin McCormick and the All-Night Meisterbrau Showcase? Music and poetry after driving home from a date.
Previous comment were excellent. No need to repeat!
The author has an uncanny understanding of people. We could talk about the 3 women, but I would like to look at the man-child. His immaturity is perfectly portrayed including the hot blood, and in anger not showing respect. People often don't understand how a genius (over 1400 is genius) is still maturity wise his real age. His thought can me mature, his understanding can be amazing, but it is not just brain power but experience that makes us mature.
It is this type of writing that makes it believable and real.
Keep writing good stuff like this.
The Hoary Cleric
liked the characters Rosalie AND Donna, and his parents... also thought he's a self-righteous punk rushing to be like his parents, and insulting his mother about her getting pregnant a REAL low blow-his dad a lot more self-control than I'd have had ...can't see why Donna interested in going to dinner...and good luck getting a hummer from her Mister...! also thought Rosalie incredibly careless letting him bareback her...this must have been written before Plan B came prevalent...
Outstanding, great writing, I was enthralled, I read every word never got bored, it took me back to better times that were followed by incredible heart break by an older woman, everybody should have a Maggie May in their life.
Really great writing . . . Josh Lujak, SUPER JOCK!
People who grew up n the WLS listening area will get the reference.
I must say it one more time that is really good writing!!!
Five stars!
Some great turns of phrase: "twitchy as a lon haired cat in a room full of rocking chairs " and hands trembling so bad he could have been a player in a maracana band. Not to mention the title, which is highly amusing and appropriate.
Bench Seats ! And the damn steering wheel ! Thanks for the wonderful story ! It was very moving !