All Comments on 'Mad Monday Pt. 02'

WTF? Body switching? Talk about confusing with no background as to how it evolved.

Then a wife philandering in threesomes and other guys in which body again.

The story was a difficult subject to convey off the mark, leaving me, utterly confused and frustrated (laughing or crying)

Using asterisks for emphasis is lame and distracting. Pretend you're a writer and do it correctly. I'll even go so far as to teach you how to do that because I know it's not common knowledge, but I won't pretend I know the technological explanation for why it works. It has to do with HTML or something.

Use italics to emphasize something. It's non-intrusive and smooth and won't interrupt the readers' attention.

Before a word or phrase you want to emphasis (add inflection in the reader's mind as they read), put <em>, then at the end put </em> (please add an extra space after that and before the next word for spacing, since italics take up more space than nonitalics). This italicizes everything between, and those won't show up on the submission once published. Similarly, if you replace the em with b in both, it will bold. You can also do the same with center instead of em or b, and the selection will be centered on the page. I use this for chapter breaks or headings.

You can test this out, play with it, experiment. Open the submission page on the site, and in the body box, type stuff with the different formatting commands, and hit the Preview&Publish button.

You're welcome.

I tried but this is one of those that hurts my stomach because I was trying to see a revelation but everything seems to have just went deeper down a dark hole.

I'm really hoping they don't swap back. I'm enjoying this.

Mmm... Yes this started well .. but it's ending ever deeper in a pointless exercise of self deprecation that no one really appreciate, unfortunately...

Only got two pages into part 1, barely skimmed part two. Really wanted to read the nonexistent part 0 where the how & why of the body swap was explained.

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This whole story stands on his irrational psychological revolusion (attraction) to the BODY of his daughter and makes it impossible for me to get into. It's his wife for <deity's> sake, to which he has many different connections. Is his long marriage solely and totally based on her appearance?

Something I missed in my initial attempt to make sense of the sophomoric attempt at narrative:

(Direct copy/paste from Miriam Webster)

Is irregardless a word?: Usage Guide

Irregardless was popularized in dialectal American speech in the early 20th century. Its increasingly widespread spoken use called it to the attention of usage commentators as early as 1927. The most frequently repeated remark about it is that "there is no such word." There is such a word, however. It is still used primarily in speech, although it can be found from time to time in edited prose. Its reputation has not risen over the years, and it is still a long way from general acceptance. Use regardless instead.

After pasting that proof of substandard English usage by this submitter, I realized that spellcheck agrees with both Webster and me. One would think a "full-time erotica author" would make a better effort at seeming to be one, but the submission itself screams the opposite of that claim.

I don't understand the direction of this story. I'm all about suspended disbelief when reading erotica but this feels like it's been written with the intent to aggravate the reader. I can believe they somehow live in a world where body swapping is real but the dad pisses me off. I can believe the mom had always been a secret slut. I can believe the daughter somehow had no friends even though she's a perfect 10. But this dad is just a mess. "Okay, you can skull fuck yourself on my cock but I'm absolutely NOT going to cum!" Like wtf?

Love seeing more! Keep it up! I love getting to experience the conflict Andrew is going through. Way too many body swap stories are just "we switched bodies, we fucked, it was great!" and there is no conflict or drama or tension. Of course he should be conflicted! He's confused about all of this, and it's *his own daughter!* I love being inside his head as, one by one, his objections fall away and he accepts his own dark desires. I cannot wait to read more.

I read this when you posted on your other site. I remember you saying you had a Patreon exclusive sequel on Patreon. I looked through and couldn’t find it. Could you inform us how to find it? And/or will you be posting it here?

I like that it's a little stretched and filled out.

God, the husband is kind of pathetic and the wife is a new level of manipulative and crazy