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Pretty damn hot!
Not bad at all for a first attempt. Could use a little more character development but man, the sex was great. And you left it open for more. Go for it! cp
Thanks, cp
Hey cp, bud, I appreciate your help. I'll try to flesh out my characters a little more in the future. I worry about making a story too long. I wonder if people just fast forward to the sex parts or if they actually care about reading lots of character and plot details. I'd like to be able to reveal character details through concise short dialogue and pinpoint description of small actions taken by the characters. I'm gonna work on it! Thanks again, man!
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Hey y'all. I'm a simple Southern Man. I put a story out here for publication on 9/16/2020. It's my first completed story. I've tried to write serious, non-erotic stuff before and don't get very far. William Faulkner I'm not, LOL. I thought I'd try porn since my mind works ...
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