by pocketrocket
I just love your writing style. It is just not possible to stop reading until I reach the end of each chapter, and even then I crave more. Time does not seem to exist while reading this tale. The way you move back and forth from her and him with such ease is wonderful. In fact, while reading both chapters, I found the analogy of an intense tennis match with long volleys to be quite appropo. The movement from one point of view to the other is much like the graceful movement from player to player as they move the ball across the net. I do so hope this story continues for some time to come. It has quickly taken over the top of my watch list for recurring stories on Literotica.
Why is the waiter letting Sean do the doggybag duties, at the table, no less? That seems inconsistent with the quality of the restaurant depicted.
pr, I not only enjoy your imaginative crafting of this story but also how deeply you are revealing your characters and developing their relationship. And your use of introspection in the thought quotes contrast well with the dialogue.
The coment about 'People Bags'? (I would never serve restaurant food to my dogs!) My wife would also insist on putting the excess food in the container herself. She did not trust a busy staff to be as meticulous about it (okay, anal!) as she was.
I've enjoyed the flow and sense of anticipation of the story so far. Willing to wait for sex as the story should build before that. Good job!