by darrenr
Loved it. Also, for the record,I also love the fact that even though long, you didnt break it down to a page a week.
Great story. This story is very nicely written, with a nice pace, and you can sense the growing love. Thank You for sharing this fantastic story!
Beautiful and intense and sweet. I feel like Anna was a *little* dense, but it didn't seem impossible.
WOW, by far one of the most erotic romantic stories I have read here. Please keep them coming!!!
That was crafted beautifully. You began with a very powerful and bold move on which you then developed your characters. The tension build up was so compelling and Jake's outburst was perfectly timed and composed. Thank you for one of the finest reads I have enjoyed for some time.
STAR.
Five stars weren’t enough.
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Very funny, too. I laughed out loud, many many times. I thought I’d wake the neighbors.
Doneastwest.-
I think that “Inverted Intimacy” could inspire many a Thesis Paper on
Sociology and American culture, given that we torture kids from when they are about eleven, forcing them to deny there bodily urges for the next ten years . We also refuse to talk to them about it.
Thus, we get Andrew’s cruelty and Jake and Anna’s various shames.
Instead of fun and joy, we get a shutdown. I was brought up Catholic, so I got an extra dose of shutdown.
My atheist Father said, … “ Watch out for any Institution that takes control of your bodily functions. “
Best story I have read at Literotica. I thought Komrad56 was great but this was at another level. More please
I loved the story and its build up. As a writer I found a few places drawn out a bit but not enough that I would take issue with it. I myself have a habit of drawing out scenes and often find a difference in wording makes a mouthful/eyeful into something that flows beautifully. For example I have checked this comment more times than I want to admit and removed and added to the previous sentence about a dozen times. I only bring this up in critique for you to work with and in no way am I saying anything negative about your style. Overall good story, excellent writing, and that ending was perfect.
I loved it. Frustrating in its intensity and so loving in its conclusion. Please write more.
I think this story is great, well written, and sexy. I liked it. At the same time, I ad a strong emotional reaction described below.
I hate Anna. I hate similar events that have happened in my life.
Mating can be so much fun
Acquaintances become friends; friends become lovers; lovers become daddies and mommies.
Although we all knew how it was going to end, it's the journey along the way that makes the trip worthwhile. Great story, by the way.
Great story! I loved their intimate growing and learning! As a stupid teen, I overlooked a chance of something similar, I imagine it would have been something like this!
Who could not be in love with Anna after reading this story? It was sweet, fun, sometimes funny, erotic, romantic, a little bit nerdy and I enjoyed every bit of it!
It looks like I have a new favorite author! Well done!
This story was absolutely brilliant. You made me forget that I was reading a story. You made me care about your characters. You made me laugh. You even made me cry toward the end. An absolute masterpiece! I'd give 10 stars if I could, but 5 will have to do. I can only hope that some of my stories affect readers in similar ways. You are going straight on my Favorites list!
It was delightful. A truly learning experience for the two of your characters. We the reader experienced the trip along with them. Very well done.
Very well written. You have a talent for making perfectly clear pictures out of words.
Wonderful story. Barely noticed that an hour passed by me while reading it.
He felt more like a young boy, and a girly one at that, than a man.
It was laid on too thick with exaggerated emotions and reactions, he didn't feel like a real person, and the dialogue didn't feel All that real.
I usually read the stories quickly- trying my best to not be annoyed by the spelling, grammar, and general poor writing- waiting for the steamy parts so I could reach my own peak of arousal. This one was so well written that I could relate the emotions and thoughts of both Anna and Jake with my own. By the end I was in tears as I saw so many similarities with my own hang-ups and insecurities shared with Anna and Jake, yet inspired by hope as I saw those experiences draw them closer together and finally acknowledging their love for each other. My only complaint is that Anna seemed to avoid directly admitting she loved Jake also, though it is obvious she felt the same way.
