All Comments on 'My Sister's Deception Ch. 08'
by wordsinthedust
- 45 Comments
The title of this comment says it all. This story gets better with each new chapter. Hope you are planning/writing more!
Another great addition to the series, as always a perfect 5 in my book. Thanks for your time and effort.
but you need to post chapters faster and PROOFREAD better. for instance on the beach you said kris drained her beer but then she took a sip of the same beer in the next paragraph. either it was a magic refilling beer or you failed to proofread and you didn't use a good editor LIKE ALL WRITERS SHOULD. do a better job proofreading next time and always use a good editor before posting.
Thank you for taking the time to write - your story gets better and better with each chapter written...
Can not wait to get Kris, mom and family involved...
Gotta have a marriage of Megan, Jen & Kyhl, then babies :)
Also requesting An Uncomfortable Situation next chapter and future chapters on this one.... I know they take time and we all appreciate your writting... A big Fan
Kris was, in fact, drinking from a magic beer bottle... okay, no, she wasn't...
one of the hardest things for any writer to do is proofread their own material... clearly, I missed a spot... my apologies...
as for using an editor, I havent searched for one in a while, but not too long ago, I emailed several who'd listed themselves as willing to edit, and I never heard back from even one of them... but, yes, an editor would help a great deal...
You have done a really great job, hope you will continue to add to this seies.
this story just gets better and better. i'm really curious to see where you end up with all the girls and lucky, lucky guy. thanks.....
First of all: Awesome story love it. I just want to know if there is a fixed schedule to the new chapters, and what does the "n" mean in the chapter 8 description?
Good stories. Keep them coming. I suggested two wifes for Kyhl, but he seems to get three. Works for me.. =)
I will have to read all of your stories if they are near as good as this one. Bravo!
You can't just leave a great story unfinished there. You should keep up the good work. I hope Jen and Kyhl end up finding a way to get married and have kids. toby9790.
This is a fantastic story. I hope there is more to come. I'd like to see how Jen, Khyl, and Megan plan on living together.
I would love to see more of this story line. Great how things are coming into play, please don't leave it here. Looking forward to more, I just made this my favorite series. :-)
Great story! I've spent this whole night reading through all the Chapters and have been loving it, BUT I hope it is not going to turn out with Kyhl and Meg getting married; it would totally ruin it! Because with the mentions of Meg's parents liking him and thinking he'd make a good son-in-law, and if I read it correctly it sounds like they know Kyhl and Jen are siblings?; the discussions about kids and commitment; no man in the works for Meg, etc it sounds like you are hinting and moving the story that way. It's erotic as hell having them include Meg in their love affair, and even adding Kris, but with the way you have developed Kyhl and Jen's relationship and cultivated their growth it would really tarnish the purity (ironic word here, but you know what I mean) of their love and relationship.
*sigh* of course this is my own opinion and desires on how I want it to turn out for them, but you are the author...so I will just say I am hoping =) and will wait with bated breath and a keen anticipation for the next chapter(s).
Really would like to see where the relationship go's between the three of them.
This is a great story. I still check your site regulary for updates on this. When's the wedding, and when are the babies coming?
To those people who would post negative comments, no one is forcing you to read this, go somewhere else.
Beautiful story by the way
Please complete the story and tell us if Kyle ends up with 3 pregant sisters.
that was one of the best stories i have ever read on here, if not the best. i'm not joking when i say this either but i could really see this as a successful film minus all the hardcore fucking scenes for obvious reasons. more chapters would be great, but i like the way you have ended it. well done, amazing author keep up the good work :)
been over a year and no new chapter time to drag your lazy ass out of bed and write another chapter. good so far but as said before the begining was a little unrealistic and almost ruined the story and it seems very strange that there has been very little said about kyle and jens parents they were barley mentioned in chapter two or three.
Jen, Meg, Kris will they all get pregnant ? More plzzzzz
... perhaps. The whole work revolved around the tension with Meg, really, and it would have been good to see the undiluted aftermath without throwing her kid sister into it, that just felt a bit forced.
i really liked this story.... i REALLY HOPE you keep going with this. ..nicely done
Actually need to head South on Park Rd. 22; turn off (left) on the road just before the Padre Island National Seashore toll booth entrance.
Why the hell they told Meg parents about them being brother and sister? And all this treesome is crap and ruined story.
Was going well upto the point where medhan got involved with the siblings and then her sister as well hownthe hell were they suppose to find out whether they love each other with the others there. Kyhl might as well fucked Carrie and Allyson and anybody else avaible. Spoilt it with Meghan and sister.
A foursome now, how ridiculous. This means two people get hurt.
But the now lesbian sisters Meghan and Kris have each other. Their Mom and Dad will be so disappointed.
The story is now out of control, a bit silly.
So, I was going to jump in with another geographical correction just like the last chapter. But I began gauging reaction to this one by reading through the comments first. That's when I found the comment by "South_Texas" posted 8 years ago. They totally beat me to it!
"Nude beach near Corpus isn't North (unless there's another I don't know about)
Actually need to head South on Park Rd. 22; turn off (left) on the road just before the Padre Island National Seashore toll booth entrance."
Exactly...North is Portland, Ingleside, Aransas Pass, and Port Aransas. There's no public access to San Jose Island and Matagorda Island, but theoretically you could go nude on those beaches if you have a small watercraft of some sort to make it there. You certainly cannot drive a car to it and walk over a sand dune!
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As for the story, I think that I would have been happier with it remaining a Polyamory Three-way. I wasn't expecting it to morph into a Harem story. 😳 But unlike most of the other people who have commented, I can buy into it and enjoy it still. Changing directions hasn't ruined it for me, but it was unexpected. With that being said, Kris is still a good choice for the next person to join in. I think that I would have probably approached it differently in the back story though. Instead of having Kris experiment with bisexuality in college with a classmate, I would have had Meghan seduce Kris the summer before she becomes a College freshman and meets Jen and Kyhl. Meghan having a summer romance with her own sister because they were fixing to be separated because of school would have paved the path, not only to Jen and Meghan becoming lovers, but her ease in accepting the incest between Jen and Kyhl.
Still 5/5 from me!
Veering dangerously close to fuckfest territory. Khyl and his three sisters going to be the final outcome? I feel like Kris doesn't really belong as he doesn't really have much of a connection or history with her, but I suppose it could work given time. Still, Khyl is going to be exhausted, both mentally and physically, trying to take care of three women; two was already pushing it.