Shadow of My Dreams

I wholeheartedly concur when post of anonymous, the whole of your works has been most enjoyable and I thank you as well!

Jerry aka Redsled07

I just finished reading all of your stories.

I enjoyed them very much and really appreciate the work that went into them.

Thank you!

Damn, wish you could get some empathy and comfort.

... works too.

You have some beautiful, evocative lines here.

The second stanza is replete with 20/20 hindsight; I might have changed the third line as follows:

I am anything inside them

I am nothing outside

A shell of what I am, what I have done

The shame of memories forgotten

The fourth is almost painful to read, especially the first and last lines. I might have rewritten it as follows, if it were me:

Talents I let decay

Decisions never unmade

Pain invades my dreams

A life missed wastes away

(the decisions would have had to be made for 'unmade' to make sense)

And in the last stanza I think deleting the "the" in the last line would really improve the flow and lyricism of the entire stanza, and the poem.

I shall be what I will

A fool that misses nothing

Invaluable to some

Though truth eludes them

Your poem expressed similar feelings to the ones I addressed in my Bliss, A Purgatory. You might enjoy that one.

It was a very lovely read, though philosophical and sad. Which ones of us made perfect choices every time?