All Comments on 'With All My Heart'
by usmclass
- 7 Comments
Marsh was a lucky man. But sounds like he needs a second ambushing.
You didn't find it to be your favorite style. I'm sorry. It was intended to be "just sex" but it took off on its own and morphed into a revealing romance.
And believe me, if I have my way, Marsh will get many more ambushes. You just mat nit read about them here.
The sex and situation were both hot as were the descriptions. I did find the crossing over between first and second person was annoying and confusing. I was inspired to look you up and read you after reading your latest piece. That piece is more refined which means you are making good progress. Please keep writing.
WELL, like Shakira sings in Zootopia, "I messed up. .." and "nobody learns without getting it wrong". I am learning. . There are rules here that I was not aware of.... lime each speaker appears in their own paragraph. And "person" sometimes befuddles me.... at times I feel the need for the reader to observe what is going on. So I haven't figured out how to incorporate that yet. But I'm getting help. Oh! Authors are talking to me too....and say that I pay my shrink top much attention😊
I loved this story.....so hot.......you made me come really hard!
Just a perfect story for me
That was very passionate and intense! It was like I WAS Marsh! You MIST continue this story! They HAVE to find each other again! I beg you!