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Click here"—and I suppose you will probably go there through the portal in your backyard." Death set the paper down on the desk and picked up the pen. "Ah, yes. If I draw the gate right here, then I have participated in map making, too!"
"Wait, what?" Mike leaned forward in his chair as Death drew an arched gateway with iron bars. "Death, that's just the gate in the backyard, it doesn't go anywhere."
"You are wrong, Mike Radley. I may not be knowledgeable in many things, but I certainly recognize a portal to the Underworld when I see it." He drew a cartoon skull over the bars. "I assumed you knew this already, which is why I said getting there was easy. If not for that gate, I would have called your task impossible."
Stunned, Mike sat with his mouth open. Could Death be right? Was the unassuming gate in the backyard really the answer to his problems?
"It is very rude to stare, Mike Radley." When Death scowled, the temperature in the room dropped dangerously and the twin fireballs in his sockets went from blue to red.
"I'm not staring, I'm...is this a joke? You're absolutely serious, the gate in the backyard is a portal?"
"Mike Radley, if there's one thing you should know about me, it's that I'm always dead serious." Death picked up his tea and sipped it with a smug grin. "Now that is a proper joke."
I hope you all really liked that scene, because it was one of the more difficult scenes to write. Sofia scenes require a certain amount of respect in their approach, and I appreciate any good feedback you can offer me (for next time).
Thanks to all my beta readers for helping me through this chapter, I am gearing up to start writing the next one in the days ahead. I'm hoping the world calms down a bit in the near future, but my good buddy Death assures me that his sibling is quite the cunt and finds the whole thing very amusing.
As always, don't forget to rate, review or comment. I love reading them, especially when the struggle is real. I appreciate the Lit community and all that it has done for me and would like to reiterate that, at some point, the story of Mike Radley will come to an end.
And when it does, that chapter and all those in between will see these pages.
Take care of yourselves, be kind to each other, and wash your damn hands. Annabelle out.
- COMMENTS
Thanks for this story. I love that the characters are multidimensional. Death is awesome!
I'm loving the comedy you're able to weave through the story. Brilliant. Thanks for sharing
never thought i would say these words, ever, but, i'm really starting to love Death.
Death is a clown it always make me laugh he's a great character in this amazing novel.
Maybe this makes me an asshole too, but I just don't see why Sofia expected that Mike would have any reason or want to... hang out with her and talk to her? When nearly everytime she speaks to him, she is abrasive, belittling and pretty much just radiates that she does not like him at all. I know this act is not how she actually feels, but that does not change the fact that she has been extremely unpleasant to him at any chance, ever since they first met. And I really dislike her for it
The encounter with Sophia reminded me of one thought I've had while re-reading from the beginning. It's not about having a "new girl" that's exciting, it's about how Mike's relationship with them evolves.
I'd be perfectly happy to have more encounters with "underrepresented" members of the house instead of new characters, since they all have their own, special connection with him.
So glad to see Sophia finally getting some more loving... You did a great job of hunting at the buildup and mild jealousy in the last two or three chapters. She's clearly super into him and I'm hoping for more of them in the upcoming chapters.
It doesn't matter if Mike is a slut. He is the main character of the story. Or was. It's going the route of the Witcher or the mandelorian . Start with a male lead then transition the entire thing to a female lead and refocus the story. Sure it may really be about a house for horny monsters but it all started with Mike and took many chapters focused on Mike and his way through it. Now it's not. His scenes are lame. Their scenes go on and on and on. Saying Beth fucjs anything isn't calling her a slut. It's what she is doing without any type of real connection. Just fake connections. Mike actually really does care about some of these connections. They are as real to him as they are with who he is doing it with. Hers are to get her rocks of and is treated as such by the characters that have been with her. Just there to fuck too. Just to fuck doesn't create a good story line. Connections do
I liked the scene with Mike and Sofia. Death is a pretty interesting character.
I have read many books in my time, and I will read many more before I’m done, but I can say without a shadow of a doubt that this is one of the best books I’ve read in this genre. The characters are immaculate, the story is lively and always turning and turning keeping my mind occupied with all of those beautiful threads you keep forming. I savor each chapter and despite me never commenting before and quite possibly never after this, I just wanted to let you know that I fully intend to read every word you have posted on here, for it is just that good.
Yeah. A good rule of thumb is don’t take out stitches until they are “floating”, meaning loose enough they freely move. That means they aren’t keeping the edges of the wound together at all. Scabbing only hides the true condition of the wound and has to be removed before the stitches come out.