2/5
Some people just can't write. I can feel the effort from the author, but the quality is extremely mediocre.
Finished it in 30 mins. Skipped almost everything after first 2 pages.
I thoroughly enjoyed that. It gave me the fuzzy warm feelings, as well as the wet ones. Thanks for that.
Clearly one of the best stories I've ever read her on Lit - if no the best.
Characters develop with emotions as well as arousal - which incidentally also goes for the readers ...
Somewhat silly premise, but lots of good stories have implausible premises. This one built nicely on the foundation it was given to a very satisfying finish - I hope it wasn't an end, and that there's more to come.
Absolutely beautiful. The gentle trip of discovery was delightful to read and experience with them. Thank you!
My bedtime treat over 5 days. Really well done written and a cock tease, but not exaggeratedly so. I love the way it combines sex and real feelings between two adorable people. Thank you so much!
Another long story ending with a guy that shoots a load in less than a minute smh. Tell you what, first 6 pages were good, but geez 7 killed it.
WOW. One of the most amazing stories I have evr read. Kind of hated to have it end.
Lovely tale, well told, with a lot of hope and humor as Anna tries everything to avoid seeing the truth. I was glad when he finally spoke up and was pleased at the end result. A very sweet story and a well-deserved 5*.
Quite possibly and mostly definitely, the best story i've read on Literotica so far. The pace and intensity of this special relationship as it built was beautifully written. Innocent, daring and a fun read. thank you :)
Good but not exceptional. Cannot believe she wasn't aware for so long that he loved her. The inverted nipple issue was handled well.
I've read alot of fiction, both professionally as in part of my job and privately, in my own time alone, and your story has made me feel both happy and sad. Happy because of the way you built up Jake and Anna's story and love they shared . . In Anna's case, EVENTUALLY came to realise, and sad because I won't ever get to feel the one thing I have wished for most of my life, the love and feeling of someone's hand in mine. Alot of things happened in the last couple of pages but that only goes toward the reality of finding out that you are loved . . Truly loved . . by someone unexpectedly and how quickly thing either fall into place or fall apart.
Thank you for giving me 'the feels' . . however much it saddens me.
5 star rating logged
Well paced story that I just had to keep reading, the shaving sequence reminded me of my first wife and I when younger.
This was a great story. It was reminisent of my first real love, I was a senior in highschool and she was a junior. Crazy as it sounds, she was and is 6 months older than me and we were both virgins! We had dated all thru my junior and senior year; we went to the local youth center to dance and hang out with friends, we went to movies, roller skated, and went to the lake with my folks. Nothing out of the ordinary for the early 60's.
When I graduated, my folks asked what I would like to do to celebrate, since I already had a decent car, a good job where she & I worked together,and had been accepted to a local engineering college I asked to go deep sea fishing. My parents said I could ask a friend to go along, so asked my girlfriend. Since we would be chaperoned by my mom her parents agreed. The trip was a success beyond our wildest dreams, we discovered each other sexually and carried on a rather adventurous romance for more than two years.
I don't recall why we drifted apart,but we went our sererate ways but got back together after her first marriage ended up on the rocks several years later. We have stayed in touch on birthdays, a phone call or two, seen each other at class reunions and remained friends for more than 60 years.
We agree that had we ended up together we would have killed each other. She has met my wife of 50+ years and we were able to meet her husband of many years before his untimely passing.
In our time, we learned a LOT about life, love, sensual pleasure and we will most likely love and respect one another as long as we draw breath on this earth and beynd.
Very warm, feel good story. Probably a story line not found in real world, but it was beautiful fantasy. Great job
This story is the reason I read Literotica rather than watch unrealistic porn. The story kept me enthralled and longing for the next page. I found myself tearing up in the big finish and wishing I could trade places with Jake from the start. Well written and well titled.
ABSOLUTELY A GREAT LOVE STORY.
THAT'S HOW LOVE STORIES SHOULD END.
