All Comments on 'I'll Be Home for Christmas'
by ilikeitlikethat18
- 55 Comments
It was a decent enough story good build up and execution but could someone honestly care about someone who clearly is such a douche? Overall excellent story I just didnt care for Ryder.
The author is right, it does take some time to work up to the crescendo, but the complexity of the characters and the emotions delivers a uniquely tailored experience. It's excellently written and the finish is magnificent. Well done!
I love stories with a slow build u p, only hating ryder what a douchebag! Seriously who could love someone like that, I ho pe he changes. But really the story was just fantastic, can't wait what's next
It is fucking impossible to like Ryder! He is a real asshole and definitely not as smart as the author made him out to be. I like Kenzie she is awesome. Ryder just sucks!!!
This is a well written story but the characters are totally not likable. you spent way too long on the build up and not enough time on the happening. In general I found this story boring and not worth my time. The story should have be only half as long as it is.
People on this site seem so Judgmental of stories and stuff after deciding to read a long story... They complain. I really likes the story
The beginning warned everyone about it being long and it's an incest story. siblings have much worse rivalry than the way Ryder treated his sister, plus he seemed genuinely apologetic. For someone suppressing feelings over a long time, it makes sense. Also there's a part 2 coming so maybe that'll explain more. Overall its a strong story that uses its length to realistically build up to sex, making sense of Ryder's behavior.
It all makes sense with how they act. They are likeable in their own way. Wouldn't seem real if Ryder was so likeable and this was a fairytale incest story. The buildup was great. Hope you continue! =) keep it up
When Adrian walked in Omg I like nooooo I was so shocked like come ppl lock ur doors
The length of this story isn't a problem for me, since I don't much care for the wham, bam, thank you ma'am stories....I mean they serve their purpose, but they're not really my cup of tea. That said, I'm left a bit vexed for lack of a better term, because after reading this, I just don't quite know how I feel about the story....other than a bit confused. I have to agree that Ryder is pretty much acting like a complete ass, and I feel very sorry for Kenzie. I guess in the end I'm wondering where you're planning to go with the story from here. I truly hope you plan to continue it, because this would be just about the worst ending possible for this story.
You're an excellent writer though!!! I like the way you tell a story. I look forward to reading the rest of it.
I loved the dynamic you set between these two and the amount of emotion present! You did a great job, and I'd love to see more from these two!!!
That was a great story. I would love to read more about these two
I'm SOOOO happy you wrote another story! Your last two were my all the favorites and I always hoped you'd write one again. More please! Just excellent!
I have never ever left a comment before - but I registered just to say how fantastic this story is and please please please continue it :)
Best story I have ever read! I loved it. You are a very good writer.
I love this story!! You are a amazing writer and i cant wait to read more!!!
When are you going to give us the next part of the story????
This was a great story well written! Look foward to the rest!
fuck, you would not know how many times I've read this. It makes me so goddamn horny. you need to continue this story so fucking badly.
Wow please continue this story! This was a really good story line and you were right...the building up to it made it awesome.
When you going to add more; to this it needs to have a happy ending.
It's a great story and you cn't just leave all us readers hanging. So please continue at least one last chapter to tie up all the unanswered question.
Everyone's support and enjoyment of the story is more than I could ask for. Thank you guys so much. I know it's not everyone's cup of tea and a lot of people see Ryder as an asshole, but please try to read into the more subtle parts of the story and understand! Either way, I'm glad so many people could enjoy it. I'm writing another installment of the story for the summer contest that just opened. Please keep an eye out for it and vote! xoxo
I just have to say.. WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW! Sooooo good. I want more. You are such a good writer. Dont let anybody tell you differently! PLEASE WRITE FAST! I absolutely loved it! Cant you tell? It was so sensational, just reading it made me wet. PS.
IM A GIRL F.Y.I.
please write the next part!! iv been waiting and waiting and waiting!!!
While I appreciate all comments and suggestions, leaving such a rude comment with no constructive criticism and all sorts of assumptions is just rude. It's perfectly fine not to enjoy a story. If something doesn't meet your personal taste that doesn't make it a poorly written story. I don't doubt my writing skills, I write for a living. And judging by how many people enjoyed and favorited my story, you anonymous commenter are in the minority. Think again before spreading such negativity.
Thanks to everyone who has enjoyed it. I'll write another chapter soon!
I have the new chapter/installment out for the summer lovin contest: //rosa-blanca.ru/desixxxphoto/s/cum-visit-for-some-summer-fun please vote 5 stars if you like it!
but wtf is the brother best friend doing in story,don't get why he needed to be there
"Fuck me, fuck me, give it to me." This is all story. Why you can write to long? All story like hardcore movie, If you wanted to become a writer, you have need a brain.
Your writing and grammar is fantastic:-) I am glad i read this peice of literature, it was very satisfying thank you;-) I hope this chaper has a second. I'll cheak in a few days please respond to Zell.
Look he/she is a good writer its nkt like most stotys that go straight to SEX it waited a bit and went to incest Thats what I like about best story ever :3
your one of the first ones to get a 5 star for a story .... good job !!!
I just can't imagine little Kenzie not only finding that kind of thing but liking it? So I'd rather assume that at the time you wrote this, maybe you didn't have a complete picture of what the term means. Other than that, that was a really great story and I hope you keep writing.
This story is too long for it to start with an IDIOT (her) and an absolute JERK (bro) is she beyond stupid? WALK girl END OF BAD STORY 1* just to vote
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It was the kind of tension I'd only ever felt when reading erotic novels or watching a particularly well made snuff film.
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Snuff film?! Sounds like she has bigger issues than worrying about her brother wanting to fuck her brains out, rofl!!
The story was written really well! Very engaging! Brother is definitely a douche, lol! You'd think by the time she hit eighteen she would have figured out why her brother acts like that and other brothers don't, hehehe ;).
She lets him off the hook a lot too! 'You wanna tell mom I smoke pot? Knock yourself out! I'm sure she'd love to know her star number one child also smokes pot, takes uppers, downers, drops acid, does ecstasy, drops it in girls drinks, and fucks every skank he can get his dick in. Me? Im just an occasional pot smoking innocent lil' virgin, even if Im number two.'
Heh. Well kinda a shitty ending but I guess the proverbial hook is set for the next chapter! ...she shoulda snuck downstairs and hooked up with his buddy on the sofa! Hehehe ;)
You have a great writing style! I loved the story, ignore the haters. Please keep writing!!
I think this was very well written and i was hooked. I was sad that it wasn't continued. Please write more.
It's only a shame that you didn't or couldn't continue the story
bro was such an asshole it would be impossible for ANY author to turn it around so I just stopped at page three. bad story 1 star
But the characters both suck big time. Bro is a complete asshole and lil Sis is a moron for taking his abuse. Hey girl put on your big girl panties, get some balls!!! She needs to leave and tell Mom her little star boy is a fucking jerk and why... But...it's very well written 5 stars. Too bad a second chapter wasn't written.
"you weren't lying about being a virgin." while sliding 2 fingers inside her? all virgins i ever met had a blockage called a hymen. otherwise good story. keep writing.
Awesome story! 5 stars. The continuation of the story is "CUM VISIT FOR SOME SUMMER FUN"
Pathetic story attempt. Seriously Pathetic.............. do you resemble the characters you wrote about, if so don't want to know you.............