Also, if the wound is sufficiently deep, internal dissolvable sutures are used to bring the deep edges together and eliminate the lumen (internal gap. Otherwise you have to use a larger needle to take bigger “bites” when closing the wound, but that often doesn’t close the superficial edges snugly together, creating a worse scar.
Absolutely 100 percent for sure thought that the reason Death spoke so loudly, looked so excited, and was eager to speak with Mike when he got back from the Library was because he was so excited to sit down and ask Mike exactly how much consent was present in the experience he shared with Sofia lol, the tea was absolutely to butter him up, and Kisa was peeking and ran off because Death was all "ah ha! Finally, we can now test our theory of asking whether an action was consensual, by asking Mike now that he has returned" and she was going all "there's no way Death is actually gunna do that omg" and got flustered and scampered
It’s so strange, reading the story now in 2023, and hearing your notes about just beginning of the pandemic. It’s like walking through an erotic museum. Very cool, and as always, great tag lines. -AT
I have taken to not commenting on most of the chapters. The writing is so good that I don't want to take the time away from my reading of the the HFHM..... So, back to the tale!
Sweet cruel cyclopean wench got her much needed and much desrved fucking. Excellent scene. While I'm not into bdsm, that was hot, and rocked both of their worlds.
Methinks Sophia needs a DP. Which Mike could easily have done using the Librarian's staff and his own. Well, maybe next time....
Your “Death” stands comparison to Terry Pratchett’s and he is one of my heroes.
Thank you again.
Is it only coincidence or the war at the isle is the cyclops one? The gare to underworld has been a surprise. I believee the back yard gate will open o remote lands o another pocket world. Annabel's L-space has several cyaracteristics of T Pratcher's one but also it has quite differences, furcer exploration of it is required.
Sofia need to recruit some ofbthe others inhabitans the house as librarians now there is plenty rats and centaurs.
Death is quickly becoming one of my favourite characters. I feel like he could be a little brother to Sir Terry Pratchett's DEATH. (May Terry's soul forever be at peace. And a satirical thorn in the side of whatever stuffy folk run the show over where his soul is these days, keeping them honest.)
Was wondering what that gate in the backyard lead to. Whadya know!?!
Great chapter.
This last chapter is tying some things together (and characters together) that is making the whole story more interesting and believable, even with normally unbelievable characters. It also makes the whole story more interesting. -- Ozarks Jim.
As others have commented, several parts of the BDSM scene went outside my personal comfort zone, to the extent that I’d feel like even if they excited the recipient, they’d be painful for the person doling them out. That said, you made it clear in context that both Mike and Sofia were concerned with what would be going too far. I have to assume that, even if what they were doing/saying felt somewhat uncomfortable to them, they’d use the feedback from their partner (and the knowledge that there was a safe word available) to encourage them to proceed for their partner’s sake.
Not a fan of part of the story but over all the story is still high quality material. Thanks for sharing with us readers.
The sex scene was good, though a few parts swung outside my personal boundaries others were wonderful.
The chapter itself and the world building aspect was grand.
Bad internet smut showing up in the super majestic Library is just hilarious.
Annabelle, how many world's do you inhabit? Your imagination and storytelling are absurdly outstanding. Loved the scene with Sofia and how Mike is becoming more sensitive to the needs of the girls. Still got to resolve Beth and rescue Cecilia.
The discussion about the library saving Internet books was just great, perhaps he'll help Sofia with categorisation to make some sense of all the erotica out there. Must be a whole section somewhere for Literotica.
5⛤
Great moment when we transition from the meta explanation of library mechanics to pulling out the obviously sword from The Order, knowing full well we're in for a "bad things happened" story. Great switch, and a seamless play on existing worldbuilding.
Once again, I don't think I'll ever get tired of the independent characters with their own defined and distinct feelings and agency.
Without adoubt, the best part of reading this series, especially knowing effort nad serious thought want into it.
Loved the scene with Sofia for my part. I agree with Anonymous that Naia's magic could guide him into the dom he needs to be with Sofia, both by action and words (that cum dumpster line for example). That way, you could push things even further without any disrespect, since it's what Sofia wants.
The scene with Sophia was marvelous! You definitely “kept the eye on the prize.“ you showed that Mike is a “strapping Young lad.“ “Spare the rod, spoils the cyclops!.“
Sorry, too many puns came to mine when I read that scene. Lol
You have managed to write the only lite roti a series that I actually read for the story.. And the sex. Not going to be proud about it: the sex is great.
