All Comments on 'Visit with Aunt Vicky Ch. 1'
by zaxxon
- 12 Comments
how could they be twins if the moms thirty nine and the sister is twenty something
Maybe you misunderstood the story. Jake's mother and his aunt are twins; not his aunt and his cousin. Hope that helps.
Wow that was a great start to this story. Can't wait to read the next chapter
Your a good writer.Having your own website allows you to get fedback and get better faster . Your Aunt Vicky story had 1 unbelievable moment in it. When Jake reached into the bathroom to get her bra off of the floor; very unbelievable to me. Really stupid too. She would immediately look for her clothing when leaving the shower and immediately know where to find it. .Jerking off with a bra is realistic in my mind, but not with one who's owner has just taken it off and will be looking for it in minutes. A small detail I know ,but it caught my attention immediately after I read it. He would have been better off stealing one from her bedroom while she was in the shower, or using his cousins bra instead.
Keep writing. Practice makes perfect.
Make that 2 chapter! you are a greater writer i hate books and was just looking for porn on the internet, but this...well this was just amazing gave me a hard one when aunt vicky started grabbing his cock.
if they were twins i cant believe they hadt seen each other for 15yrs and the idea of pinching her bra while in the shower!glad i only skimmed through this wont be reading the rest
Travel in the US isn't so expensive that identical twins couldn't visit at least during Christmas, and running through an almost-strangers house with your wang hanging out and pinching your Aunt's bra in her own house within hours of meeting her and then having her blow you and get a facial just... stretch the bounds of credulity (even for a porn fantasy site).
It needed a week or so of build up and teasing.
Great story, however on the fifth paragraph near the end you did a switch from first person to third person that doesn't work. "I fished around through the clothes until he found one of his moms bras" I would replace "he" with "i" and "his" with "my".