All Comments on 'Lost Race: A Story in 3 Lengths'

But I liked the second one the best. There was more focus on the act of foot licking and toe sucking in the longer version, which definitely makes it more enjoyable to me. Also, the ending with Sarah wanting to convince him to do it again was magnificent.

The addition on how the other girl forces her toes into his mouth and how they conspire to keep him sucking overtime is really hot.

Thanks OneAuthor. Adding to the length allows for more details, which I also like. Sometimes I fear I overwrite, but I'm generally not as fond of the quick, super-focused stories. I want the build up and the details. And that also allows me to tag on more detail at the end, such as Sarah's wish for a second encounter.

Thanks for the feedback.

Thanks Vanquished. The longer version allows me to add more story elements. So it isn't just this one act that happens. It also allows me to have a few different perspectives which help add depth, in my opinion. We get Gerry's side, but having the extra length allows for Katie to be involved and we see how the girls work together.

Thanks for the feedback.

Nice idea and very nice short story :)

I would love to see another one, which consists of the complete story (Katie and the action itself also included - since they are the main triggers) in different lengths.

I know it's hard to keep such proportions among the stories in that way but I believe that even 10-15% decrease in word count may help.

Especially for someone like me who can't stop stretching sentences or paragraphs.

Thanks.