The discussion of what constitutes publishing for the magic library had me in stitches.
please give Asterion some time. I think he's the only character that hasn't really had much personality.
I love Mike and Sofia scenes, my only recommendation is to give Mike better dialogue during his encountera with her, he is always willing to Dom Sofia but his dialogue as a sub isn't natural and I feel like with naias magic she should be able to guide him in ways to enhance his partners experience feeding him words to say at the right moments
Sophie getting fucked by her own Staff, lots of minions would like that chance. Both your sex scenes and humour are brilliant
Not usually a fan of the Sophia chapters (just not into what she's into is all), but Death getting the last laugh was the perfect ending. Also, I assume that somewhere out there, there's a Library with all this very story in it
Sex scene with Sofia was absolutely wild. I liked the way Mike turned the tables on her only for her to turn the tables on him. Brilliant.
I really like the way you describe Death, he is both interesting and amusing. I like the way he interacts with those that can see and hear him. The clumsy way he tries to understand the human world is quite endearing.
In case you missed it. ANNABELLE YOU ROCK!!!!
I love your writing, and Death is my favorite character! Stunningly funny.
Hmm, more on the subject of jealousy... Fascinating. I do like Sophia's scenes, you write her very well. I especially like the dirty talk, even if it weren't in a D/s context. A+ on this chapter.
I've read up to this point in the story in a matter of days and Sophia's sex scenes are my favourite. I'd love to see them take another trip to the vines. I very much enjoyed Sophia being dominant and I was happy when she took control back right at the end.
I am loving your portrayal or Death. I am almost feeling like there is a little of him from Bill and Ted's.
God I love Death here, kinda reminds me of Death from Discworld but with a different flavour. (Not saying you're copying him, I love the flavour you've given him).
I really like Sofia. She is a fun, sexy, complex character. I am hoping she is the first of the Monster-Girls that Mike impregnates! I know, you’ve said that’s impossible. Mike does a lot of impossible things.
That scene has been my favorite so far! I like getting a good look at Death as a Character but I've been hoping for more interaction between Mike and Sophia ever since the Labyrinth. The interplay between her proud nature and the sub/dom desires she feels, so good!
I laughed so much when you poked fun at online stories! Sophia got quite the surprise this time. Well done! Finn
This is probably one of my favorite chapters; other then all the other ones...ha ha ha. You are so eloquent with your writings about characters and their abilities that it is so hard not to wish for something like that to be so real. I really appreciate what you do, thank you...5 stars
Oh gods, that Sofia scene. That hit just about all my kinks. I was sweating by the end of that.
Thank you for your excellent story and I hope that it continues on for a long time. Death has to be one of my favorite characters due to his child like innocence. Literally laughed out loud at the last line of the chapter. Always been a sucker for a good pun.
I thought the scene with Sofia was very very hot, the way control bounced back and forth between them to finish with Sofia lost in lust was very well done
I guess I will pick this chapter as any to start my comment of thanking you. Although I was late to this stories creation I was captivated by it I have had to stop myself (to many times to count) from reading it end to end every chapter till im caught up because I will be so sad its over. I can't understate how much I have enjoyed your character development, seeing each change and become more of what you envisioned and I have to say how proud I am of your work here. I also must admit although I have read from this site over the years I have never once considered the need to register and comment as most of the stories I find the writer has long abandoned but yours was the first I found that is still being written and as such I decided that it was time to give love back to one of my favorite writers of the site. (You) I hope to leave as many insightful and feedback filled comments from this story onward even if I had plenty of things to say before I felt they would get lost in old chapters you may have missed reading and although this is far from current I want to start here in case I'm wrong. I will miss when this series ends but I hope you are only getting started on your carrier of writing either here or anywhere else because I will be happy to follow you wherever. I created my name themed off of your character Lily and I am so happy to have found your writing works of awe inspiring life gripping fantasy and I can't wait to read more everyday I return from work which I feel saps my life away only to have it returned by your books. You are truly amazing and I hope you are still able to see this comment and its not to old to see. Signed one of your newest biggest frans -Romeo
I can't tell you how much I love the conversations with Death! His utter excitement at seeing a map, no matter how rudimentary, created before his very eyes was, like, the best thing I've laughed at in a while! Keep this magical ride going!!
And, as always, thanks for sharing this story with us!
I have been following your story for awhile. There are some very good plot lines. I like your developments, and how they are solved. Of course there are some low points, but that is in every story.
You have good descriptions that make it easy for me to envision the action. Well done, I look forward to seeing more.
Every thing you write is perfect, I can’t stop reading your stories. Please don’t stop.