CONGRATULATIONS!
What I want to know is: who taught Jake how to treat a friend so tenderly? XD
That was a lot of fun. A bit silly, in a not-bad-way. Thanks for sharing. <3
Now that was a truly great story! Seemed so real. No mention of a “big fat 10 inch cock”, none of the BS, just a real, sweet genuine encounter between 2 people. Loved it! Probably one of my favorites of all. Thanks and keep writing.
I loved this beautiful sensual sexual story.
The characters were so real I deliberately took three days to read it all.
It was so tender to start. You built up the sexual momentum until………..well I enjoyed my happy ending with the Happy couple Anna and Jake as they discovered
Their own “happy ending” too.
Wow what a trip!!!
Indubitably the absolute best erotic story I have ever read. It's not even a contest; this is a masterpiece! <3
Omg! What patience Jake had w Anna as he helped her get thru her doubts. Rarely have I read such a porn story as a love story. Kudos over n over. Would love to read more🌈👍👍
Reading this has made me feel love in a way that I have never experienced or, at least, had forgotten how it can feel. The love that fills your entire soul, which we humans are capable of feeling, but in my case, I had forgotten was possible. Just like Anna, I feel like I had my first orgasm, but of pure love in my whole body. I will remember the experience I had reading this when life tries to erase the love in my soul.
Thank you, so talented are you.
This is an amazing love story. I feel jealous of Jake. Thank you for writing and sharing this.
Perfection! No other word can describe this story. This is what love should be and so few actually get experience it to this level.
You're writing style is very good. It's slightly unbelievable that these two people could spend so much time in intimate setting without ever being intimate. But you did a great job of creating the building blocks of what would end up being a very solid love for each other. The last scene was by far the best. Not just because it involves sex but because it felt very real. Jake's insecurity was a little bit over the top. But I understand why you needed that element in the story to develop it the way you did. Keep writing, you're doing a very good job.
Great story!! I love the way that you mention how most people are very insecure about their bodies, and the way the characters actually comfort each other and their insecurities. The best story I have read in my 2 years of using this site!!
This was a beautiful story. It pulled me in and refused to let go.my heart jump3d for joy when it all came to fruition, loved it loved it please keep writing
So cute. Sexy and charming. This is pure fantasy but nice to read the paroxysme of the seduction. So slow, it's a dream.
To the author if you ever read this. I think i know the amount of cringe you might have suffered writing the last leg of this beautifully crafted masterpiece among all the arts present here for ahow and deserves a spot right above on top with stories like imperfections. An extremelly well done job
I was hoping for a wonderful consummation like you finished with. Great story of two completely inexperienced people discovering the joy together. Thanks.
This is spectacular. I came here for porn and ended up reading legitimately great romance? You nailed the deeply human, all-but-lost feeling of sex as not a corruption but a beautiful exchange of knowing, lasting love. The binding of souls.
Totally not what I was expecting. Thank you.
A beautiful story, superbly crafted. If you don't write for a living, you should. Now I have to read all your other stories.
The story was great! A little bit of a slow burn, but definitely worth the wait! Well done!
I loved it. It was truly a unique direction that took the two of them on their journey to find love. In truth, I'm jealous. Thanks for letting us into your deeply intimate love story.
Very beautiful actually. Given the hangups people can have about their bodies I didn’t think it was all that far fetched. My virginal bride was bullied in high school - about her large breasts. I think I have successfully convinced her that her D-cup boobs are beautiful and even spectacular! I enjoy them no end! We have been married 30+ years and I still adore her lovely breasts! And believe it or not I taught her how to masturbate! I gave her her first orgasm on our honeymoon and we did not have full PIV sex on our wedding night. Once we did the floodgates of pleasure were opened! Plus I even now constantly remind her how beautiful she is and I show her sexually how much I love her frequently!
So I would have had the couple married before sex but waiting patiently and working up to it actually made perfect sense to me.