All Comments on 'A Village Vampire Ch. 03'

So between the last chapter and this one he turns into a killer. Was there a missing chapter or something? Pretty much hoping he gets what is coming to him now.

Thank you Hurbster for your feedback. I guess it shows I added the killer bit at the last minute and not too well. I wanted to make it more horror as this was the category I was writing for. Will see if I can deal with it better on the next chapter. Thank you for taking the time to read these stories and to feedback.

Yeah, he goes from guy trying to cope to complete bastard. And you did it off camera. If we had seen him finally lose control and kill someone it would have been better. And what he did to the husband comes right out of the blue with no hints that his character had changed that much. It's just too sudden a change.

The personality shift was a little abrupt but it is important to recognise that the protagonist no longer human. The Goal posts have shifted and his emergant moral sense is no longer based around our contemporary moral code but the moral conscience of a MONSTER, albeit one clinging to the remains of his humanity.

I enjoyed it. I'd like to see if he can retain his humanity or give in to the beast within.

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