All Comments on 'Kelly's Need to be Controlled'

she should be pierced and tattooed as a slut

As you stated, she should be pierced and branded and turned into an obedient sex-slave. Branding is much more permanent than tatooing. She should be made to make love to other women, licking both their pussies and assholes and then willingly giving her male masters rim jobs. She should learn to crave deviance.

She shoud be tatooted, trained, & controlled

The story was good but it changes from "Kelly felt" to " you felt" and that was a bit off putting.

I agree with changes. I was weird to change from third person to first person in the middle of the story.

Master's gonna whip pierce and brand her eh? I think this story needs to go on. What's her hubby going to think? Where is she gonna end up? Was Master even serious about another time? I hope you go on...

There was a spot where the POV went strange. Seemed like the narrator hanged.

On the other hand you were able to go extreme without losing reality.

Good work.

Why these straw man husbands who are complete idiots? Go a little deeper, cheap slut isn't sexy.